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Dim empty tunnel thundering sounds fill my head Fast midnight tube approaching - am I ready to jump ... suicidal thoughts abounding SECOND EDITION OF WAYRA Poetry Contest Sponsored by Nette Onclaud Written for contest - not from personal experience! 8/16/19

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Date: 8/22/2019 11:53:00 PM
Congratulations my friend. Hugs Eve
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Date: 8/22/2019 5:05:00 AM
Congrats on your podium finish, Jan. Well done.
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Date: 8/22/2019 7:58:00 AM
Thanks so much Line:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 8/22/2019 12:55:00 AM
Congratulations Jan for your podium win in Nette's contest. Well done! With kindest thoughts Ann xx
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Date: 8/22/2019 7:58:00 AM
Thanks so much Ann:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 8/21/2019 8:31:00 PM
The picture conveys sinister thoughts to me Jan and it is easy to see why your poem contemplates suicide. Congratulations on your win! I didn't have enough time to write for this one. xxoo
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Date: 8/22/2019 7:56:00 AM
Thanks so much Connie, i much prefer humour but the image made me think deep and dark:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 8/21/2019 4:04:00 PM
Jan, congrats on your win for this dark poem. Nicely penned. Hugs, John
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Date: 8/22/2019 7:55:00 AM
Thanks so much John it makes a change for me to write deep and dark:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 8/21/2019 3:53:00 PM
Back with congrats Jan. Tom
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Date: 8/22/2019 7:55:00 AM
Thanks so much Tom:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 8/21/2019 2:54:00 PM
An excellent interpretation of this visual prompt, Jan. Hope those suicidal thoughts evaporated before the train's arrival. Congratulations on a merited win. Hugs // paul
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Date: 8/22/2019 7:55:00 AM
thankfully its fiction for me ... and we only have steam trains here !!:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 8/21/2019 2:44:00 PM
grreat, eerie interpretation of the theme, jan... huge congrats and thanks for posting this for my contest!
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Date: 8/22/2019 7:54:00 AM
Thanks Nette I could only write dark for this contest that is what the image made me picture in my mind:-( hugs jan xx
Date: 8/19/2019 3:03:00 PM
Wow, an adventure of the precarious kind... Nicely done, Jan!
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Date: 8/22/2019 7:53:00 AM
Thanks so much Kim:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 8/19/2019 10:36:00 AM
It's in the human nature DNA to be so negative in the mind and spirit...Depression is real... every human being gonna be DOWN sometimes.. the fix is when you're down git up don't lay in this situation git up rise above it... be encouraged in ALL things... James :) grand write Jan...
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Date: 8/22/2019 7:53:00 AM
wise words indeed James, I am lucky I don't suffer with depression but know many who do:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 8/18/2019 5:57:00 PM
good one, Jan. This kind of thing is so hard for me to do something amazing with!! You did great with the theme.
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Date: 8/22/2019 7:52:00 AM
Thanks Andrea:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 8/17/2019 7:50:00 PM
G'day Jan … it's hard at times to understand how things can get so bad that to end it all is the only solution, but it happens so frequently - very sad indeed - Lindsay
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Date: 8/17/2019 7:55:00 PM
it is a very sad scenario Lindsay makes you wonder what drives someone to the edge that they contemplate taking their own life:-( hugs Jan xxx
Date: 8/17/2019 9:12:00 AM
I thought "wait! Is this Jan?" So sad and deeply dark for you. But then I thought "how wise to stop where she stopped. Yes, this is Jan." Nice one.
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Date: 8/17/2019 9:51:00 AM
I much prefer humour but like your Trixie I have no control over my muse:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 8/17/2019 8:17:00 AM
Jan, wow, you are reaching deep into your soul these days, wonderful for the contest, a winner to me ~
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Date: 8/17/2019 8:37:00 AM
Thanks Constance, you inspire me to go out of my comfort zones and write deep dark and sad:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 8/16/2019 10:25:00 PM
This is great Jan! The dark picture fits perfectly with the dark thoughts in your poem. So well done! : ) xxoo
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Date: 8/17/2019 2:23:00 AM
Thanks Connie, all I could see was 'dark' when I wrote the poem I started it as soon as I saw the contest but only finished it yesterday... just too busy enjoying life at the moment!:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 8/16/2019 4:19:00 PM
Captures the mood with deft dark prose, a worthy entry for the contest, Jan.
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Date: 8/16/2019 4:43:00 PM
Thanks Michelle I'm not sure what Nette will think of my effort:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 8/16/2019 3:51:00 PM
very powerful poem, shame many do jump in front of trains for a quick death! your words leave an impact long after the read, good write! good luck in the contest~ hugs :)
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Date: 8/16/2019 4:42:00 PM
I wish I could have come up with a happier theme:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 8/16/2019 2:12:00 PM
Sadly many do Jan, strange though I always feel for the train driver having to live with a suicidal person. Good luck. Tom. PS, have emailed you.
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Date: 8/16/2019 4:41:00 PM
It must be so traumatic for anyone involved in these sad events Tom, I read f such tragedies in the press:-( hugs Jan xx
Date: 8/16/2019 1:43:00 PM
Well done Jan. Powerful for sure. Good luck in the contest :)
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Date: 8/16/2019 4:39:00 PM
Thanks Heidi:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 8/16/2019 11:57:00 AM
- ... a bad choice ... no jumping ... powerful suicidal thoughts, Jan - Great written ... best wishes in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 8/16/2019 1:14:00 PM
No jumping here my friend:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 8/16/2019 11:49:00 AM
Hope you'll not try that, Jan. Well writ though. Hugs xo
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Date: 8/16/2019 1:12:00 PM
You know me Victor lol I rarely drink alcohol and we don't have any underground trains on our little Island, just steam trains:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 8/16/2019 11:35:00 AM
a bit of humor, a bit of mystery, a bit of a twist at the end. Excellent, Jan; best of luck in the contest.
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Date: 8/16/2019 1:11:00 PM
Thanks Reason, I didn't mean for it to come across as humourous:-( hugs jan xx
Date: 8/16/2019 11:16:00 AM
WOW JAN, for never having any personal experience you sure hit the nail on the head! Excellent imagery!!
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Date: 8/16/2019 1:11:00 PM
Someone I know (who is an alcoholic) contemplated it when she was very drunk , thankfully she never carried it out Bobby :-( hugs jan xx