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Serenity

 

As a peaceful wind pushed long and free
Simple love had arrived in perfect time
With a song of jubilation rolling pure through the valley
A seed of love took flight in summer winds  free

Simple love had arrived in perfect time
As I lay naked upon ancient rocks of graceful light
A seed of love took flight in summer winds free
Gods grace in delicate strokes touched me

As I lay naked upon ancient rocks of graceful light
With a song of jubilation rolling pure through the valley
Gods grace in delicate strokes touched me
As a peaceful wind pushed long and free 

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03-17



Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 7/29/2017 6:03:00 PM
Beautifully-written Pantoum, Rick - you have such a command of this form! Loved it - congrats on your placement, my friend! :-)
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Date: 7/28/2017 1:23:00 PM
Excellent Rick! Congratulations on your most deserving first placement! : )
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Date: 7/28/2017 9:46:00 AM
A gorgeous piece, congrats on your win and top placement.
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Date: 7/28/2017 6:58:00 AM
I absolutely love your poetry...I remember this! Beautiful. Thank you
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Date: 3/15/2017 10:46:00 AM
I love pantoums Rick! one of my favorite forms you mastered it...thank you and congrats :)-luloo
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Date: 3/14/2017 10:23:00 AM
Very nicely done Pantoum, Rick, ... Congratulations on your win.. ~* Hugs Eve
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Date: 3/18/2011 9:00:00 AM
A very gentle, uplifting patoum, Rick. I like the image of God's grace stouching you in delicate strokes. So many wonderful images here. Love, Carolyn Soup mail in a second
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Date: 3/18/2011 4:30:00 AM
Serenity was a very enjoyable read for me ^Rick. Hope you have a wonderful day and a great weekend also. Love, Carol
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Date: 3/17/2011 7:19:00 PM
Your theme is great and the words lovely, for myself, I would capitalize those lines, and I agree shorten those long lines, I noticed a type in 3rdd verse, it is a little tricky but you are doing very well~~
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Date: 3/17/2011 5:01:00 PM
Thank you Paula!!!!!
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Date: 3/17/2011 3:35:00 PM
Reads very beautifully Rick .. your lines seem to be in order of the Pantoum .. for perfect assurance check it against Paula's example poem for her contest.. good luck my friend.. and happy birthday..luv..
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Date: 3/17/2011 3:31:00 PM
Thank you Andrea~I think I will write some more of these soon !!!~great challenge~love to you with a sprinkling of light.
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Date: 3/17/2011 3:26:00 PM
Rick,I like how this one has shorter lines than the other one did. It's a beauty!
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Date: 3/17/2011 2:55:00 PM
ooh sensuous, definitely "sigh" material
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Date: 3/17/2011 2:17:00 PM
Fixed Paula, Thank you
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