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Feb. 6. 2024
Quagmire, Quest, Quiescent Words Poetry Contest
Sponsor- Constance La France
~ Placed First~

 

“Activity makes my life colorful. To be quiescent is relaxing, but when it prolongs, I feel I am dead.” – By Poet
Day after day passes With rarely a purpose to fulfill Thoughts after thoughts flit, With nothing to hold in memory. I am stuck on the lonely highway of life. No addendum! Up the long path of life, From joy to pain, And from pain to joy, I have been oscillating all these years. Now my mind is empty. No exhilarating emotions. No vexing thoughts No nagging concerns No convulsing tidal swaying Like a placid lake with no ripples Like a sponge with water squeezed out Like a kite refusing to soar high, I am now a bough on a sturdy stem, Resisting to be touched by the wind! You might think I have learned, To look at life with a level brow And enjoy the stillness of my mind, When the mad scramble in me dies. Perhaps you are right. But I detest this mental hiatus, This numbing languorousness, This sickening emotional torpor! Am I becoming a log over the moving currents? From this quiescent state, I look for a release.

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Date: 2/18/2024 4:00:00 AM
Congratulations on your winning work. Way to go! Thank you for sharing your talent with us. Sara K
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Date: 2/14/2024 9:28:00 AM
Congratulations on your win for such an amazing emotional poem. I absolutely loved it!
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Date: 2/14/2024 9:28:00 AM
Congratulations on your win for such an amazing emotional poem. I absolutely loved it!
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Date: 2/14/2024 5:16:00 AM
Valsa, excellent writing and congratulations on your placement in my contest, I love your quote too, hugs, Constance
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Date: 2/13/2024 5:19:00 PM
The torment and tribulation I see in your poem is gut-wrenching. The strength you write about such an afflicted mind is immensely moving, Valsa. I applaud your prowess to bring such emotion to a blank page. Such a well deserved first place. Best wishes from your friend Wen.
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Date: 2/13/2024 1:07:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your wonderful "Quiescent" write/quote. Enjoy your day with your win..........................
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Date: 2/8/2024 1:52:00 PM
I love it. For me, i say you dwell in the numbs, it saves a lot of thoughts, wants and tears. Happy new year dear Valsa.
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Date: 2/7/2024 11:20:00 PM
Good luck, in the contest. This goes on my FAV list. I pray for comfort and strength for you, my dear friend. Bill
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Date: 2/7/2024 11:18:00 PM
Your words evoke vivid memories of times in my life when I struggled with my will to live and wanted to feel again, anything to know it is worth it to keep on living. Excellent poetry, my dear friend. This is too good to not have a real life experience to draw the passion of these words from. I'm saddened you are experiencing these feeling. I wish I could comfort you and help you through this, Valsa. My prayers and Love I hope will encourage you and help you get through this. Big Hugs, Bill
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Date: 2/6/2024 5:09:00 PM
What an absolutely touching poem, Valsa. Had you been near, I would've extended compassionate words and a hug to you. I appreciate your struggle and understand it --- was in a similar place about a year ago...the roller coaster of emotions and the lethargy I felt was new for me. I felt helpless and afraid. Thanks for your vulnerability and for sharing your pain. Sending you prayers and blessings, dear Valsa. Sara
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Date: 2/6/2024 10:58:00 AM
Wishing you health, I admire the deep feelings and emotions in this poem.
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Date: 2/6/2024 10:21:00 AM
Strong feelings in this poem. Lovey imagery.
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Date: 2/6/2024 3:39:00 AM
Dear sweet valsa, i have you in my thoughts, and i hope and pray that you are feeling better, and as for the poem, i just love the way your words flow so seamlessly and how they are so soul touching and evocative and has a sincere voice always. I felt it the opening lines. exhaustion of being stuck in a highway of loneliness! I absolutely love that phrase! And those last lines are truly evocative the way you questioned gets readers to feel deeply! This poem is special with excellent lines. FAVE
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