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Slavery

redemption is not forgiveness ~ just one less hostage down the pawnshop

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Tom Woody

Date: 4/1/2025 9:04:00 AM

Redemption is everything

David Kavanagh
Date: 4/1/2025 2:11:00 PM

You can get everything down the pawnshop! even a booyah!

Tom Woody
Date: 4/1/2025 1:26:00 PM

Pawnbrokers are LOSERS! (uh, can I get a booyah?)

David Kavanagh
Date: 4/1/2025 9:25:00 AM

Haha Not if you miss pawnbroker’s deadline!!!

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 8/9/2023 9:23:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. A powerful Monoku write. Have a great day with your win.............

David Kavanagh
Date: 8/9/2023 10:51:00 AM

Thank you Paula, you’re very kind stopping by today, I’m delighted with the placement, cheers David

The Situation

Date: 8/5/2023 1:34:00 PM

Those sins are being paid for as we speak. Yet those of today their time will come. Christ left a command not a request.

David Kavanagh
Date: 8/5/2023 2:02:00 PM

I’m agnostic myself, so not in a position to attribute sin around, you may have misinterpreted my Monoku, or perhaps brought another dimension to it, which is great, thanks so much for stopping by TS, cheers David

Sotto Poet

Date: 8/5/2023 9:33:00 AM

A magnificent Monoku, David. It possesses a remarkable quality, exquisite aesthetic appeal, and a profoundly poetic essence. Truly, redemption and forgiveness are distinct, the former merely marking the liberation of one captive from the clutches of the pawnshop.

David Kavanagh
Date: 8/5/2023 9:54:00 AM

Indeed Lasaad your comment is eloquently put, makes one wonder what true redemption actually is, does it always fall short of forgiveness, I can only go on what I see, and it certainly seems that way, cheers David

Susan Ashley

Date: 8/5/2023 8:34:00 AM

Dear David, once read, your deep, rich monoku continues to expand in one's heart and mind way beyond the confines of the poetic page. So elegant in its thought-provoking expression. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

David Kavanagh
Date: 8/5/2023 9:03:00 AM

Thank you Susan, indeed that was always my intention here, I was unsure if enough information was provided, but judging by your and others feedback, I believe the right amount of balance was achieved, cheers David

I Am Anaya

Date: 8/5/2023 8:33:00 AM

You can compensate descendents, however true forgiveness won't be on the table. It's up you to redeem yourself, and up to others to find forgiveness. Great metaphor, David! :)

David Kavanagh
Date: 8/5/2023 8:53:00 AM

I’m delighted people are getting this one Anaya, I was hoping the metaphor would have real meaning, thank you for finding it here, cheers David

Lin Lane

Date: 8/5/2023 8:06:00 AM

Each part of this Monoku is an expression that could stand alone, but together they blend your thoughts rather ingeniously, David. They're commodities to be bought and sold.

David Kavanagh
Date: 8/5/2023 8:38:00 AM

Thank you Lin, since the beginning of time people have been used as commodities, a practice still very much alive today, just like at the pawnbrokers you may redeem, but won’t get much forgiveness, cheers David

David Kavanagh

Date: 8/5/2023 3:26:00 AM

For Constance’s S word contest