Rhyme and Wrinkles

Just lately I’ve been spending so much time
on re-arranging words upon my page,
correcting meter, finding perfect rhyme-
I swear it’s this that’s causing me to age.

You see, I never rest until it’s done,
a half completed write won’t let me sleep
throughout the darkest hours, until the sun
casts out his rays that through my windows seep.

I wonder, if I change my form to free,
just let the feelings tumble from my mind,
then maybe I would have more time for me
to sleep, to my complexion be more kind.

Perhaps though it’s the sacrifice for art,
ne’er fair of face, but beautiful at heart.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Nandy Avatar
August 7, 2010 at 9:17 PM
HI SHARON ! THROUGH YOUR RHYME YOU HAVE STRAIGHTENED OUT ALL THE WRINKLES ! -Raj
Walters Avatar
August 2, 2010 at 8:39 PM
Oh, I hope fretting over words, meter, and rhyme doesn't contribute to aging... Im doomed. This is wonderful! I find writing freeverse gives me more grey hairs though, lol. Fair of face may fade, but a beautiful heart is a lasting pleasure. A true pleasure to read and enjoy :) Hugs, kris
Fraser Avatar
July 31, 2010 at 4:35 AM
You have captured moments that poets encounter as their writing grows. The poetry forms are learning curves and without trying them we gain nothing. Nicely written Sonnet >> James
Sweetheart Avatar
July 30, 2010 at 6:46 PM
Nice one Sharon.. we have all been there of which u write about in this poem... poets can see themselves in every line... enjoyed and hope my new category of baby limericks will be well received.. glad u got a good laugh from it.. having four sons all little at one time...it was very amplified..luv.. happy weekend...
Culverhouse Avatar
July 30, 2010 at 5:12 PM
very lovely write!! your work paid off! Thanks for your comment onn my works. Hope your writing comes easily tonight.
Mehta Avatar
July 30, 2010 at 4:21 PM
I hope you keep up writing, Sharon
Knop Avatar
July 30, 2010 at 4:15 AM
Hi Sharon, thank you for commenting Night Desire. And thank you for your hint of course it must be "whitish" and not "whiteish"!!!! Beautiful write and words, Sharon! Enjoyed this poem of yours! The problem is that we have to finish immediately what we have started!!!Have a brigjht weekend!....Gert:)
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