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Regrets Of The Raspberry Moon Premiere Contest Winner


When cyan night's 
raspberry moon
is dipped in softness 
of the afterglows, 
I gaze at that glossy
first evening star between 
creamy fingers of 
my cherry palm, 
which trace lunar kins -
those angelic fireflies, 
twinkling and pirouetting, 
like a golden blush ~
serenading in 
lucid flames of 
lustrous patience. 
With comets 
reverberating 
in my wish, I stole 
the milky way and 
let my hopes
slide down those 
creamy clusters 
of cosmos. 

But, I still reminisce 
that velveteen 
midnight in the
love-orchards, 
where I laid upon those
lush petals of pixies
and quartz-daffodils
were tucked in my 
orange-bronze
hair-strings,
my beloved swathed 
the satin shorelines of 
our saga with 
conch shells of 
sweet edenic scents ~
just when, 
sheen shooting-stars
came twirling upon 
sepia ashes 
as hellfire stretched 
across our desires and faith, 
in the ricocheting flames
of fate's opal envy. 

I presumed for
lunar stones of 
lapis lazuli poesy
to be our destiny's 
only shimmering saviour -
but those elegant deceits, 
carved within a
raging tale of jealousy, 
never let these 
sanguine harps to
synchronize in 
our orchestrating 
euphoria. 

Perhaps, 
I'd engulfed the 
marigold sun
and henceforth, I shall 
be succumbed into 
the ambrosial abyss
of sacrosanct nature, 
negotiating a 
nascent darkness
for my nefarious soul
and shaping a 
nemesis for death's 
lionhearted dawn. 

I will now unsung 
every amaranthine hymn of 
magick - that strangled
my oxygenated lawns,
lathering them with
heart-shaped fog of 
cruel carnations. 

These orchid lifelines
have prepared 
for an addictive waltz, 
in the hieroglyphic 
anxiety of these
umpteenth seconds -
playing with the last 
ebony cadence within ivory keys
of my pearlescent piano~ 
as luscious laughters will be 
turned to ravenous retreats, 
- and this rhetoric life will 
perform in a fallen angel's
perfumed deceit.  

So, when these
periwinkle phrases 
quiver and surrender 
on the emerald brim of a
betraying tale-
stargazer lily petals
will adhere like 
disheartened feathers 
on my eclipsed tomb,
carving twisted reveries
of my absence on
twin-flames' mausoleum. 

"Maybe, each wailing 
dahlia's diamond dreams 
are blanketed with 
scentless thistles of tyranny ~

   And this wingless love has breathed its 
                             archaic silence, too soon... "

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Date: 12/28/2023 11:41:00 AM
Just magical, Hiya, yet each hue is tinged with your sense of mortality! So rich in jewel tones and a rainbow kaleidoscope of shifting colors and images. Congratulations on your first place win! I am mesmerized by the flow of your song! Blessings! Happy New Year!
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Date: 12/22/2023 9:23:00 AM
Congratulations Hiya you shine like your words.
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Date: 12/21/2023 7:59:00 AM
Such a beautiful flow through the art of words, wonderfully it sets to play as I read
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Date: 12/21/2023 3:29:00 AM
Congratulations poetess your talent shines like your pure soul in your poetry.
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Date: 12/20/2023 11:17:00 AM
I stole the milky way and let my hopes slide down those creamy clusters of cosmos…such dreamy imagery, my friend! Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 12/20/2023 8:13:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. Wonderful poem!
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Date: 12/19/2023 5:59:00 AM
Congratulations! Your poem paints a celestial canvas of longing and heartbreak, each image shimmering with ethereal beauty and echoing with bittersweet echoes of lost love. The velvet midnight in love-orchards and the orchid lifelines waltzing in hieroglyphic anxiety paint a hauntingly beautiful tableau of desire and deceit. - Blessings, Daniel!
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Date: 12/18/2023 9:54:00 PM
Beautiful... Congratulations...
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Date: 12/18/2023 1:00:00 PM
Exceptionally beautiful Hiya…..amazing imagery! Debx
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Date: 12/18/2023 3:23:00 AM
Explosive descriptive language as always. Sara K
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Date: 12/17/2023 2:47:00 PM
Very lovely and wonderful poem to read! Have a very nice time lovely Hiya :-) Best and warmest hopes and wishes!
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Date: 12/17/2023 7:24:00 AM
Everything about this event left me completely stunned, dear Hiya. Your sincere and distinctive approach to self-expression effortlessly communicates a profound profundity of feeling, which is exquisitely reflected in your pristine poem. Your eloquent use of poetic expression, replete with lines that glide effortlessly across the page, exemplifies unadulterated talent and personifies sincerity.
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Date: 12/17/2023 3:40:00 AM
Such poetic prowess full dancing phrases and words, pure art and emotion Hiya
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Date: 12/16/2023 9:38:00 PM
A masterpiece of poetry, Hiya, almost too beautiful in your eloquent imagery to even describe. A FAV for my list, my friend. Even in the darkness, you exist in the beauty of love. I enjoyed the whole poem, but especially like the close, "And this wingless love has breathed its archaic silence, too soon... " Much to think about in this closing statement. The mystery is intriguing. Worthy of POTD, I hope you receive its just due, my friend. Have a pleasant weekend. Bill
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Date: 12/16/2023 5:16:00 PM
A beautiful masterpiece, Hiya. I was transported by the stunning images. So delightful. Thank you for sharing.
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Date: 12/16/2023 1:03:00 PM
If I didn't know better Hiya I'd swear you were a Pixie holding amazing magic in your fingers. Bet your muse has elfin ears, and those angelic fireflies, live in your back yard. You got this pegged, the magic I mean, love it a fav for me, take care dear heart :)
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Date: 12/16/2023 12:42:00 PM
Whoah, this had so many concepts... you're a truly gifted writer. Beautiful.
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Date: 12/16/2023 11:30:00 AM
Your poem starts of so well with, When cyan night's raspberry moon is dipped in softness of the afterglows, I gaze at that glossy first evening star between creamy fingers of my cherry palm,.. great imagery, colours and adjectives.. your poetry here is breathless and really had the reader gripped to reading your words.. loved the ending.
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Date: 12/16/2023 8:21:00 AM
--those angelic fireflies, twinkling and pirouetting, like a golden blush ~ serenading in lucid flames of lustrous patience--- as hellfire stretched across our desires and faith, in the ricocheting flames of fate's opal envy-- And this wingless love has breathed its archaic silence, too soon...Shining brilliantly in your poetic prowess, Hiya. Words adorned in beauty dazzle your theme. Excellent, as always.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/16/2023 8:57:00 AM
I forgot to mention that I have faved this gem--gift of your ornate pen!
Date: 12/16/2023 7:02:00 AM
Gosh! Where do i begin praising this beauty! Its alot to take and absorb. And i must say melancholia never seemed so beautiful until i read this. You describe darkness in such a beautiful manner whilst also using words that go with the theme, that depicts darkness in such eloquence, your artistic quill always leaves me in awe, and the graceful touch of your words truly is soulfully divine. I really resonated with the lines “ Perhaps, I'd engulfed the marigold sun and henceforth, I shall b—
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Ink Empress
Date: 12/16/2023 7:04:00 AM
Sometimes we all go through those emotions where we question whether we stole our own sun, or maybe we were responsible for the darkness.. and i loved “ These orchid lifelines have prepared for an addictive waltz, in the hieroglyphic anxiety of these umpteenth seconds” constancy of anxiety so creatively you’ve described there! This poem conveys so much about mental health too. And struggles one faces emotionally! A definite fave this is for me. Pleasure reading

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