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I am not retired, I am too young And too broke with too many dreams, I have promises I did not make hung Around my neck, and often screams At my potential to go ahead But every thing I touch lies dead. I paid my dues and went to school Did it all right supporting common law While gatekeepers invisible made the rule Building walls and growing claw It's not my fight for material right I am better at watching hawks in flight. I'm better at letting words seed my brain With images of trees, a fight is worth more For eternal things, even in the siorm of pain That in the lonely night cries on the shore Like waters in the wind. Water makes roots But dead branches make no fruits

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Date: 1/23/2010 8:01:00 AM
Congrats on this selection, L'nass. Everyone to his/her God-given ability. I agree, "building walls and growing claw" is a thirsty way to go. Love, daver
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Date: 1/20/2010 12:15:00 PM
Many congrats on your featured piece this week. Rgds Janette
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Date: 1/19/2010 8:31:00 PM
This is a wonderful piece, congrats on your well deserved feature. keep writing. Your poetry friend Adeleke
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Date: 1/19/2010 3:24:00 AM
Dear L'nass. Powerful raw emtions pour out in this introspection. Thank you for sharing your thoughts. lainie
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Date: 1/18/2010 6:08:00 PM
Thought provoking poem. Nice use of imagery and rhyme. Congratulations on being featured this week. Keep up the good writing. Wishing you continued success. Karen
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Date: 1/18/2010 2:39:00 PM
As always, your poems are stunning. I am glad this was featured, as I missed it earlier. Congratulations on this one being featured...... And once again, L'nass, your wonderful poem on Haiti, touched me deeply. I hope all is well in your own neighboring country, and that you keep safe. God Bless your Haitian neighbors, my heart is with them.
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Date: 1/18/2010 12:34:00 PM
Many congratulations on your poetry being featured this week L'nass >> James
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Date: 1/18/2010 3:32:00 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved poetry being featured this week L'nass. I hope you have many more. Have a wonderful week. Love, Carol
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Date: 1/17/2010 11:58:00 PM
Congrats on your feature poem this week L'nass.Rgds Brian
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Date: 1/17/2010 10:11:00 PM
Congratulations L'nass on being featured. A truly great write. Best Wishes Always, Bill
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Date: 1/17/2010 9:01:00 PM
Congrats on your featured poem of the week on the Soup and for your many winning poems in the recent contests.. well written every one.. luv.. Linda-Marie..
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Date: 1/17/2010 7:22:00 PM
nicely penned, you are a featured poem this week!! smiles for you!
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Date: 12/7/2009 2:06:00 PM
Love this poem, take a look at my poem, Fertile Mind, love Simone
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