Rain

it feels foolish these rain prayers deeply pondered stranded in our shared heat is there some unimaginable space where prayers drift to? free from time, reclusive rain wishing its pulsating pop that jumps up from pavement a life force puddling weeds from cracks washing all, slick and sloppy rain that settles a hot vacuum cooler transfiguring gardens, a floral fanfare rambunctious ramble with carved trumpets of open orange lilies in a retiring heat we watch-wait for dark clouds in pinball collision a meditation on living for rain to bud the morrow, green in a kettle drum beating

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Marikate Kingston

Date: 4/11/2024 9:46:00 PM

Water is like air isn't it? We could not live without it, everything and everyone would perish. "a life force" How very true. I used to tell my children to turn the water off when they brushed their teeth. "Carved trumpets of open orange lilies" How perfect, that's just what they look like when they bloom. Drip drop, a favorite of mine.

Brian Sambourne
Date: 4/12/2024 3:53:00 PM

You're most kind in your supportive words on my Water/Rain posting, about replenishing a parched June ground. I am glad that you discovered lines that resonant with you. Be well, Marikate. I hope you enjoy these spring days that may encourage your postings. Cheers. Brian

Bill Baker

Date: 8/14/2023 6:55:00 AM

Your verse has overwhelmed me. Susan's comment below puts my thoughts into words with clear meanings. Write On! Your poetry is as refreshing as the rain on a mid-spring day, my friend. Bill

Brian Sambourne
Date: 8/14/2023 7:24:00 AM

Thanks very much, Bill. Truly encouraging words. I appreciate the nudge forward. Sincerest regards. Brian

Susan Ashley

Date: 8/10/2023 6:13:00 PM

Dear Brian, the talent of your poetic pen transports me to a magical place where my intellect, imagination and heart revels in the creative beauty of your verse. Every verse a gem, rich in metaphor, imagery, alliteration and soul. I especially adored: "pulsating pop that jumps up from pavement" and "carved trumpets of open orange lilies" and "we watch-wait for dark clouds in pinball collision".. not to mention "for rain to bud the morrow, green / in a kettle drum beating" -Wow! Your golden poetry outshines, my friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Brian Sambourne
Date: 8/11/2023 11:22:00 AM

Hello Dear Susan, You are most gracious + generous with your thoughtful appraisal of my "Rain" poem. Sometimes poetic devices are as plentiful as fall frost. Other times, the pen won't budge. Thank you for detailed observations you make about the poem. Sincerest good wishes always, Brian

Deb M

Date: 8/8/2023 8:26:00 PM

Rain is such a necessity in life for so many things and also so beautiful to watch and be part of! A wonderful poem Brian….l hope it rained!! Debx

Brian Sambourne
Date: 8/8/2023 8:38:00 PM

Hi Deb, Oh yes, we've had lots of rain unlike other parts of the world. Thank you for your drop by + uplifting comments. Be well. Cheers, Brian

I Am Anaya

Date: 8/6/2023 2:27:00 PM

Brian, your poetry excites. I am lucky to have you express my unusual work that makes sense to you and vice versa. After all, poetry is up for interpretation, as they say, real poets understand that. I love the unusual, but the usual gets recognized more because it is safe. ;D Pete Townsand, yes! I saw The Who in concert, one of my very first. The original Pinball Wizard tune!

Brian Sambourne
Date: 8/6/2023 3:31:00 PM

Greetings Anaya, Many thanks for your comments + insights. Poetry is indeed "up for interpretation." It meanders as do our thoughts. My thanks, too, for correcting my senior moment - it was The Who that rocked out with Pinball Wizard. Cheers Brian

Jan Allison

Date: 8/6/2023 11:01:00 AM

Very well penned Brian and congrats on your win, I think many places across the globe are praying for rain, perhaps a rain dance would help too. got to feel for those with unbearable temperatures at the moment. I too love the Elton John connection at final stanza - have seen him in concert twice:-) hugs jan xx

Brian Sambourne
Date: 8/6/2023 3:28:00 PM

Hi Jan, Thanks very much for your detailed assessment of my poem. As Anaya notes, it was The Who that delivered "Pinball Wizard." As for Elton John, I saw him in concert with Billy Joel - a great evening of pop/rock. I hope that you are well. With appreciation, Brian

Jim Slaughter

Date: 8/6/2023 9:29:00 AM

We've had so little rain of any kind this summer, I'd welcome any and all of the kinds you describe so well in this piece, Brian.

Brian Sambourne
Date: 8/6/2023 10:28:00 AM

Hi Jim, Our rain in southern Ontario has been plentiful but I know many places in the US + elsewhere are suffering. I hope that you receive rain soon. Best wishes, Brian

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 8/6/2023 6:29:00 AM

A pinball wizard of a storm! Love the kettle drum beating! Blessings, Brian!

Brian Sambourne
Date: 8/6/2023 10:26:00 AM

Thank you, Kim, for your thoughtful assessment of my poem with your The Who inspired comment. With appreciation, Brian

Terry Miller

Date: 8/5/2023 12:24:00 AM

Brilliant Brian a well-deserved win; congratulations.

Brian Sambourne
Date: 8/5/2023 6:36:00 AM

Greetings Terry, I appreciate your congratulatory message on my posting. The first stanza is problematic for some. However, your take is most encouraging. Cheers, Brian

Yann Rolland

Date: 8/3/2023 11:47:00 PM

nicely written, rain has to be enjoyed for the water and life it brings, thanks for the brilliant penning

Brian Sambourne
Date: 8/4/2023 6:36:00 AM

Hello Yann, Thank you for the uplifting comments. I appreciate your thoughtful appraisal. Best wishes, Brian