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written for sea glass contest sponsored by Craig Cornish.

 

In the ocean of lyrical words and mermaid metaphors, poetic pirates steal the gold that glistens; floating in eloquence, flowing with diamond tears, but within inked skulls and bones names of those that thieve in paper silence~ are etched across sea-glass with searing blood, as trinkets I once wore are tainted, and buried within hermit shores. There, footprints echo and mirror truth of the unseen, rippling with stolen sunsets and salt-soaked swords, while soliloquies of the sky, kiss the marine armor of sapphires… I ponder, what would the sun now sing to the moon? Are we aimless vessels ferrying venom? Are jewels of sincerity, lost within melted memories? Perhaps, from lagoons of lies, we learn~ life beneath the bluest of waves, breathes grotesque rhymes woven in ice-cold green.

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Date: 8/30/2024 6:03:00 PM
Dear Ink, your poem is thought-provoking and rich in vivid imagery and creative metaphors. Your second line sets the narrative with poetic finesse "poetic pirates steal the gold that glistens". Where there is artistry there will be treachery and theft. The tone of your poem provides a strong rebuke for those that taint the realm of poetry. I adore your questions especially "I ponder, what would the sun now sing to the moon?/Are we aimless vessels ferrying venom?" -such soulful introspection that leads to an impactful finale. Amazing! Congratulations for your win in Craig's contest. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan
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Date: 8/21/2024 12:31:00 PM
Dearest Inky, what amazing use of a metaphor as you "ponder" life's ephemeral questions in "stolen sunsets" and "salt-soaked swords!" Your gift for creating memorable images just shines throughout every line! Words line up to do your bidding! I am inspired by your poetic gift that flows so easily from you. Thank you for this marvelous poem. Congratulations on your win, dear friend. Blessings of life and light to you. Samzy~
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Date: 7/28/2024 4:29:00 PM
Beautiful visuals are weaved throughout your descriptive write.
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Date: 7/25/2024 2:58:00 PM
Hmm do I see overtones of this poem touching on the use of AI? That is pretty cool.loved the line about ferrying venom. Congrats on your win, Ink.
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Date: 7/24/2024 3:36:00 AM
i like it when you write in this kind of way, condensing the piece a bit and lengthening the lines slightly..a lot of alliteration in this, but it doesn't take over the whole poem - i like 'salt-soaked swords' - some lovely images - congrats on your win in craig's contest!
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Date: 7/23/2024 5:42:00 PM
IE, you're making me think of the sea glass as a memento of poetic phrases. This seems to take a dark view, but I'm enjoying how you contemplate the meaning of life for us. Not such a simple question, but at least the glass lasts a while and we can wonder what it represented. All smiles here!
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Date: 7/23/2024 4:27:00 PM
Congratulations enjoyed reading especially the first line!
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Date: 7/22/2024 11:02:00 PM
Love that first stanza. “In the ocean of lyrical words and mermaid metaphors, poetic pirates steal the gold that glistens;” Many blessings
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Ink Empress
Date: 7/23/2024 10:29:00 AM
So kind of you dear eve, thank you so very much for your generous support
Date: 7/22/2024 2:13:00 AM
Oooo that opening line papi!! ocean of lyrical words and mermaid metaphors, poetic pirates steal the gold that glistens.. yaaas alliterations!!! etched across sea-glass with searing blood, as trinkets I once wore are tainted,… mmm exactly!! what would the sun now sing to the moon? Are we aimless vessels ferrying venom? Are jewels of sincerity, lost within melted memories? Oooooooo child !! Love the brilliant phrase of questions.. from lagoons of lies, we learn life beneath the bluest of waves, omg the last line is freaking genius!!! breathes grotesque rhymes woven in ice-cold green. Gorgeously woven papi!!
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Date: 7/23/2024 10:30:00 AM
Ah thank you papi! Always
Date: 7/22/2024 2:06:00 AM
An interesting weave here Dear, Ink. A theme that needs to be spoken about more often. The theft is now an open trade fair. And even the ones that say they borrow do not give credit and it makes me wonder. "poetic pirates steal the gold that glistens; floating in eloquence, flowing with diamond tears." Stealing people's tears and happiness. That's a gold and an asset, one else should be able to take. "Are we aimless vessels ferrying venom? Are jewels of sincerity, lost within melted memories?"
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Date: 7/23/2024 10:30:00 AM
Thank you so much sweet tonye, so kind of you, appreciate always your thoughtful comments truly
Date: 7/22/2024 1:57:00 AM
You have a clever way with words, from start to finish! Amazing!
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Date: 7/23/2024 10:49:00 AM
Thank you so much i appreciate your kindness
Date: 7/21/2024 7:22:00 PM
