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Would that I could be made beautiful again after being broken, withered and wrinkled. My aged parts, especially my heart, given new life like pieces of sea glass gently washed upon an amber shore. No more complaints then would I offer to my coffer filled with miseries. Free from clicking knees and blurry vision preventing me from seeing clearly, things I cherished and lost. On waves, I'd be tossed. Would that I could be made beautiful again like frosted glass in pastel hues from the deep, I'd be prized and valued enough to keep. No longer would I weep over jagged shards with ragged edges that I have sadly become. If ever again, beauty is found in me, let waves deliver my body as bounty from the sea. Weathered skin, emeried smooth by grains of sand, would find me renewed when I emerge, purged like sea glass, polished until I shine.

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Paul Willason

Date: 7/17/2024 5:58:00 PM

Just a gem of a poem Lin....so many good lines to feast on, your creative imagination at full play delivering a work that explores a classic theme with youthful freshness...the subtlety of your pen defies age my friend.

Lin Lane
Date: 7/19/2024 11:07:00 AM

Paul, you may take a seat at any of my banquets. LOL Seriously, thanks a bunch for your kind review of this one. I'm kind of partial to it.

Craig Cornish

Date: 7/13/2024 11:34:00 AM

Lin, this is the kind of interpretation that not only enters contests but wins them. I agree - I toss my hat in now and then, for poops and giggles but that game, if I may, is for those young & still perhaps not broken or don't admit it! Your analogy/metaphor here is a gem and it truly shines...funny/weird in how sometimes prompts bring out not perfections, but those imperfections that remind us of what we're really made of.

Lin Lane
Date: 7/14/2024 4:10:00 AM

Good morning, Craig and thank you so very much for your thoughtful review of my sea glass verses. You asked for metaphorical and with that in mind, I wrote of human flaws, our brokenness and how like broken shards of bottles become sea glass, I wish we could become beautiful once more. If I still entered contests, I would've joined yours. Thanks again for the read and kind comments!

Daniel Caplin

Date: 7/12/2024 12:43:00 PM

What an outstanding poem Lin , so many wonderful lines, especially this verse "Would that I could be made beautiful again like frosted glass in pastel hues from the deep, I'd be prized and valued enough to keep. No longer would I weep over jagged shards with ragged edges that I have sadly become". I absolutely love this poem. Danny

Lin Lane
Date: 7/12/2024 1:02:00 PM

Thank you ever so much, Danny. I'm pleased you offered your thoughts on which verse you particularly liked.

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 7/12/2024 11:01:00 AM

I really enjoyed reading your lovely "sea glass" write. Great Ending... Your ending is heaven for me where we will shine. One time I got some sea glass walking on a beach. It was pretty... "Good Luck" We both did this one. Have a great day..............

Lin Lane
Date: 7/12/2024 1:00:00 PM

I'm delighted by every comment you leave for me, Paula. Oh, you found some! I hope you kept it. Thanks very much for your thoughts.

Zyrool Gifford

Date: 7/12/2024 10:14:00 AM

A beautiful poem, Lin. Love your thoughts on aging, my friend. Wishing you a beautiful day and wonderful weekend.

Lin Lane
Date: 7/12/2024 12:59:00 PM

Thanks so very much for your wonderful remarks, Zyrool.

Jay Narain

Date: 7/12/2024 10:07:00 AM

Great poem. Masterpiece writing.

Lin Lane
Date: 7/12/2024 12:58:00 PM

Thank, Jay. I appreciate such a fine comment.

Tom Cunningham

Date: 7/12/2024 10:07:00 AM

You can count me in too Lin, it's amazing how mother nature hones all the sharp edges away from glass. Tom

Lin Lane
Date: 7/12/2024 12:58:00 PM

Come on in, Tom. It truly is amazing how beautiful it is and every piece I've ever found has a history. I just wish I knew what it was. Thanks! Enjoy the rest of your weekend.

Mark Koplin

Date: 7/12/2024 9:24:00 AM

This is excellent poetry Lin. We can't stop the aging process, but your spin on it as becoming sea glass is a nice thought.

Lin Lane
Date: 7/12/2024 12:56:00 PM

No, we can't, Mark. I'm glad you found time to read this one and do a little posting of your own.

Jan Allison

Date: 7/12/2024 9:10:00 AM

What a joy to read Lin, shame its not for the contest. I'm not a fan of being in the sea so despite the fact i could come out 'polished and beautiful and rejuvenated, I've got to stick with being old but not yet too wrinkled to be in need of a lift and definitely not for fishy trout lips lol lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane
Date: 7/12/2024 12:56:00 PM

I'm never sure what Craig might be after, but he wanted metaphorical writes, so IF I were still entering contests, I may have added this one to his 35. Thanks for liking this one, Chick. NO trout lips!

Deb M

Date: 7/12/2024 7:09:00 AM

Lovely Lin…..what a beautiful poem truly! ‘Made beautiful again’ this poem really touched me Lin!! Debx

Lin Lane
Date: 7/12/2024 3:36:00 PM

No, I think we'll just sort of walk in slowly and float around until eventually we're made new again. LOL

Deb M
Date: 7/12/2024 1:02:00 PM

So we dive in as sea glass? Right lm coming over….lets go swimming Lin!!!

Lin Lane
Date: 7/12/2024 12:54:00 PM

I remember saying I'll not venture for a swim in their territory as long as they don't slither onto land... but as sea glass, I don't think they're likely to bite us on the arse. lol

Deb M
Date: 7/12/2024 11:21:00 AM

As long as no sharks….lm in!! X

Lin Lane
Date: 7/12/2024 8:37:00 AM

Good afternoon to ya, Deb. Thank you for wanting to become sea glass with me. Let's dive in together.

thriveni c mysore

Date: 7/12/2024 5:21:00 AM

Beautiful thoughts. 'polished until I shine' so very nice! Happy writing.

Lin Lane
Date: 7/12/2024 6:57:00 AM

Thriveni, thank you for reading my lines and leaving your kind review.