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Promise Forgotten

a few years ago, my brother was visiting me - we don’t live in the same country, so we don't see each other very often. He was so amazed with some of my artwork, and was looking at each and every piece with great admiration. My artwork is a bit unusual, I work with different kinds of real eggshells - from goose to rhea, from emu to ostrich. He asked me many questions about the process, and wanted to watch how I cut those fragile eggshells in exquisite shapes. In the end, I picked a beautiful one and told him - "This is for you". That one was a goose-shell, painted black and shaped like a jewellery box with two doors, and I painted a gorgeous mountain-scenery on it. He looked mesmerized, and extremely delighted. Then I added - "but listen. I am working on bigger emu shells, very unusual colours, and those are perfect for carving. You will have one - probably with a picture of your soccer-idol - in the future".  His eyes sparkled, and he smiled with joy. Who knew the future? This is my brother who was the kindest, compassionate soul from his childhood - he was almost a refuge for the boys who were victims of bullying in our neighbourhood. He is the brother who had me in the back seat while he was riding a bike. He was the brother who brought me the nicest dress I could imagine, when he received his first pay-check. He was the brother who waited hours and hours in extreme cold outside the airport to receive me when I went back home.  I promised, but then for a few years I got busy with other activities, and both of us forgot about the Emu eggshell.  My brother passed away in summer this year suffering from cancer for a few months. Someone who never complained about any discomfort of his own, passed away enduring excruciating pain.  One morning I was organizing my art for an exhibition, and something struck me. What? What did I do? I did not keep my promise to my dearest brother - there are a few rare emu eggshells in my display cabinet - waiting to be carved!  Now I have no way of going back, and presenting my artwork to the one person who would love and treasure it most! art stares gloomily                                         no more a prized possession                                                      admirer left world November 18, 2021 For " Haibun - with a message" Poetry Contest Sponsor: Charles Messina

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Date: 12/21/2021 8:30:00 PM
You have written a LOVELY tribute to your brother which is equal to the promise you forgot. I praise the Lord that He never forgets the promises He has made to us. We are human; He is divine. God is real, God remembers, God reigns. Blessed be His holy name. Congratulations Malabika.
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Date: 12/19/2021 8:16:00 PM
A deep realisation, Malabika, as we embrace, hold and release each life breath, in the linear time continuum. Yesterday is gone and tomorrow is not promised. Yet our spirits are entwined forever, suffused with God energised love. Congrats on your win
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Date: 12/19/2021 12:33:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. WOW!!! What a wonderful yet sad story/write. These eggs are so very beautiful. Art is in your veins. Have a Blessed Christmas and 2022.......................
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 12/19/2021 3:20:00 PM
Thanks, Paula. Really appreciate your kind comment. This year had been a difficult one.
Date: 12/19/2021 5:15:00 AM
Congratulations on your win! Your story filled with sadness but filled with great love! Blessings, Paulette
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 12/19/2021 6:04:00 AM
Thanks, Paulette. Appreciate your thoughtful kind words.
Date: 12/17/2021 6:16:00 AM
A sad one indeed. Perhaps make one and give it away to someone who reminds you of your brother. Congratulations on a touching write, Malabika! I tried pysanky once. I wanted to take a class but it was hard to find a teacher. You might be familiar. You blow the egg out of the shell and use wax and beautiful colors to draw symbols on the egg. My Great-Grandma who I never met was Ukrainian and made beautiful eggs, my mom told me.
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 12/17/2021 6:38:00 AM
Thank you so much, Kim. It was hard for me to write this Haibun..but I thought, probably it's a Catharsis foe me. Yes, I have decided to do exactly you have suggested. I will make one as he wished for, and present to his only son. I know how Pysanky is done - it's an amazing art from Ukraine. Mine is similar, but a little different. With modern tools, even these arts are easier than before. Loved to know about your grandmother.This is how we cherish our precious memories. Love and blessings ~ Mala
Date: 12/17/2021 5:34:00 AM
A great and beautiful story in the form of haibun with a great haiku. Congratulations!
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 12/17/2021 6:05:00 AM
Thank you, Christuraj. It was hard for me to narrate the story. Really appreciate your kind words.
Date: 11/24/2021 7:27:00 AM
I can feel the pain of your omission of fulfilling your promise. He knows your heart and that life takes over sometimes which leaves us with no time to do those artsy things. He knew it while he was living and he knows it now. Someday you will hug again and love each other with a love that can't compare to what love we have here on this earth. Thanks for your visit to my page. Sara
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Date: 11/19/2021 12:25:00 AM
Heart felt poem and art, Mala. Sometimes our audiance is but one and a moment mean to be is lost. Sorry for you lost but thank you for the wise lesson. A poet friend in the making, Bill
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Date: 11/18/2021 12:45:00 PM
What an incredible story; there is a lesson in here for many of us. Do things now for your loved ones; tomorrow is never promised. So sad. But so wonderful because I believe when the soul goes, they know our intentions and yours were giving and pure.
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 11/18/2021 4:50:00 PM
Thanks, Caren. Your comments are so thoughtful and touching - truly appreciate.

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