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Ring Damn It

Ring damn it!!! - Dust collects on the closed slatted blinds as carpet stains scream each time I walk through leaving trails of bread crumbs and ashes, though without you I always find my way back to those corners in the dark where cobwebs celebrate solitude awaiting a face to capture and laughing as they surf the web A broken down couch of green fabric, worn and tattered from unending naps, groans of feet propped up on its arms (Blood flow to the brain…yeah whatever) Beer bottle rings create a drunken mosaic on a helpless coffee table between scattered junk mail, wayward Doritos and a cell phone with an almost dead battery The one I stare at, waiting for it to chime, beep, ding, play the Game of Thrones theme song, whatever the hell it is supposed to do when you call…when you call as I am reminded how much I hate commercials, all of these happy people running around driving new cars, going out to dinner, finding name brand shoes at discount prices Why can’t I forget, lose those memories File them away somewhere, like a drawer in the kitchen I never use, it’s no use, you are there, always on my mind That smile, those eyes, the times I felt truly loved and I still laugh…me, loved? Maybe that was the problem, maybe that was my problem, maybe I was the problem…ring damn it!!!!

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018




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Date: 12/11/2018 12:58:00 PM
Makes me think of those obsessive thoughts I used to have, wondering if HE would call - great line about all those 'happy people' in commercials (I find them annoying too!)
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Chris Green
Date: 12/11/2018 1:53:00 PM
Wish I could say "used to have" :) Thanks again my friend for your nice comments.
Date: 12/10/2018 6:59:00 PM
This is bitter truth, my friend. How were folks love-sick and broken hearted before we had dead cells to obsess over? Paul and Carolyn touched on your exquisite imagery already so I'll save myself the thumb taps but know that I heartily second their sentiments.
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Chris Green
Date: 12/11/2018 8:03:00 AM
Thanks Phillip, I guess they just stared at a home phone sitting there silent, almost mocking them, which is how it seems. I appreciate your comment.
Date: 12/10/2018 11:47:00 AM
I love the way you describe the old couch and coffee table, almost as if they have lives of their own. But the anxiety grows throughout as he waits for the phone to ring, wondering if he could ever be truly loved. There's a harsh reality to this write that makes it appealing in a way that's different from some of your other poems, Chris. Excellent detail, the poem builds well. Almost like watching a movie... Hugs, Carolyn
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Chris Green
Date: 12/10/2018 12:04:00 PM
Thank you Carolyn, I am happy you enjoyed this one so much. Sometimes we just have to let go and spill it out there, whether the couch is listening or not. :) I appreciate you my friend.
Date: 12/8/2018 9:24:00 AM
You set the scene with descriptive poetic words, Chris, then you bring us to raw reality with the last stanza. I suppose that battery is dead, not almost! Regards // paul
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Chris Green
Date: 12/10/2018 9:55:00 AM
Thanks Paul, you are probably right or my battery is dead. :)
Date: 12/7/2018 5:38:00 PM
This one was kind of different from your usual wonderful work... and I LOVE it!
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Chris Green
Date: 12/10/2018 9:54:00 AM
Thank you so very much Andrea for your kind comment. I am happy you enjoyed this one so much.

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