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Please Love, Come Over Here

Vizualize, Scrutunize and Remark-Poetry Contest Sponsor: Forever Malta Please love, stay over there, while I stay posed on your chair. Look at me with those deep brown eyes, as I take off my disguise. My beauty for you is reserved, I'll show you the passion you deserve. My tiny cami calls your name, as I wish for you to do the same. Please love, stay over there, I feel your ecstasy as you sit and stare. I know you've craved my adoration, while I crave your exploration. Our concupiscent world of magic, has saved me from a life so tragic. The desirous nature of our togetherness, has made us so powerless. Please love, come over here...let's soar freely through our atmosphere. ~Date Written: March 3, 2016~ 1st Place Winner

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Jean Murray

Date: 3/20/2016 12:58:00 AM

Fantastic. I see him drooling.

Balveen Cheema

Date: 3/17/2016 8:45:00 AM

Congrats on your top placement, Laura!

Lu Loo
Date: 3/17/2016 9:59:00 AM

Thank you very much Balveen :)-luloo

Teddy Kimathi

Date: 3/17/2016 3:47:00 AM

Sensual, deep, emotional, adrenaline catalyst... Congrats Laura, for your well, deserved first placement in the contest!!! ;-)

Lu Loo
Date: 3/17/2016 9:58:00 AM

Many thanks Teddy :)-luloo

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 3/16/2016 11:07:00 PM

Awesome heartfelt write Laura.. congrats on much deserved top podium.

Lu Loo
Date: 3/17/2016 9:58:00 AM

Thank you Dr. Upma :)-luloo

Charlie Smith

Date: 3/16/2016 8:00:00 PM

Congratulations Luloo, well deserved...

Lu Loo
Date: 3/16/2016 9:33:00 PM

Thank you very much Charlie..:)-luloo

Sam Jameson

Date: 3/16/2016 6:46:00 PM

I like this angle-- it has that element of, "no, no...yes!" to it. Well done luloo, congrats on top spot :)

Lu Loo
Date: 3/16/2016 9:32:00 PM

Many thanks Sam :)-luloo

Sandra Haight

Date: 3/16/2016 6:41:00 PM

Nice interpretation, Laura! Congrats on your First Place win! Hugs, Sandra

Lu Loo
Date: 3/16/2016 9:32:00 PM

Thank you very much Sandra :)-luloo

Lin Lane

Date: 3/16/2016 5:11:00 PM

Well done and congratulations, Laura.

Lu Loo
Date: 3/16/2016 5:51:00 PM

Thank you Lin :)-luloo

Rob Carmack

Date: 3/16/2016 5:07:00 PM

I like the expansion from the poem, with the color of the eyes and the saving from tragic. Congrats.

Lu Loo
Date: 3/16/2016 5:08:00 PM

Thank you very much Rob...:)-luloo

Janice Canerdy

Date: 3/16/2016 4:55:00 PM

Congratulations on your well-deserved top win, Laura! Janice

Lu Loo
Date: 3/16/2016 4:57:00 PM

Thank you very much Janice -luloo :)

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 3/16/2016 4:54:00 PM

Very Sexy Laura, congrats on your top spot!

Lu Loo
Date: 3/16/2016 4:55:00 PM

Thank you very much Richard -luloo :)

Hafssa Aj

Date: 3/16/2016 4:42:00 PM

great poem , congrats on your placement :) Laura Loo

Lu Loo
Date: 3/16/2016 4:49:00 PM

Many thanks Hassan :)-luloo

Stephen Pennell

Date: 3/16/2016 4:11:00 PM

ooh are miss'es very good, deserved win congrats

Lu Loo
Date: 3/16/2016 4:27:00 PM

Thank you Stephen... :)-luloo

Daniel Turner

Date: 3/16/2016 3:12:00 PM

Hey congratulations, Laura on your prize winning write:) So seductive. Once again love conquers all! Peace sweet lady:)

Lu Loo
Date: 3/16/2016 4:27:00 PM

Thank you DT..:)-luloo

Brian Mcclain

Date: 3/16/2016 2:49:00 PM

Hi Laura, Congratulations on your win with this great poetic personification of love. Plus I learned a new word today: concupiscent / concupiscence! Cheers, Brian

Lu Loo
Date: 3/16/2016 4:26:00 PM

Thank you Brian :) -luloo

Jeannie Cronin

Date: 3/12/2016 2:42:00 PM

This one allows the imagination to soar freely. Best of luck in the contest!

Constance La France

Date: 3/5/2016 4:00:00 PM

Laura, I really like where you took this theme, what I saw as fear, you saw as desire, a winner to me, I was lost in your poem and so I must love this 7 ~

Lu Loo
Date: 3/6/2016 8:55:00 PM

thank you sweet lady :) -Luloo *smiles* thanks*

Gordon Mcconnell

Date: 3/3/2016 1:51:00 PM

Nicely penned piece Laura, catches the mood so well, so romantic and loving!

Lu Loo
Date: 3/3/2016 2:00:00 PM

Thanks Gordon :)-luloo

Frederic Parker

Date: 3/3/2016 11:17:00 AM

You captured a moment in time that the participants would cherish/ good luck in the contest

Lu Loo
Date: 3/3/2016 11:19:00 AM

Thank you Frederic :)-luloo

Daniel Turner

Date: 3/3/2016 10:20:00 AM

Forgive me, Laura. I skipped right by the photo in haste to get to your poem. I did not even notice it was a contest write. It is still a great write but just in a different context. Peace my friend and forgive the faux pas:)

Lu Loo
Date: 3/3/2016 10:34:00 AM

No worries silly it's all good :) -luloo *smiles*

Daniel Turner

Date: 3/3/2016 10:10:00 AM

Very romantic, Laura. The love you share is expressed well in this poem. Peace to you dear friend:)

Lu Loo
Date: 3/3/2016 10:11:00 AM

Thank You:)-luloo