Serenity

As a peaceful wind pushed long and free Simple love had arrived in perfect time With a song of jubilation rolling pure through the valley A seed of love took flight in summer winds free Simple love had arrived in perfect time As I lay naked upon ancient rocks of graceful light A seed of love took flight in summer winds free Gods grace in delicate strokes touched me As I lay naked upon ancient rocks of graceful light With a song of jubilation rolling pure through the valley Gods grace in delicate strokes touched me As a peaceful wind pushed long and free ______ 03-17

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Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 7/29/2017 6:03:00 PM

Beautifully-written Pantoum, Rick - you have such a command of this form! Loved it - congrats on your placement, my friend! :-)

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 7/28/2017 1:23:00 PM

Excellent Rick! Congratulations on your most deserving first placement! : )

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 7/28/2017 9:46:00 AM

A gorgeous piece, congrats on your win and top placement.

Lu Loo

Date: 7/28/2017 6:58:00 AM

I absolutely love your poetry...I remember this! Beautiful. Thank you

Lu Loo

Date: 3/15/2017 10:46:00 AM

I love pantoums Rick! one of my favorite forms you mastered it...thank you and congrats :)-luloo

Eve Roper

Date: 3/14/2017 10:23:00 AM

Very nicely done Pantoum, Rick, ... Congratulations on your win.. ~* Hugs Eve

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 3/18/2011 9:00:00 AM

A very gentle, uplifting patoum, Rick. I like the image of God's grace stouching you in delicate strokes. So many wonderful images here. Love, Carolyn Soup mail in a second

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 3/18/2011 4:30:00 AM

Serenity was a very enjoyable read for me ^Rick. Hope you have a wonderful day and a great weekend also. Love, Carol

Constance La France

Date: 3/17/2011 7:19:00 PM

Your theme is great and the words lovely, for myself, I would capitalize those lines, and I agree shorten those long lines, I noticed a type in 3rdd verse, it is a little tricky but you are doing very well~~

Rick Parise

Date: 3/17/2011 5:01:00 PM

Thank you Paula!!!!!

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 3/17/2011 3:35:00 PM

Reads very beautifully Rick .. your lines seem to be in order of the Pantoum .. for perfect assurance check it against Paula's example poem for her contest.. good luck my friend.. and happy birthday..luv..

Rick Parise

Date: 3/17/2011 3:31:00 PM

Thank you Andrea~I think I will write some more of these soon !!!~great challenge~love to you with a sprinkling of light.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/17/2011 3:26:00 PM

Rick,I like how this one has shorter lines than the other one did. It's a beauty!

Francine Roberts

Date: 3/17/2011 2:55:00 PM

ooh sensuous, definitely "sigh" material

Rick Parise

Date: 3/17/2011 2:17:00 PM

Fixed Paula, Thank you