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Snow Flakes On Your Hair

Snow flakes on your hair Are moistening your dryness With petals of affection In light golden gown You tread the path of dry leaves Closed doors and windows behind Patches of disease In the flowers and moonlight Will you show your candle-light Too many horses In our modern chromosome Will your loving hands tame them Snow flakes on your hair Our times are getting grayer Do you have a new prayer ____________________________________________ 31/12/2016 Choka in the Form of 5-7-7 Form C Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Broken Wings

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Abdullah Alhemaidy

Date: 1/12/2017 5:10:00 AM

Wonderful read! Bless you Mr. Gupta :)

Probir Gupta
Date: 1/12/2017 5:27:00 AM

Thank you ...

Afzal Nusker

Date: 1/9/2017 7:02:00 AM

Beautifully written, Probir. I have never seen a Choka like this before. A 7 and congratulations.

Probir Gupta
Date: 1/9/2017 10:23:00 AM

Thanks ... Your couplets, as I have already said , has been wonderful, and is very rightly at the top .... Congratulations ...

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 1/4/2017 3:59:00 PM

Exquisite poem, Probir. The last stanza was so moving, a beautiful crescendo to a lovely poem. Your pen has that golden ink pouring out still. Love the poem, my friend. May the light of love guide your path to peace.

Probir Gupta
Date: 1/4/2017 7:08:00 PM

Thank you ...

Sunita U.D Palawon

Date: 1/1/2017 11:08:00 PM

Simply loving...so much bound in each word. Well composed lines friend. GL :)

Probir Gupta
Date: 1/2/2017 5:40:00 AM

Thank you ...

Eileen Manassian

Date: 1/1/2017 9:29:00 PM

lovely way to end the poem....Do you have a new prayer. I liked the repetition of snowflakes on your hair...you brought us full circle from the beginning of the poem till the end. Hope your new year is off to a great start.

Probir Gupta
Date: 1/2/2017 5:42:00 AM

Thank you ... as for 'start', comments reserved!

Eve Roper

Date: 1/1/2017 4:51:00 PM

Prayers , for tribulation to end and snowflakes to cleanse. Good luck in the contest, Probir. Happy New years and many more to come with fullfillment to all our prayers. Hugs Eve

Probir Gupta
Date: 1/2/2017 5:42:00 AM

Thank you, Eve ...