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showers

My room, the suite, seemed too small.
I felt like I’d been in my room forever.
I’d developed a scratchy sense of stuckness
and a fresh, itchy awareness of dust particles
floating in the stifling, still air that made me
want to stop breathing in so much.

But I didn’t, categorically, have the energy
to get up and focusing seemed like a lot of effort.
I had a big midterm test, first thing this morning
and it laid me to waste, mentally. I think I did well
but it was a feat. Whenever I feel lifeless and weak,
I start to fear I’m coming down with something.

But then, everyone’s tired. The suite seems unnaturally
quiet, as if no one even has the energy to command
our ever-listening AI to play a playlist, so silence
ruled by exhausted default. It’s as if a low-pressure area had
descended to hold off a brush of refreshing ozone and rain.

Could I rouse my posse of symbiotic sort-of siblings
for an outing somewhere - like Toad’s bar - just across the street?
My door was open, so I called out, rather weakly, “Let’s go out!”
Someone, (Lisa sprawled out on the red corduroy couch?)
groaned listlessly from the common area. “My treat!” I updogged.

Five minutes later, it was showers all around. I love a good shower.
A shower’s where I ponder over the big questions, because
answers seem to come quickly there. I imagine I’d be wise
beyond words if I had a house with a waterfall running through it,
like one of those amazing, Frank Loid Wright masterpieces.
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Songs for this:
The Duke Is Gone by Chuck Senrick
Cannock Chase by Labi Siffre
Copyright © | Year Posted 2024


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Date: 10/27/2024 10:26:00 AM
Well you could always try marry DT he has a waterfall in his tower on 5th Avenue, but you would need a very strong stomach, much stronger than the one needed for your opening stanza lol! Toad’s bar sounds like you made the right choice Anais, cheers David
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David Kavanagh
Date: 10/28/2024 2:25:00 AM
I know that Anais, hopefully the majority of voters turn him down too :)
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Anais Vionet
Date: 10/27/2024 9:30:00 PM
I'd never say yes to anything DT related, David, never.
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David Kavanagh
Date: 10/27/2024 10:43:00 AM
Is that a yes?
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Anais Vionet
Date: 10/27/2024 10:41:00 AM
DT, PleZ =P
Date: 10/27/2024 6:07:00 AM
Well, my showers only last five minutes so no time to brainstorm. I know someone who's known for taking two hours showers. You could create an opus in that amount of time
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Anais Vionet
Date: 10/27/2024 10:30:00 AM
On the average class morning I have to keep it brief as well but it still works. I'd prune like a 90-year-old in a 2-hour shower.
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