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For Sotto Poet's Any theme any form poetry contest

 

Poetic Victims of Circumstance

"Cruel birds—ravens—but wise. And creatures should be loved for their wisdom if they cannot be loved for kindness."
- Hannah Kent


My lover's demons are like ravenous ravens.
Her love is a hand grenade triggering exploding emotions,
massacring words into silent suppression
but beyond the threshold of her eyes, 
there's a scarlet love silhouette, 
hoping upon hope for expression,
to reset her reality -  to express her freedom of spirit.

I ask the one who feels the tremors of my heart,
why are you afraid of happiness?

We were not made to be broken,
yet we fracture a little everyday.
Although you are fragile like a paper plane,
the world with you and me can soar
against turbulence in the world's playground.

In darkness I'll be your harbinger of crescent moons,
as my heart is a complex phenomenon,
yearning to be special in your ordinary sighs.
I hunger for you to leave me breathless,
as internal invisible wounds don't heal,
when we are lost in an ocean of souls,
but empathy has an evergreen effervescence,
so I'll radiate light into your wilted moonflower eyes,
watching them glow like dancing streetlights.

In the angst of absence and abandonment,
I've lost all desire to bleed,
searching for harmony in music's salvation,
but it only brings broken strings,
as I'm sleeping to the rhythm of heartache.

My muse serenades in melancholic melodies,
composing a confusing chaos concerto,
searching for pamphlets of medleys 
with symphonies of pleasure.

What are we,
but poetic victims of circumstances,
versifying verses which unravel my mysteries.
Maybe in a peaceful tomorrow, 
I'll write again,
but today, 
I'll bathe in raindrops of hope,
illuminating in a rainbow of reveries.

I believe in magic when I envision your cathartic haze.
I know you are obsessed with forever,
but time silently escapes whilst we are apart.
If not in this temporary existence,
then in the afterlife, meet me in heaven,
where we can rise with eternal ethereal sunrises,
because your celestial eyes betray your mortal guise.

I could never write a poem as perfect as you.
With or without me,
we'll be immortally together in heartbeats,
where there is poetry,
there will always be love.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2023


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Date: 1/20/2024 8:17:00 AM
Dear Silent. I have no words. I am in awe of your poetic pen. I would only repeat myself so I will say nothing as not to diminish your extraordinary masterpiece. Allow me just to say that the line of "I ask the one who feels the tremors of my heart, why are you afraid of happiness?" really speaks to me and is brilliant not that the entry itself isn't because it is. May your golden poetic pen be with you always. Peace and Blessings always. (smile) It was an honor turning to your page.
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Date: 12/11/2023 5:58:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. A creative/wonderful write. Love It... Have a blessed day writing away.......................
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Date: 12/10/2023 9:54:00 PM
Hi Silent One, back to your lovely poem with Congratulations on your first place win.
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Date: 12/10/2023 6:05:00 PM
I knew this was a winner from the very start Silent One, congrats on a job well done. My heart rejoices alongside you
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Date: 12/10/2023 4:34:00 PM
An excellent poem my dear poet friend SO. Big congrats on your well-deserved first win! I've loved and immensely enjoyed reading it. Thanks a lot for sharing. Blessings to you always and your writings. Hugs
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Date: 12/10/2023 10:56:00 AM
Congratulations on your win with this masterpiece of a love poem, Silent One. Sometimes I miss congratulating other poets, but this is such a profound winner. All the best. ~~~~~
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Date: 12/8/2023 4:43:00 PM
Very melancholic poetry, Silent One. The love is unconditional, God like, a willingness to sacrifice self for the other is almost beyond human limits. Then you express the depth of pain the separation is causing and the hope of togetherness in a heavenly existence. Your use of alliteration is pleasing as I read. The flow of the poem is rhymical as you express the many emotions present in different verses. A good entry for the contest! Good luck, my friend. Bill
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Date: 12/8/2023 8:27:00 AM
Wow, so beautiful.... so intense, so soul stirring. Though betrayed and staying apart, you are ready to do anything to cheer your beloved. I love many lines.... "so I'll radiate light into your wilted moonflower eyes, watching them glow like dancing streetlights.". So sweet of you. Though apart, you envision a time when you can be together "If not in this temporary existence, then in the afterlife, meet me in heaven, where we can rise with eternal ethereal sunrises"! Simply beautiful.... Silent One.
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Date: 12/8/2023 5:49:00 AM
I felt the intensity of dialogue between lovers of poetry. Love binds poetic souls.
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Date: 12/8/2023 3:40:00 AM
Dear Silent One, this is such a profound and extremely melancholic poem which can make anyone's heart feel those vulnerable shades. When love binds two soul in such a way that one person is affected by the traumas of the past and the other one wishes to bring light in his/her life..Sigh, I can feel the depth of those words "I ask the one who feels the tremors of my heart, why are you afraid of happiness?"To find someone who's willing to erase our grief and bring the rays of sunshine, that's rare
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 12/8/2023 3:44:00 AM
There are so many feelings that you've infused in this poem whilst playing with alliteration, metaphors and imagery. There are so many brilliant lines here especially "wilted moonflower eyes", "In darkness I'll be your harbinger of crescent moons", "then in the afterlife, meet me in heaven, where we can rise with eternal ethereal sunrises" Just wowww and that ending too. This poem is absolutely one of my favs from you! Best of luck in Sotto's contest too!
Date: 12/8/2023 3:04:00 AM
What a brilliant and moving write this is sweet silent one. Your quill is an empathetic one that feels and understands various shades of emotions and put them all on paper for the ones that can resonate. I felt this poem. Which depicts a toxic relationship, where one has to deal with an individual with mental health issues, its never easy, for loved ones especially one who is in a relationship. I love the metaphors alliterations and your choice of words for this poem. And its flows in such
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Date: 12/8/2023 3:06:00 AM
Eloquence.. I especially loved and felt the lines “ I believe in magic when I envision your cathartic haze. I know you are obsessed with forever, but time silently escapes whilst we are apart. If not in this temporary existence, then in the afterlife, meet me in heaven, where we can rise with eternal ethereal sunrises,“ made me tear up. Its so delicate and soul stirring. Poignant on so many strong levels that i can resonate too. This is a fave for me and goodluck for the contest. Sotto would see the depth and poetic nature of this poem for sure
Date: 12/8/2023 2:44:00 AM
Such a beautiful, meaningful, poem. So well expressed. Well written.
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