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You think you’ve got rhyme but you’re blind I’d go up against you any time These here rhymes are so smooth people think I’m a mime Vanilla cool collected I’m the definition of “sublime” My words are complicated simple yet they easily intertwine Try looking at the sun to escape my super shine I burn metal to dust with each and every line You want a part of this? Step up so you can see what it means to be fine! You think with me these are blows we’re trading I’m worried less I confess as I watch you fading Forget your pontificating feel my words erasing Verbs nouns making sounds adjectives educating The logic of me goes beyond debating Drink me down like vermouth my words are satiating. Things I’ve seen are mean but still I keep my words clean I’m not interested in creating a scene Yet not one to bow down to any King or Queen Stronger than the tower of Pisa see how far I can lean Breaking the silence barrier and everything in between Watch how our worthy words careen I’m old fast n furious but no has-been Inside my mind I feel like a teen Rhyme once or twice or four times three Whatever you’ve got it’s no worry to me You’re swinging on a rope of hope tied to the wrong tree If that’s all you’ve got you might as well let it be Even though you’re next to me Who do you think they’ll see? You think you sting like a Bee But I pack a punch like Mohamed Ali If you step back in the ring we can make History I couldn’t resist, I wrote this piece after reading Nick Trim’s “Hyper Active Rhymes II”. No disrespect intended, this is all in good fun.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018




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Date: 8/18/2018 3:39:00 AM
Enter a cipher with rhyming lifers who dwell behind bars\ the choir was constructed from my spiritual scars\Memoirs of knights with no connections to Templars...
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/18/2018 7:51:00 AM
You stepped up!
Date: 4/28/2018 4:58:00 PM
Excellent and entertaining rapping, Richard. Dig the ending:) Regards // paul
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Date: 3/20/2018 1:31:00 PM
Richard, wow, you could be a rapper, I love this poem a lot, think I might give it a try, to rhyme the sublime ..
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Date: 2/28/2018 5:41:00 PM
Hi Richard, you let your pen sing in this one, the rhyming is excellent as is the piece. I always enjoyed dropping by your poetry and i know i shall do again. Held me from beginning to end Richard. Your Friend.... Mike.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/1/2018 9:56:00 AM
Thanks Vlad. :0)
Date: 2/28/2018 5:28:00 PM
I like vermouth! ;) I like your poem, Rick, it's like a slam, and fun to read.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/1/2018 9:56:00 AM
Thanks Becca, hugs Rick.
Date: 2/26/2018 10:06:00 AM
Enjoyable read..love the confidence..challenges can be beneficial for everyone..nicely penned
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/26/2018 6:19:00 PM
Thanks Melissa.
Date: 2/24/2018 1:44:00 PM
It s such a beautiful written poem, after reading this I must confess that you really are a great poet, one of the best I have seen, I love the way yoy have written it and especially the poem, this really is a masterpiece
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/24/2018 2:10:00 PM
You are kind Faraz. Thanks for the visit.
Date: 2/23/2018 6:45:00 PM
Somehow I missed this fun depiction..well crafted rhymes Richard..as you say all in good fun!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/24/2018 2:11:00 PM
Hi Vijay, sorry for the late response. Your comment and visit are appreciated.
Date: 2/21/2018 4:14:00 PM
Rhyme master, what else could i say, except love it.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/21/2018 5:16:00 PM
Thanks Harry:0)
Date: 2/20/2018 8:19:00 PM
Hahahahaha! I FRICKIN LOVE IT! You tell him, Rick...This is so sassy, surprisingly classy, super fantassy! Bring it! LOL! Hugs!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/21/2018 7:49:00 AM
Looks like you have some technique of your own, rhyming goes deeper than bone, it’s good to know I’m not alone. Rhyming for the positivity prone! Thanks for visiting Rhoda.
Date: 2/20/2018 10:07:00 AM
This sounds like a spiteful rap of a rhyme, I would write lol. I like it!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/21/2018 7:51:00 AM
Thanks Anna, I enjoyed this interaction with Nick.
