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Sensing a Naive Victim

From the start her ears itch of his proud words of how strong seeks for opportunities to prove he can stay long all that matters is to put friendship suffering a loot yet all she wants is his heart to sing a lovely song.

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Elaine George

Date: 2/8/2016 11:20:00 PM

Beautiful sentiments in this poem, dear Funmom. Thank you for sharing. Elaine

Funom Makama
Date: 2/16/2016 8:56:00 AM

Thank you so much Elaine

Duke Beaufort

Date: 2/8/2016 4:14:00 AM

Human nature and needs are very interesting subjects. You are spot on as per usual.

Funom Makama
Date: 2/16/2016 8:55:00 AM

Thank you so much Duke

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 2/6/2016 11:37:00 PM

Thank you for the kind reply

Funom Makama
Date: 2/16/2016 8:55:00 AM

You're welcome Lindsy!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/6/2016 7:58:00 PM

Fun to see this one, Funon. If you can improve the syllable count, you will do better with limerick form. Thanks for your sweet comment on my poem today.

Funom Makama
Date: 2/16/2016 8:55:00 AM

Thank you so much Andrea, I have done that and if you re-visit them, you;ll notice I have done a lil change on their syllables. I did a lil research and reading on Limericks and I am glad to know that there is no limit to the syllable count, nevertheless, it should be uniform for any Limerick... So I have done the adjustments Thank you once again dear Dietrich

Sara Kendrick

Date: 2/6/2016 5:13:00 PM

"even when knowing all she wants is his heart to sing a lovely song" What a wonderful friend who would only want the best for their friend..I enjoyed reading your work..Thanks for the visit to my page..Your comment was uplifting..Sara

Funom Makama
Date: 2/16/2016 8:52:00 AM

Thank you so much Sara

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 2/6/2016 8:29:00 AM

Is it bad, to have a man sing a lovely song. :) Funom, Love the title and read. LINDA

Funom Makama
Date: 2/6/2016 9:24:00 AM

No my dear Lindy.... That is in fact what is expected of him, but what he wants is something so immediate that he may not have the patience to actually sing such a song heartily. Thank you vry much for your contribution...