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Written - 24th June 2024
Same poem, different forms poetry contest
Spnsored by: Crystol Woods
Subject chosen - no.8 Pride
Written in Free Verse There's a star with my name written on it I wrote it, so that's how I know Came to me in a dream one starry night Instant star of night I become. In filigree lace I adorned myself Placed a tiara on my head Then made up my face like a beauty queen And sprayed silver sheen on my hair. Ready for action I soared into space Leaving contrails above earth You'd never believe the journey I had Met the moon man,though sad he seemed. Said he had no beams, that they'd wandered off I said try borrowing from sun Next, angels said there's no reason to hark And only had harps without strings. I reached my star, on it my name I wrote Though tough as the star was aflame The journey back home was not all that bad Though I landed down with a smack. Then I woke up, with my heart full of pride That my name was now on a star Anyone can do it, nothing to it Make your mind up, follow your dream. * * * Rewritten in Swap Quatrain There's a star with my name on it I know for ‘twas me that wrote it In a dream I flew high and far With my name on it, there’s a star. I was dressed in filigree lace A sparkly tiara in place Never felt so good or blessed In filigree lace, I was dressed. Rapid I rose up high in sky Alike a bird, found I could fly Passed by the moon, how his face glows Up high in sky, rapid I rose. When I reached sun, much later on So very hot, soon I was gone Sun said we could’ve had fun Much later on, when I reached sun. I reached my star, it wears my name My one and only claim to fame See my name wherever you are It wears my name, I reached my star. When I awoke I felt vast pride And a joy that I could not hide In gold are the letters which I wrote I felt vast pride, when I awoke.

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Date: 7/31/2024 8:55:00 PM
This is so beautiful barrel thank you for sharing with us Who doesn’t want to have their name on the star. But you must know by now that you are already one.. Your last paragraph really wrapped everything up so beautifully like your present with a big satin bowl and gold thank you .Pangie xx
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Date: 7/23/2024 7:33:00 AM
Interesting fun poem Beryl! Debx
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Beryl Edmonds
Date: 7/30/2024 9:06:00 AM
Thank you very much Deb, this challenge was fun to do… Beryl x
Date: 7/5/2024 9:28:00 PM
What a fascinating dream! Swap quatrain itself is so difficult. Changing your poem from free verse to swap quatrain must have been quite challenging, I assume. Beryl, still you have done a wonderful job. Congratulations on your great win.
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Beryl Edmonds
Date: 7/30/2024 9:04:00 AM
Thank you Valsa, free verse doesn’t come easy to me, so it was quite a challenge, an enjoyable challenge though. Love the swap quatrain form, will definitely do it again sometime… Beryl
Date: 7/5/2024 7:56:00 AM
Yay!!! Congratulations on your 2nd place win! I am so glad you entered this beauty! The imagery and choice of form, worked so well together! I felt I was in a dream with you and i LOVE this dream.. the Swap Quatrain was flawless and perfect... you were able to change the free vs without losing anything. Ty for entering this contest! Xo
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Beryl Edmonds
Date: 7/5/2024 8:54:00 AM
Thank you Crystol, I enjoyed the challenge of writing a poem in two different forms for the contest… Beryl
Date: 7/3/2024 10:29:00 AM
Ahh so cool. You did it with swap quatrain. Cool! Also an interesting topic
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Beryl Edmonds
Date: 7/5/2024 8:51:00 AM
Thank you Andrea, I love the poem form Swap Quatrain, which you introduced me too… Beryl
Date: 7/3/2024 12:10:00 AM
A beautiful poem. Well done.
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Beryl Edmonds
Date: 7/3/2024 12:23:00 AM
Thank you very much Daisy… Beryl
Date: 6/30/2024 7:08:00 PM
I like playing dress up. You're an instant star, shining star, Beryl whether in your dreams or awake. Uplifting and the swap form looks like fun! Best of luck :)
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Beryl Edmonds
Date: 7/1/2024 12:20:00 AM
Dear Anya, dressing up is fun whether young or an old un like me. Writing a Swap Quatrain truly is good to do and I enjoyed the challenge. Thank you… Beryl
Date: 6/28/2024 2:01:00 AM
Dear Beryl, you did a wonderful job. Not easy to write a swap poem converted from free verse. You deserve a high placement. Thank you for reading my last poem.
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Beryl Edmonds
Date: 7/1/2024 12:14:00 AM
Dear Victor, I’m chuffed to read those words, so inspiring and kind. As you said, it wasn’t easy to write in both Free Verse and Swap Quatrain, I enjoyed the challenge very much. Thank you my friend… Beryl
Date: 6/27/2024 9:31:00 AM
You my dear friend are so gifted and write your rhyming poems so beautifully, I love that you have written your name on a star, i would love to do the same one day or night! As for your Swap Quatrain EXCELLENT! Have never attempted this form, but your adventurous soul attempts many different forms and styles, all successfully, well done. Hugs and blessings dear friend, Jennifer.
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Beryl Edmonds
Date: 7/1/2024 12:06:00 AM
Dear Jennifer, your kind words lift my heart, I truly enjoyed the challenge of writing a Free Verse poem and an additional Swap Quatrain. Blessings and hugs in return my friend… Beryl
Date: 6/27/2024 4:39:00 AM
Dear Beryl, I loved reading this, and I had to tell you how amazing it is! The imagery is magical and dreamy, and I felt like I was right there with you. It’s a beautiful piece that left me feeling inspired and joyful. -Blessings, My Friend, Daniel
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Beryl Edmonds
Date: 6/30/2024 11:59:00 PM
Thank you so much friend Daniel, your words make the writing of poetry so worthwhile. I don’t write in free verse normally, simply because I’m not good at it. Very pleased the read left you inspired and joyful, who could ask for anything more. Blessings in return dear Daniel, Beryl
Date: 6/26/2024 9:23:00 PM
Wow! Well written. I enjoyed this very much :)
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Beryl Edmonds
Date: 6/30/2024 11:48:00 PM
Thank you Heidi, it’s delightful to receive a Wow, I’m so pleased you enjoyed the read… Beryl
Date: 6/25/2024 8:32:00 PM
Lovely piece. The crown perfectly looks good on you and the stars shine so bright. "I said try borrowing from sun Next, angels said there's no reason to hark And only had harps without strings." Amazing.
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Beryl Edmonds
Date: 6/26/2024 1:10:00 AM
Tonye, I truly appreciate your lovely words, they mean a lot and make writing poetry so worthwhile and pleasurable. Thank you so much… Beryl
Date: 6/25/2024 11:30:00 AM
Wow this is absolutely stunning! So gorgeous and so ethereal! From tiara to stars and “ I reached my star, it wears my name My one and only claim to fame” just love that! Youv done swap quatrain so well, I find this form very challenging but yours look and sound seamless and i love your rhymes too . Clever how youv written in this form for this poem! Pleasure reading your work. Sending you always light dear beryl
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Beryl Edmonds
Date: 6/26/2024 1:06:00 AM
Thank you so much Ink, such a wonderful review from you. I’m very pleased you enjoyed the read. I really like the Swap Quatrain form, this is the second one I’ve done so far. Blessings and light sent in return dear friend… Beryl

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