Brian Davey Poet Free verse

Raven Shadows

Raven Shadows



Ravens fly in an ebony pool out of the mouth of evil
Someone please suture the mouth from which they come
Then let the beasts fly away into obscurity
The masquerade of Shadows moves on
In their aloof manner coaxing you to follow
Behind you walk in cousin shadows towards death
Darkness tends to hypnotize all that want to believe
Flashing you a veneer smile, darkness with fake teeth
All the darkness, ravens, and shadows share like eyes
Those of a glowing opaque evanescence
Still you are just too weak to show your resistance
Into the mountain runs a crimson creek
The gateway into which you are being led
All these evil spirits that you now call friends
Are going to claim victory the very moment you die...



05/31/17
For Contest: Write Me Something Deep and Dark (Free Verse)
WON 1st PLACE IN CONTEST RESULTS 

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Susan Ashley October 11, 2017 at 9:03 PM A belated congratulations on your win with your brilliant write Brian. Deep with dark imagery. Your first line is amazing, and the rest, captivating. I so enjoyed your poem this evening! Brian Davey October 11, 2017 at 9:13 PM Thank you so much for the kind words and all of the praise

Robert A. Dufresne August 2, 2017 at 6:18 AM I did not know there was a contest but even without it I recognized this one a winner in amy category, Brian.Very deep and appropo. Very well written. Congratulations to you. God bless Brian Davey September 24, 2017 at 11:31 AM thank you so much and I apologize for the late response but I was in a bad car accident

John Hamilton June 7, 2017 at 10:24 AM Congrats Brian on a great write and a great win! Brian Davey September 24, 2017 at 11:31 AM thank you so much and I apologize for the late response but I was in a bad car accident

Curtis Johnson June 7, 2017 at 8:57 AM Congrats Brian on your win. Well put together. Brian Davey September 24, 2017 at 11:30 AM thank you so much and I apologize for the late response but I was in a bad car accident

Anthony Mark June 7, 2017 at 5:06 AM It seems a little bit precise in delivery and the story jumps about without cohesion, could do with personalising to draw the reader into the poem, rather than being told of these things..... Brian Davey September 24, 2017 at 11:31 AM Thank you for your input but as it may be sometimes the chaotic nature of things is what's needed to be read.

Kim Rodrigues June 6, 2017 at 9:10 PM Shadows throughout...deep and dark! Congrats on your win, Brian! Brian Davey September 24, 2017 at 11:29 AM thank you so much and I apologize for the late response but I was in a bad car accident

Beautiful Scars June 6, 2017 at 9:09 PM oh my Brian...what can I say? This was stunningly outstanding. Have me chills, I read it like 5 times and each time I read something different. So thought provoking and intense. Exactly what I was hoping for. thank you and congrats! :) Brian Davey September 24, 2017 at 11:28 AM thank you so much and I apologize for the late response but I have been recuperating from a bad car accident! I am ecstatic to find I did so well!!!