Date: 2/20/2018 9:54:00 AM
Great write, Richard, positively bounces. I can imagine you reciting this with a baseball cap on your head the wrong way round, and a bit of bling. Possibly leaning on a Dodge Charger. Regards, Viv
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/21/2018 8:09:00 AM
Ha ha, great imagery, maybe a 1984 Trans Am. Thanks for the smile Viv.
Date: 2/19/2018 9:46:00 PM
Was rockin' to this fist-first poem, Richard! nice work! jimbo
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Date: 2/19/2018 3:36:00 PM
Sounds like an awesome rap Richard..
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/19/2018 6:48:00 PM
Thanks Silent.
Date: 2/19/2018 12:24:00 PM
hahaha. wow, what a slam poem. WEre you here when PD used to challenge people at Soup to slam with her? She would have been up for a challenge with you after reading THIS one. LOVE this!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/19/2018 6:50:00 PM
I've been here since Nov 2012. Where does the time go, it feels like yesterday. Thanks for the great comment Andrea.
Date: 2/19/2018 7:12:00 AM
You are multifaceted, Richard. Loved this slam poem. I especially liked the Pisa analogy. Wow, that's quite a rant...and I love it. Sorry I've been MIA. As you know, I've been in Nairobi, Kenya. When I got back, my daughter was still here. She left last night. I hope to get in the thick of things soon. Hugs
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/19/2018 8:47:00 AM
You have been missed. Hugs Rick.
Date: 2/19/2018 12:22:00 AM
Gosh, You had me a bit worried there Richard, for a moment I thought you were going to get those gloves out. Good to see all in fun.A great poem you had me from beginning to end......Maria
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/19/2018 8:37:00 AM
I’m glad I could entertain you Maria.
Date: 2/18/2018 11:51:00 PM
Omg so funny! Hadn't been here in awhile and when started reading I thought I had the wrong poet, then I wondered what happened to you lol. I must say, pretty darn good!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/19/2018 12:04:00 AM
Thanks Susan, I took a fork off my usual lane.
Date: 2/18/2018 8:56:00 PM
Too funny. Your eloquent verbiosity is over the top. Marvelously done, a most pleasant read, Richard.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/18/2018 11:24:00 PM
Thanks Line, it was fun to give it a go.
Date: 2/18/2018 8:47:00 PM
From Mick Jagger, to the Snowman Rapper, drake be shaking, atd Ricks new makings. ( ok that was the best I could do!!!) Loved this!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/18/2018 11:25:00 PM
Hi Arthur, you can do anything you put your mind to. Thanks for commenting buddy.
Date: 2/18/2018 2:52:00 PM
Ya think y'all cool/ Well I ain't no fool/ I can do rhyme/ When I got time/ Ain't no use cryin/ If you ain't tryin/ Just have a go/ Rhyme will flow/ Nick what you done/ Richards joined the fun/ Alexis has too/ How 'bout you/ See this is the thing/ Rhyme needs a king/ A rhyme queen too/ Will one them be you./ (sorry Richard ,couldn't resist)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/18/2018 6:24:00 PM
Thanks for adding your rhymes Tom.;0)
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Alexis Y.
Date: 2/18/2018 3:38:00 PM
Thanks for the mention but I removed mines:-) Alexis
Date: 2/18/2018 2:32:00 PM
- I wish you had read this to me, Richard :))) ... so funny :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/18/2018 11:27:00 PM
Thanks Anne-Lise, a big hug back.
Date: 2/18/2018 2:13:00 PM
Richard: I found myself falling behind. I can't read that fast. What a great piece of work. Now you have others fired up. The soup is about to boil, as others begin to toil. If we hear shrill sounds, this site may need some oil. Keep them coming. oldbuck
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/18/2018 11:29:00 PM
You might be old but I doubt you’re slow Buck. We let the young ones think that so we can surprise them with our quickness.
Date: 2/18/2018 1:04:00 PM
LOL, I don't know the contest this sends up but it's great fun
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Date: 2/18/2018 12:43:00 PM
You're swinging on a rope of hope tied to the wrong tree ... lol. A rhyme throw-down. Love it!!!!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/18/2018 11:30:00 PM
Thanks Judith.:0)
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