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I lie here waiting for your gaze - The hurt in your eyes is cold fire, Why don't you come near nowadays? What have I done to draw your ire? The hurt in your eyes is cold fire, It seems you are upset with me, What have I done to draw your ire? Talk to me or you'll go crazy; It seems you are upset with me, I feel useless, please fill my blank, Talk to me or you'll go crazy, You know I'll help you, let's be frank; I feel useless, please fill my blank, Why don't you come near nowadays? You know I'll help you, let's be frank, I lie here waiting for your gaze. (Pantoum and Personification) May 25th, 2017 Contest: Form P Sponsor: Broken Wings

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Date: 7/3/2017 2:27:00 AM
Love it, I wrote one called Her Words just because of writer's block. Sometimes you just can't think of a word. Congrats on win :)
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Date: 6/6/2017 7:36:00 PM
Jo, congratulations on your win ~*
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Date: 6/5/2017 4:01:00 PM
Jo CONGRATULATIONS on your win in my contest with this wonderful poem
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Date: 6/6/2017 8:59:00 AM
Thank you so much, Constance, enjoyed the challenge:) all glory be to God alone:)
Date: 6/3/2017 9:46:00 AM
Congrats on your win Jo
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Date: 6/2/2017 7:06:00 PM
Hi Jo, You did a great job with both forms. Congratulations on your win. It was well deserved:-) Alexis
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Date: 6/2/2017 2:26:00 PM
Creative approach to writing. Well done pantoum with personification. Congrats.
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Date: 5/29/2017 12:57:00 AM
GREAT job combining the two forms!! You, I and at least one other person personified pages. I think it was a great way to do it!! and I love how you did yours.
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Date: 5/28/2017 3:36:00 PM
wow, this is very creatively done, jo... greeat wordplay and mood.. huggs
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Date: 5/28/2017 1:32:00 PM
Very nicely done Jo...GL in the contest
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Date: 5/26/2017 2:25:00 PM
I dig it! Tough tough form to write smooth lines for, very well done, Jo.
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Date: 5/25/2017 9:50:00 PM
Love this Pantoum, difficult for but you pulled it off! Should do well in the contest!
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Date: 5/25/2017 8:13:00 PM
Sad Poem, yet lovely.
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Date: 5/25/2017 6:44:00 PM
Hi Jo, i love the Pantoum, it is such a beautiful form to work in. Your piece has used this form excellently. Loved the content Jo. Off to read again. This has to be a seven and a fave. Your Friend always....Mike.
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Date: 5/25/2017 2:58:00 PM
Love the Pantoum, Jo, one of my favorite forms... good luck with this great write.. ~*
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Date: 5/25/2017 11:19:00 AM
The melancholy tugged hard at my heart...well done Jo
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Date: 5/25/2017 10:53:00 AM
You just commented on one of my writes that sad poems are abundant lately, so it must be contagious... now you've written one, too. And a very fine pantoum it is, Jo.
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Date: 5/25/2017 10:37:00 AM
Wonderfully written my friend. The theme is consistent and the feel of the piece is smooth. I liked this a lot.
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