Ravaged

He espied her all alone In the open by the lake Sighed in lustful undertone And her body craved to take. Golden orange, rusty brown What a beauty! Flaming hot! She looked awesome in her gown He seduced her on the spot. He embraced her in his arms Stripped her naked to the skin Without feeling any qualms He took pleasure in his sin. She succumbed to the ordeal The abuse went on at length There was nothing else to feel But the fury of his strength. When the frenzy came to nought Overcome by need for haste Trembling wind an exit sought And the tree was left to waste. ------------------------------------------ Contest: My Last Contest (Jan 2015) Sponsor: Kelly Deschler Placing: 1st (14th July 2014) Contest: Not Just Any Old Quatrain Sponsor: Kelly Deschler Placing: 2nd

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 2/16/2015 1:22:00 AM

Paul, Congratulations in Kelly D's contest. Always ~LINDA

Paul Callus
Date: 2/16/2015 3:38:00 PM

Thank you Linda...love to see you keeping busy:) // paul

Skat A

Date: 2/15/2015 10:34:00 PM

Paul, CONGRATS on your awesome placement ~ SKAT ~

Paul Callus
Date: 2/16/2015 3:38:00 PM

That's an awesome comment, Skat...thank you:) // paul

Eileen Manassian

Date: 2/11/2015 10:48:00 AM

OH ME OH MY@@!!!!! That was some write...AM I disappointed it's the wind? Yes, but that is what makes this such a fabulous write. Congrats, my dear. Hugs

Paul Callus
Date: 2/11/2015 3:01:00 PM

Thank you Eileen....truly pleased by your reaction!! This poem could easily have been written by you:) Even nature can be lustful and passionate. hugs // paul

Eve Roper

Date: 2/9/2015 10:26:00 PM

Congratulations on this fascinating poetic write a 7

Paul Callus
Date: 2/10/2015 3:45:00 AM

Thank you Eve. Glad you enjoyed. Have a nice day. // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 2/7/2015 2:30:00 PM

Dropping back again with my congrats Paul :-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 2/7/2015 2:45:00 PM

Thank you Jan...your support is much appreciated! hugs // paul

Kelly Deschler

Date: 2/7/2015 12:51:00 PM

I recall this excellent poem from my "Quatrain" contest. It placed in first then and it deserves to once again. Congrats on the win and thank you for participating, Paul!

Paul Callus
Date: 2/7/2015 2:07:00 PM

Thank you Kelly! It has been my pleasure taking part in your contests. I am so pleased that my poem placed first in this your 'last' contest. Wishing you all the best....hugs // paul

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 10/12/2014 1:53:00 AM

Thanks for your comment about my Jezebel poem. I enjoyed rereading this piece.

Paul Callus
Date: 10/12/2014 4:25:00 AM

Thank you Richard for re-visiting. Hope you are having a pleasant Sunday. // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 7/31/2014 8:38:00 AM

incredibly powerful write Paul so good to see it getting a great placing:-) Hugs jan xxx

Paul Callus
Date: 7/31/2014 5:16:00 PM

Thank you, Jan for the "incredibly powerful" comments!! much appreciated! Hugs /x/ paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 7/31/2014 2:58:00 AM

Congratulations Paul..:)! Please another flavor of ice cream..:) with some hazel nuts please!!! I echo my comments earlier..:) sorry for being late..:( really so busy .... Just every now and the i peek and peep to comment and post sometimes..:)God bless..:)

Paul Callus
Date: 7/31/2014 3:43:00 AM

Thank you Olive_eloi:) I know how busy you are...so trying not to distract you too much:) You can have ice-cream in abundance...you'll be spoilt for choice:) Keep peeping...I'm still very busy, but there is a little light at the end of the tunnel!! // paul

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 7/29/2014 5:01:00 PM

Many of these contests are tough for me, or should I say out of my league :)... Every now and then, I find a contest I like.. Linda

Paul Callus
Date: 7/29/2014 5:28:00 PM

You have your own special style of writing and you feel 'safe' using it, why not! but I find these contests stimulating and challenging, provoking me to try forms that I had not even heard of before. I mostly did free verse before; now I mix and match:) // paul

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 7/29/2014 1:58:00 PM

Paul, A nice winning Quatrain. I don't know the form, however --Well done... Always ~LINDA

Paul Callus
Date: 7/29/2014 3:48:00 PM

Thank you Linda...never mind the form, as long as the content is found to be to your liking! // paul

Robert Lindley

Date: 7/28/2014 8:06:00 PM

A very fine write my friend!!!! Huge congrats on your win!!

Paul Callus
Date: 7/29/2014 8:47:00 AM

Thank you Robert! I enjoyed your excellent 'dream' poem, too! // paul

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 7/28/2014 10:17:00 AM

I like how your mind works Paul, congrats on your win.

