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Screamed Free Five Words

The breaking seemed to happen so easily. Childish giggles, a new pretty dress, seemingly innocent tickling games! Then came "This will be our little secret" accompanied by zipper sounds Licking lollipops, "Special" alone times... Darkness pulling at her panties, that strange wetness. Her shattered mind broken into segments. Inner her went to distant places, attempting to save small bits of herself: She couldn't separate the pleasure from the guilt. That ironic cruelty of her body responding to his touch. The wanting to be loved, mixed with that icky feeling! She had thought him to be her light. Loving him for paying attention to her. He made her smile, listening to every word she said. Then he made her his slave, his object of desire. Told her "no one else will love you!" "You are a dirty dirty girl!" Inexplicably as she got older his attention waned She wondered what was wrong with her Until one day he bought her little sister a pretty pink dress She recognized that innocent giggle, that favourite uncle smile Somehow she gathered up her shattered and screamed her sister free For she knew, no little girl should ever again be a slave to his darkness Beneath her pain she found their path to freedom Because she knew that breaking is oh so easy. BROKEN People Big GIRLS Do Cry Yellow Shoes in the DARKNESS SLAVE Beneath the SHATTERED For Timothy's five word challenge. Written June 1st 2016

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Francis J Grasso

Date: 6/10/2016 10:29:00 PM

Congratulations, Richard. ...Fran

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/11/2016 8:06:00 AM

Thanks Francis.

James Inman

Date: 6/10/2016 8:32:00 AM

An intense write Richard. Well penned and as disturbing as you intended it to be.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/10/2016 9:55:00 AM

Thanks James.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/9/2016 6:56:00 PM

Yayyy, a BIG winner, and so well deserved.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/10/2016 10:18:00 AM

Thanks Andrea.

Teddy Kimathi

Date: 6/9/2016 10:24:00 AM

Hi Richard. Congrats on your placement with this brilliant piece!! ;-)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/10/2016 10:18:00 AM

Thanks Teddy.

Timothy Hicks

Date: 6/9/2016 12:36:00 AM

I was debating on whether or not I should add this to my list or not; not because of quality, but rather because the images you evoked were almost too real for me ... it painted things I didn't want to imagine. If this is the case for me merely reading, I can't fathom what it's like for those who are forced to experience! Masterfully penned, Richard. You provided a knowing voice on a sensitive subject. Check out my blog, if you ever get the chance, and tell me about your poem :)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/11/2016 8:05:00 AM

Thanks Cecilia, sorry for the late response. Hugs Rick.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/10/2016 10:19:00 AM

I'm glad you didn't get scared off.

Cecilia Macfarlane

Date: 6/6/2016 6:18:00 PM

Wow Richard, your insight never ceases to amaze me. A well written poem on such a devastating subject. Hugs

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/10/2016 10:19:00 AM

Thanks Cecilia, sorry for the late response. Hugs Rick.

Jan Allison

Date: 6/4/2016 12:05:00 AM

Such a powerful pen on an emotive subject - just posted a poem of my own on a similar theme:-(a scenario that sadly takes place all too often - those poor innocent little victims it is heartbreaking to think they can suffer so badly at the hands of an adult:-( hugs jan xx

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/4/2016 8:13:00 AM

Sad indeed, I will check it out Jan. Thanks for commenting.

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 6/3/2016 5:53:00 PM

strong combination of words to build a poem around, and the resulting poem is a strong, hard-hitting write which should do very well...i'm seeing a lot of good entries for this contest

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/3/2016 6:14:00 PM

Thanks Charlotte, I enjoyed the challenge. I too have read some great entries.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/2/2016 8:27:00 PM

AWESOME!!! Now quickly, go to your title. I think you have to put FIVE WORDS at the end of your title!! Like i did mine!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/3/2016 8:51:00 AM

Done.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 6/2/2016 11:09:00 AM

This cut to the core, Richard....how do you know so well...the thoughts that go on in other people's heads? I found that time and again as I read your book...Your insight is amazing. Abuse taints...and one is never the same. Hugs, dear one.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/2/2016 11:38:00 AM

I have been empathic for as long as I can remember. It can be both good and bad. Hugs back to you Eileen.

Red Fiery

Date: 6/2/2016 12:34:00 AM

One can never forget this kind of torture...but only time can heal !!!:(((

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/2/2016 12:46:00 AM

Time and exposing the abuse to the light. Hugs Rick.

Red Fiery

Date: 6/2/2016 12:32:00 AM

you said so much here..Ric...I have my moments in silence..I would like to say congratulations before the result is even announced!! A7 and a fav....hugs ~Red~

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/2/2016 12:46:00 AM

You are kind Red! I enjoyed reading your poem on Facebook.

Mama Bear

Date: 6/1/2016 7:28:00 PM

You have given many people food for thought about an on going problem in our society. Well done and good luck in the contest. Love mom

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/2/2016 12:20:00 AM

Thanks mom, love Rick.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/1/2016 6:13:00 PM

wow, you really got a very moving poem with those five words. it does not surprise me that your poem would be this meaningful since you are a poet with such a strong sense of decency and love for humanity. The five titles were tailor made for what you do best. (go ahead and enter it. all you have to do is put some of the shorter lines together. He said we could go a little bit over on that number!!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/2/2016 12:20:00 AM

Thanks Andrea, I made the changes and edited the poem a bit more.

Miraj Raha

Date: 6/1/2016 11:37:00 AM

This is indeed a fucked up reality that we should be aware of.I thank you Sir Richard for sharing this with us,and reminding us of the horrors that exceeds the normal meaning of the word.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/2/2016 12:22:00 AM

I appreciate your kind comment. It is sad what some people have to endure. It is sadder that others victimize them.

John Hamilton

Date: 6/1/2016 9:33:00 AM

Wow Richard...I'm speechless...Too many children have gone through this horrific experience, I wrote about it in my I was just a kid poem, but this is a shocking reality check, something needs to be done especially here in Canada as they seem to get away with it time and time again. Well done! JDH

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/1/2016 9:54:00 AM

So many people are oblivious to what goes on right in front of them. Thanks for commenting John.

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 6/1/2016 8:15:00 AM

Richard my friend, what terrible truths have you written! The truth gets even torturous when parents are doing things that would never have been thought of! Horrible things! The poem though is great! Good luck and a seven!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/1/2016 8:28:00 AM

Thanks Demetrios, I know this is a difficult topic. I do feel it is a topic that people need to be aware of in order to help protect our innocent vulnerable children.

Casarah Nance

Date: 6/1/2016 7:52:00 AM

Very sad, the torturous situation of abuse gets repeated. Unfortunaltly it happens, your poem brings out the pain of it all, the truth of it.well done.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/1/2016 8:29:00 AM

Thanks Casarah, some of these little ones never find their voices.