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The Nightingale Like a nightingale, she sits in her gilded cage. So whatever could be wrong? She has a sad tale. Though inside she seethes with rage, she sings the loveliest song. Hate is in her heart; revenge in her pretty head as she plots the perfect crime. She plays her sweet part; while her captor feels no dread, the nightingale bides her time. Jan. 12, 2016 (oops, I had edited my metaphor to be a nightingale instead of a dove as I originally intended, and I forgot to change the last line. I hope this makes more sense to people now that I have changed the last line!)

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Date: 1/28/2016 9:03:00 PM
Andrea, Congrats on your interesting win. Love LINDA :)
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Date: 1/25/2016 1:10:00 PM
Congrats on your winning work..I enjoyed reading it..Thanks for stopping by..Sara
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Date: 1/20/2016 7:39:00 PM
Congrats Andrea ... this one is completely different... Hugs, Bobby
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Date: 1/20/2016 11:12:00 AM
Congratulations, Andrea. I like this one a lot. She's a wise bird, plotting the perfect crime! Thanks for your comment. Have a wonderful day. Hugs, Andrew.
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Date: 1/20/2016 9:56:00 AM
I loved this entry as soon as I read it! Pleased to be back with congratulations on your first placed win, Andrea! ~ paul
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Date: 1/19/2016 7:20:00 PM
Dropping back with my congrats Andrea:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 1/19/2016 9:06:00 AM
Intense Andrea.
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Date: 1/19/2016 6:40:00 AM
Congrats once again, Andrea for a top placement yet in another contest! ;-) You rock!!! ****
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Date: 1/18/2016 6:33:00 PM
Congrats on a great win Andrea
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Date: 1/18/2016 1:10:00 PM
Congratulations on your first-place win, Andrea! Janice
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Date: 1/18/2016 10:30:00 AM
Andrea, Congrats on your "SEDOKA FORM (Rhymed) winning poem." love SKAT **
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Date: 1/18/2016 9:54:00 AM
Andrea, thank you for being a part of my contest :) Congrats on your top placement! *smiles* -luloo
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Date: 1/18/2016 5:04:00 AM
Very clever, and makes a change from the other entries that I have seen so far. Looking forward to a follow-up once revenge has been delivered! *** paul
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Date: 1/17/2016 7:04:00 AM
Beware of the beauty that silently sits. Great metaphor sis.
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Date: 1/16/2016 11:38:00 AM
Enjoyed stopping here to read this Andrea It works on a few levels for me.'
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Date: 1/16/2016 8:18:00 AM
The nightingale is also a win, and you already know. Haver a lovely weekend.
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Date: 1/15/2016 5:59:00 PM
Hmmn... I don't know much about this type of bird...will have to look it up...you made me curious with this characterization, Andie... All the best in the contest! hugs
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 1/15/2016 6:02:00 PM
she's a pretty caged bird with a beautiful voice, but revenge will be hers!!
Date: 1/14/2016 9:38:00 PM
Okay Andrea...now I get it. Thanks...the dove had me puzzeled. Haha. It is very clearly a metaphor. Very nice!
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Date: 1/14/2016 6:32:00 PM
I have never tried this form. I must check it out. This sounds terrific to me, Andrea, regardless the form.
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Date: 1/14/2016 5:51:00 PM
A dangerous nightingale to be sure. I am going to look up this form on the "soup". Hope you and yours are O.K. Please let me know what you think of my latest! Peace & Love Matthew Anish
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Date: 1/14/2016 5:06:00 PM
well written Sedoka Andrea...
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Date: 1/14/2016 3:44:00 PM
Hopefully her time is short and she can fly free soon.
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Date: 1/14/2016 2:33:00 PM
- Andrea great written, touching ...I feel :) - Good luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 1/14/2016 1:56:00 PM
Hi, Andrea. Great Sedoka. I'm scarce of late. I'll be back, but am writing a book of short forms, Sedoka included. Am going back through all my poems and writing some new ones. I'm short winded these days due to eyes and so will stick to the short forms. When I finish the book I'll send you a copy if you'd like. I'm rehashing some of my stuff because some don't measure up to classic form. Love, daver
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Date: 1/14/2016 1:01:00 PM
A bit different than your usual Andrea. Very dramatic and deep. Soup mail
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