Paul Callus
Date: 7/28/2014 4:58:00 PM

Thank you, Richard. I also was much impressed by your Jezebel who dances for the love of it! // paul

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 7/28/2014 8:27:00 AM

And back again wid huge congrats on this winning awesome write Paul! Knew for sure wud be a top winner,, nothing less than 7 my dear friend!

Paul Callus
Date: 7/28/2014 4:53:00 PM

Very nice of you to come back with lovely wishes and comments, Upma! Yes, you did have faith in this poem from the start; thank you so very much. I appreciate your continued support! :)) paul

Arlene Smith

Date: 7/28/2014 6:56:00 AM

Glad to see this powerful write on the winners list! Congrats on a great win, dear Paul.. Hugs.. Arlene

Paul Callus
Date: 7/28/2014 4:42:00 PM

Hi Arlene! Thank you for this second visit to this poem; so glad you like it; thank you for the wishes and hugs! Hope you have a lovely week:) // paul

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 7/28/2014 1:02:00 AM

A clever piece with a surprising end, Paul. congrats

Paul Callus
Date: 7/28/2014 5:28:00 AM

Thank you Dr. Your comments and wishes too are much appreciated. // paul

Joyce Johnson

Date: 7/27/2014 11:36:00 PM

Very big surprise at the end. Craftily done. Congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce

Paul Callus
Date: 7/28/2014 5:26:00 AM

These are very lovely comments, Joyce. Thank you so much. Have a nice day and take care:) // paul

Kelly Deschler

Date: 7/27/2014 8:00:00 PM

A very passionate use of personification, pertaining to the tree.... Your poem was so unique and so well written! The rhyming was near perfect! Congratulations on your win, Paul!

Paul Callus
Date: 7/28/2014 5:23:00 AM

Many thanks, Kelly!! So glad you enjoyed this quatrain and I'm honoured to be high up on your winners' list. Lovely way to start the week. Looking forward to your next contest!:)

Jack Horne

Date: 7/18/2014 2:26:00 PM

really clever piece, my friend

Paul Callus
Date: 7/18/2014 4:26:00 PM

Thank you Jack; pleased with your visit, and the nice comment. // paul

Carrie Richards

Date: 7/17/2014 8:43:00 AM

A great personalization poem! You had me thinking of something else at first...good job !!

Paul Callus
Date: 7/17/2014 11:53:00 AM

Thank you Carrie. Glad that eventually, after the red herring, the message comes through. Have a nice day. // paul

Vera Duggan

Date: 7/16/2014 7:35:00 PM

It took me a few lines to discover what you were referring to Paul, excellent write my friend, hope you have a win, take care my friend,........................Vera...........

Paul Callus
Date: 7/17/2014 11:49:00 AM

Tried not to give the game away from the start! Glad you enjoyed it; thanks a lot and take care. // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/16/2014 5:36:00 PM

Hmmm, i knew it was not an actual person but I was trying to figure out what it could be. A tree, huh?? This is really cool!!! One of my favorites of the poems I read today and definitely NOT any old quatrain.

Paul Callus
Date: 7/16/2014 5:54:00 PM

Thank you Andrea...just what I need to hear before going off to bed! (it's 12.54am here) I can now sleep to a sweet note:) // paul

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 7/16/2014 4:47:00 AM

Oh this is sooooo good Paul. This one is going into my favorite file for sure! I am still smiling. I can see this poem at the top of the winner's list already.

Paul Callus
Date: 7/16/2014 2:37:00 PM

Many many thanks Connie, for every single word you wrote and for the fav!! I appreciate your faith in it, and your support, too. Take care. // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 7/15/2014 5:17:00 PM

Oh!!! Now I understood it voyeurism plus the inevitable urge to fulfill it... Your words are raw this time yet I like the way you use the gown and a tree..:) of which the gown presents a beauty while the tree tells life which is put to distraught by the un welcomed onslaught..:) the gown and the tree balanced the other words which make it more brilliantly describe..:) Claps Paul!! :) 1:16am here and well just now I sat after so many patients left to right..:)

Paul Callus
Date: 7/15/2014 5:46:00 PM

I see you have been very busy today Olive_eloi! Time for a merited rest. I also see that you have read my poem well and I am glad that you find so much to elicit from it. txs for the clap:) // paul

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 7/15/2014 1:38:00 PM

Tale of passion n lust ,, excellently penned Paul! Reality faced Many a times ,, u write from perspective of the fairer sex ,, more so great! It's an exclusive quatrain n not just any other,,, surely will make to the top // Upma // Gl !!! Do u really need for this one ??

Paul Callus
Date: 7/15/2014 1:56:00 PM

I owe you a lot Upma, for all the trust and support you show re my poetry; the comments on this one are lovely and truly appreciated.:) // paul