Sedoka Contest

The Nightingale

Like a nightingale,
   she sits in her gilded cage.
         So whatever could be wrong?
She has a sad tale.
     Though inside she seethes with rage,
           she sings the loveliest song.

Hate is in her heart;
     revenge in her pretty head
           as she plots the perfect crime.
She plays her sweet part;
     while her captor feels no dread,
           the nightingale bides her time.

Jan. 12, 2016

(oops, I had edited my metaphor to be a nightingale instead of a dove as I originally intended, and I forgot to change the last line. I hope this makes more sense to people now that I have changed the last line!)
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A   Avatar
January 28, 2016 at 9:03 PM
Andrea, Congrats on your interesting win. Love LINDA :)
Kendrick Avatar
January 25, 2016 at 1:10 PM
Congrats on your winning work..I enjoyed reading it..Thanks for stopping by..Sara
Tagore Avatar
January 20, 2016 at 7:39 PM
Congrats Andrea ... this one is completely different... Hugs, Bobby
Crisci Avatar
January 20, 2016 at 11:12 AM
Congratulations, Andrea. I like this one a lot. She's a wise bird, plotting the perfect crime! Thanks for your comment. Have a wonderful day. Hugs, Andrew.
Callus Avatar
January 20, 2016 at 9:56 AM
I loved this entry as soon as I read it! Pleased to be back with congratulations on your first placed win, Andrea! ~ paul
Allison Avatar
January 19, 2016 at 7:20 PM
Dropping back with my congrats Andrea:-) hugs Jan xx
Inman Avatar
January 19, 2016 at 9:06 AM
Intense Andrea.
Kimathi Avatar
January 19, 2016 at 6:40 AM
Congrats once again, Andrea for a top placement yet in another contest! ;-) You rock!!! ****
May Avatar
January 18, 2016 at 6:33 PM
Congrats on a great win Andrea
Canerdy Avatar
January 18, 2016 at 1:10 PM
Congratulations on your first-place win, Andrea! Janice
A  Avatar
January 18, 2016 at 10:30 AM
Andrea, Congrats on your "SEDOKA FORM (Rhymed) winning poem." love SKAT **
Scars Avatar
January 18, 2016 at 9:54 AM
Andrea, thank you for being a part of my contest :) Congrats on your top placement! *smiles* -luloo
Callus Avatar
January 18, 2016 at 5:04 AM
Very clever, and makes a change from the other entries that I have seen so far. Looking forward to a follow-up once revenge has been delivered! *** paul
Walker Avatar
January 17, 2016 at 7:04 AM
Beware of the beauty that silently sits. Great metaphor sis.
Maverick Avatar
January 16, 2016 at 11:38 AM
Enjoyed stopping here to read this Andrea It works on a few levels for me.'
Sankey- Lewis Avatar
January 16, 2016 at 8:18 AM
The nightingale is also a win, and you already know. Haver a lovely weekend.
Nunez Avatar
January 15, 2016 at 5:59 PM
Hmmn... I don't know much about this type of bird...will have to look it up...you made me curious with this characterization, Andie... All the best in the contest! hugs
Dietrich Avatar
January 15, 2016 at 6:02 PM
she's a pretty caged bird with a beautiful voice, but revenge will be hers!!
Marcum Wong Avatar
January 14, 2016 at 9:38 PM
Okay Andrea...now I get it. Thanks...the dove had me puzzeled. Haha. It is very clearly a metaphor. Very nice!
George   Avatar
January 14, 2016 at 6:32 PM
I have never tried this form. I must check it out. This sounds terrific to me, Andrea, regardless the form.
Anish Avatar
January 14, 2016 at 5:51 PM
A dangerous nightingale to be sure. I am going to look up this form on the "soup". Hope you and yours are O.K. Please let me know what you think of my latest! Peace & Love Matthew Anish
Sage Avatar
January 14, 2016 at 5:06 PM
well written Sedoka Andrea...
Smith Avatar
January 14, 2016 at 3:44 PM
Hopefully her time is short and she can fly free soon.
Andresen Avatar
January 14, 2016 at 2:33 PM
- Andrea great written, touching ...I feel :) - Good luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Austin Avatar
January 14, 2016 at 1:56 PM
Hi, Andrea. Great Sedoka. I'm scarce of late. I'll be back, but am writing a book of short forms, Sedoka included. Am going back through all my poems and writing some new ones. I'm short winded these days due to eyes and so will stick to the short forms. When I finish the book I'll send you a copy if you'd like. I'm rehashing some of my stuff because some don't measure up to classic form. Love, daver
Marcum Wong Avatar
January 14, 2016 at 1:01 PM
A bit different than your usual Andrea. Very dramatic and deep. Soup mail
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