You had me at the very first line, explosive ink on the very subject theme of tainted poetry, stolen, just blows me away, Empress. "etched across sea-glass with searing blood". Metaphorical and in touch with todays true events. Winning entry, methinks ~xhugs
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Date: 7/23/2024 10:51:00 AM
Awn thNk you so much dear kind anaya. I appreciate your thoughts and kindness always
Date: 7/21/2024 6:04:00 PM
'Poetic pirates stealing sunsets of gold', Very nicely penned
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Date: 7/23/2024 11:02:00 AM
Thank you so much for reading and commenting dear joseph. Grateful
Date: 7/21/2024 3:30:00 PM
jewel of sincerity, that is what you are, :)
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Date: 7/23/2024 11:02:00 AM
Awwn and you are too thank you sweet rose for your kindness
Date: 7/21/2024 2:07:00 PM
a gem of a poem shining through its stirring language and action- packed images ... very nice, ink!
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Ink Empress
Date: 7/23/2024 11:06:00 AM
Thank you so much dear nette
Date: 7/21/2024 11:53:00 AM
Deep ending, love that- "life beneath the bluest of waves, breathes grotesque rhymes woven in ice-cold green" such a description.... <3
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Ink Empress
Date: 7/23/2024 11:07:00 AM
Awwn thank you sweet paige
Date: 7/21/2024 8:39:00 AM
A unique take on this prompt and you have done it on a theme, that I would not have imagined... Very clever indeed.. The exploration of the tension between genuine creativity and the act of theft, alongside its reflection on memory and truth, provides a thought-provoking and immersive wordplay that many will agree with... I think you have spoken for many on this site others who have had poems stolen... "poetic pirates" is a creative statement and use of alliteration... I hope they dont make you walk the plank.... BOL in the contest
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Date: 7/23/2024 11:11:00 AM
Thank you silent one for understanding and for feeling the depth of my write im always grateful for your kindness
Date: 7/21/2024 8:01:00 AM
from lagoons of lies, we learn~ oh yes, loved this truism. We seem to wallow in lies and evil actions. Loved your poem, my friend.
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Date: 7/23/2024 11:11:00 AM
Thank you always dear victor
Date: 7/21/2024 5:28:00 AM
I think pirats are poets, the poem is beautifully written, very enjoyable, you made me think to the movie pirats of caraib, do'nt know why, great work my friend
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Date: 7/23/2024 11:16:00 AM
Ys i had pirates of Caribbean as theme in my mind altho i watched it long time ago…
Date: 7/21/2024 2:10:00 AM
What would the sun sing to the moon . Good question … I’m the mermaid loving this
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Ink Empress
Date: 7/21/2024 2:15:00 AM
Awwn thank you dahlin
Date: 7/21/2024 1:56:00 AM
This is an insanely clever way to highlight the pain of AI and plagiarism! Truly a poem of emotion should be written by the one who has genuinely felt it - even if they feel it by empathy. There isn't true value in conversing with parrots who don't understand or feel the sentences they've uttered... My brain is going off on a tangent now thinking about crossing a parrot and a fox - as I don't like being knowingly mislead much either. Back to the poem - great work, good luck with the contest :)
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Date: 7/21/2024 2:14:00 AM
Dear dd, i feel you, as i think the same, and i share your views on plagiarism and ai, makes me wonder, are they testing us? Those parrots and foxes haha good one!! Thank you im so very pleased that you liked it. I tried being simple and not use too many adjectives etc .. this was a quick one. I hope craig will like it too
Date: 7/21/2024 1:33:00 AM
Wow! Now this is proper use of the pen! I do love your use of color , alliteration and composition design! My favorite lines are “ There, footprints echo and mirror truth of the unseen, rippling with stolen sunsets and salt-soaked swords, while soliloquies of the sky, kiss the marine armor of sapphires…” You will do well in the contest! Good luck not that you need it for you have skills!
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Karen Jones
Date: 7/21/2024 4:02:00 AM
I’m sure he will like it Inky!
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Ink Empress
Date: 7/21/2024 2:10:00 AM
Awwn and i wish i can rhyme effortlessly lik you and so many. Free verse is easy for me . This is a quick poem. And i dont know if Craig will like it but i tried being simple haha with less adjectives. Lets hope craig likes it dear karen. Appreciate you always sweet soul
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Karen Jones
Date: 7/21/2024 1:35:00 AM
I wish I could freestyle like this! My brain rides the train of rhyme unfortunately lol. I hope to grow.
Date: 7/21/2024 1:15:00 AM
The curse of AI and plagiarism and its long term consequences for the true poets. That’s my take on this beautifully written piece IE. Well done. Cheers - Gary
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Date: 7/21/2024 1:33:00 AM
Ah dear gary yes thats exactly what i was writing about in this. And whats sad is ai stole our lines and lines from poets like Shakespeare etc: so its still plagiarism using ai. Because we are asking ai to generate something from stolen words. Thank you so much for reading. I appreciate your support always

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