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Rudeneja

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Her mind thinks he doesn't care. That he doesn't notice and he no longer feels but his fate is a burning effigy. kindled from his own flames and the rain shows no mercy, so how can he save her? Since butterflies no longer grace his dahlia, he's become isolated from silent selenophiles, whilst 'rudeneja' sensations plague his spirit. Resembling indigo horizons without a moon, a Siberian sun unable to ascend, he's sinking - wondering if; he was born upon the dawn of pain. He's too afraid to weep, knowing she cannot capture that which falls, and she'll let them float away, like feathers in a storm, but in this inner silence,   she's the tempest, a whirlwind of lyrics - too volatile to be sung. When all calms, he wonders, if the elements will show compassion, as the breeze keeps whispering her name - confusing his illusions. He hopes one day there will be clarity. To make sense of perpendicular hearts, beating alone - abandoned upon shores no longer kissed by the tide. Are they losing to gain or gaining to lose? There's a marketplace selling love, but nothing seems sincere, so he remains an unpurchased gift to the world and until his last breath, he'll always remain an amulet, chained upon her necklace.

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Date: 10/19/2024 9:03:00 PM
The painful feelings relayed of lost love with metaphorical undertones of vulnerability and heartache and trust are brought forth in your magnificent choice of words. Your reading my friend also was relaying these words in your emotional tones in your inflections in speech. Your great, creative metaphors always set you apart Silent One from many writers it is a gift that you have that is always consistent in your Poetic writings. Thank you for sharing my friend...
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Date: 10/19/2024 10:00:00 AM
SO, another interesting poem of yours about feelings and communication. It's a terrible burden, which you make clear, to be unfulfilled. Hope you are well with the world since we often write about things that affect us. I'm certainly glad for the experience you provide and the thought-provoking images and story itself although sad. I often wonder what attracts us to other people as it certainly has big impact on us. People make a lot of mistakes when it comes to dealing with this.
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Date: 10/18/2024 12:52:00 PM
a tearing piece bearing the weight of one-sided love or unrequited affection...there is no burden more untenable than ' unreciprocity 'because the alienation is real down to the ground... minted!
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Date: 10/17/2024 7:06:00 PM
wow this is so beautiful, I listened to your golden voice and it makes it that much more meaningful. Great job S, loved it !
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Date: 10/17/2024 5:04:00 AM
First I had to look for the meaning of Rudeneja. It is absolutely a new word for me. This poem is again haunting.....the lament of a wounded heart! How poignant is the tone of your poem. His yearning for connection with the one he once carried in his heart in a gilded palanquin (still carries), I can feel in your poem. In your poems, there is a relentless flow of powerful emotions of pain, frustration, heart ache and longing which no other poet can express so effortlessly. "until his last breath, he'll always remain an amulet, chained upon her necklace." Wow, how steadfast he is in his love!
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Date: 10/16/2024 2:51:00 PM
WOW! I loved the imagery and I could feel the sadness. Great write!
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Date: 10/16/2024 2:06:00 PM
I wrote a nice comment which wouldn’t go through earlier…argh…Great lines!
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Date: 10/16/2024 7:16:00 AM
The interminable bonds of love are so tragically yet beautifully on display in your verse Silent One! A master you are in my mind!! Happy Wednesday!!!
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Date: 10/16/2024 7:15:00 AM
I love the line shores no longer kissed by the tide and such a powerful last stanza as well. Excellent Silent One :)
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Date: 10/16/2024 7:12:00 AM
"There's a marketplace selling love, but nothing seems sincere, so he remains an unpurchased gift to the world" -- Love that! True to self...and true to true love. Enjoyed the read very much. Soulful.
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Date: 10/16/2024 1:56:00 AM
Understanding the emotions in this poem, written in great style, is so important. One cannot but admire such profound metaphors.
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Date: 10/15/2024 12:01:00 PM
nice poem.
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Date: 10/15/2024 10:40:00 AM
Dear Silent One, this is a very poignant poem that flows with such deep and creative metaphors , to express loss and grief and inner most emotions of one that struggles to grasp the light and love that time seems to break. Sometimes clarity is a hard one to attain, and compassion from elements of nature is what we can hope for when familiar breezes change their rhythm! This poem truly would resonate with many and i think you have your signature style incorporated here in such an effortless manner, what i always enjoy about your poems is the flow and use of poetic techniques and how you use brilliant ways to describe things! The ending is brilliant, reminds me of titanic! For some reason! Pleasure reading you after a long time. Sending you light always
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Date: 10/15/2024 7:52:00 AM
Hello SO, What a profound and nuanced exploration of love, loss, and emotional disconnection. When I read this I saw how the strength of your words lies in your imagery and the effective use of natural elements as metaphors for complex emotional states. Well Inked! Autumn Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel
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Date: 10/15/2024 5:02:00 AM
Dear Si, your poem is beautifully haunting, capturing the delicate tension between love, loss, and the struggle for clarity in a chaotic heart.The imagery of indigo horizons and a sun unable to rise evokes a deep sense of melancholy, while the metaphor of being an amulet, forever bound but not fully realized, is profoundly touching. It speaks to the yearning for connection, the fear of vulnerability, and the paradox of emotions we often can't fully express. Absolutely mesmerizing and your narration is wonderful...Hugs
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Date: 10/14/2024 9:30:00 PM
I thoroughly enjoyed this poem, as well as learned a new word. The beautiful images of changing seasons, as well as a cooling love affair, help to make this poem fantastic. This is a fave. :)
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Date: 10/14/2024 9:01:00 PM
This got better and better when I came to the interesting question in the one line verse and the marvelous way you tied up your poem.
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Date: 10/14/2024 6:03:00 PM
"Hi is an indigo horizon without a moon, and she a whirlwind of lyrics too volatile to be sung" Well penned Silent
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Date: 10/14/2024 4:01:00 PM
Go figure as they remark in America SI..But you Certainley have a way with words.' Well writing Them anyways." Lots of metaphores and meaning pouring featherlike leanings..But Confusing his illusions..Now that shorts the Circuits.' Not that 'i'm judging' nooo sir'ee no Quite a write to read tonite.'
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Date: 10/14/2024 3:41:00 PM
This is very sad, the end showed just how much you're feeling....
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Date: 10/14/2024 12:10:00 PM
Beautiful poetry and mellow recitation. I'd recognize that voice anywhere!
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