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Regrets Of The Raspberry Moon Premiere Contest Winner

When cyan night's raspberry moon is dipped in softness of the afterglows, I gaze at that glossy first evening star between creamy fingers of my cherry palm, which trace lunar kins - those angelic fireflies, twinkling and pirouetting, like a golden blush ~ serenading in lucid flames of lustrous patience. With comets reverberating in my wish, I stole the milky way and let my hopes slide down those creamy clusters of cosmos. But, I still reminisce that velveteen midnight in the love-orchards, where I laid upon those lush petals of pixies and quartz-daffodils were tucked in my orange-bronze hair-strings, my beloved swathed the satin shorelines of our saga with conch shells of sweet edenic scents ~ just when, sheen shooting-stars came twirling upon sepia ashes as hellfire stretched across our desires and faith, in the ricocheting flames of fate's opal envy. I presumed for lunar stones of lapis lazuli poesy to be our destiny's only shimmering saviour - but those elegant deceits, carved within a raging tale of jealousy, never let these sanguine harps to synchronize in our orchestrating euphoria. Perhaps, I'd engulfed the marigold sun and henceforth, I shall be succumbed into the ambrosial abyss of sacrosanct nature, negotiating a nascent darkness for my nefarious soul and shaping a nemesis for death's lionhearted dawn. I will now unsung every amaranthine hymn of magick - that strangled my oxygenated lawns, lathering them with heart-shaped fog of cruel carnations. These orchid lifelines have prepared for an addictive waltz, in the hieroglyphic anxiety of these umpteenth seconds - playing with the last ebony cadence within ivory keys of my pearlescent piano~ as luscious laughters will be turned to ravenous retreats, - and this rhetoric life will perform in a fallen angel's perfumed deceit. So, when these periwinkle phrases quiver and surrender on the emerald brim of a betraying tale- stargazer lily petals will adhere like disheartened feathers on my eclipsed tomb, carving twisted reveries of my absence on twin-flames' mausoleum. "Maybe, each wailing dahlia's diamond dreams are blanketed with scentless thistles of tyranny ~ And this wingless love has breathed its archaic silence, too soon... "

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Date: 12/28/2023 11:41:00 AM
Just magical, Hiya, yet each hue is tinged with your sense of mortality! So rich in jewel tones and a rainbow kaleidoscope of shifting colors and images. Congratulations on your first place win! I am mesmerized by the flow of your song! Blessings! Happy New Year!
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Date: 12/22/2023 9:23:00 AM
Congratulations Hiya you shine like your words.
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Date: 12/21/2023 7:59:00 AM
Such a beautiful flow through the art of words, wonderfully it sets to play as I read
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Date: 12/21/2023 3:29:00 AM
Congratulations poetess your talent shines like your pure soul in your poetry.
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Date: 12/20/2023 11:17:00 AM
I stole the milky way and let my hopes slide down those creamy clusters of cosmos…such dreamy imagery, my friend! Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 12/20/2023 8:13:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. Wonderful poem!
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Date: 12/19/2023 5:59:00 AM
Congratulations! Your poem paints a celestial canvas of longing and heartbreak, each image shimmering with ethereal beauty and echoing with bittersweet echoes of lost love. The velvet midnight in love-orchards and the orchid lifelines waltzing in hieroglyphic anxiety paint a hauntingly beautiful tableau of desire and deceit. - Blessings, Daniel!
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Date: 12/18/2023 9:54:00 PM
Beautiful... Congratulations...
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Date: 12/18/2023 1:00:00 PM
Exceptionally beautiful Hiya…..amazing imagery! Debx
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Date: 12/18/2023 3:23:00 AM
Explosive descriptive language as always. Sara K
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Date: 12/17/2023 2:47:00 PM
Very lovely and wonderful poem to read! Have a very nice time lovely Hiya :-) Best and warmest hopes and wishes!
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Date: 12/17/2023 7:24:00 AM
Everything about this event left me completely stunned, dear Hiya. Your sincere and distinctive approach to self-expression effortlessly communicates a profound profundity of feeling, which is exquisitely reflected in your pristine poem. Your eloquent use of poetic expression, replete with lines that glide effortlessly across the page, exemplifies unadulterated talent and personifies sincerity.
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Date: 12/17/2023 3:40:00 AM
Such poetic prowess full dancing phrases and words, pure art and emotion Hiya
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Date: 12/16/2023 9:38:00 PM
A masterpiece of poetry, Hiya, almost too beautiful in your eloquent imagery to even describe. A FAV for my list, my friend. Even in the darkness, you exist in the beauty of love. I enjoyed the whole poem, but especially like the close, "And this wingless love has breathed its archaic silence, too soon... " Much to think about in this closing statement. The mystery is intriguing. Worthy of POTD, I hope you receive its just due, my friend. Have a pleasant weekend. Bill
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Date: 12/16/2023 5:28:00 PM
so beautiful and magical, Hiya! I do so appreciate the flow of your words and the imagery that only you can create...I especially liked 'My eclipsed tomb, carving twisted reveries of my absence on twin-flames' mausoleum. I also liked I still reminisce that velveteen midnight in the love-orchards,.." velveteen night...WOW! Color me impressed and breathless. have a great evening, Sara
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Date: 12/16/2023 5:16:00 PM
A beautiful masterpiece, Hiya. I was transported by the stunning images. So delightful. Thank you for sharing.
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Date: 12/16/2023 1:03:00 PM
If I didn't know better Hiya I'd swear you were a Pixie holding amazing magic in your fingers. Bet your muse has elfin ears, and those angelic fireflies, live in your back yard. You got this pegged, the magic I mean, love it a fav for me, take care dear heart :)
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Date: 12/16/2023 12:42:00 PM
Whoah, this had so many concepts... you're a truly gifted writer. Beautiful.
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Date: 12/16/2023 11:30:00 AM
Your poem starts of so well with, When cyan night's raspberry moon is dipped in softness of the afterglows, I gaze at that glossy first evening star between creamy fingers of my cherry palm,.. great imagery, colours and adjectives.. your poetry here is breathless and really had the reader gripped to reading your words.. loved the ending.
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Date: 12/16/2023 8:21:00 AM
--those angelic fireflies, twinkling and pirouetting, like a golden blush ~ serenading in lucid flames of lustrous patience--- as hellfire stretched across our desires and faith, in the ricocheting flames of fate's opal envy-- And this wingless love has breathed its archaic silence, too soon...Shining brilliantly in your poetic prowess, Hiya. Words adorned in beauty dazzle your theme. Excellent, as always.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/16/2023 8:57:00 AM
I forgot to mention that I have faved this gem--gift of your ornate pen!
Date: 12/16/2023 7:02:00 AM
Gosh! Where do i begin praising this beauty! Its alot to take and absorb. And i must say melancholia never seemed so beautiful until i read this. You describe darkness in such a beautiful manner whilst also using words that go with the theme, that depicts darkness in such eloquence, your artistic quill always leaves me in awe, and the graceful touch of your words truly is soulfully divine. I really resonated with the lines “ Perhaps, I'd engulfed the marigold sun and henceforth, I shall b—
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Ink Empress
Date: 12/16/2023 7:04:00 AM
Sometimes we all go through those emotions where we question whether we stole our own sun, or maybe we were responsible for the darkness.. and i loved “ These orchid lifelines have prepared for an addictive waltz, in the hieroglyphic anxiety of these umpteenth seconds” constancy of anxiety so creatively you’ve described there! This poem conveys so much about mental health too. And struggles one faces emotionally! A definite fave this is for me. Pleasure reading

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