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Written on April, 08 2025 for Edward Ibeh's prompt 4. Picking At Scabs
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A musky, burnt haze sears slowly into my nostrils. The twilight hour pulses steadily, bathing stark walls in an eerie gloom. Too awake to drift to sleep, yet too tired to drag my bones off this sinking mattress. Thoughts cyclone like a tsunami within a withdrawn mind, picking at scabs; the half-life of my darkness pools in red droplets. Licking the wounds, the taste of metallic and melancholy blends. Loneliness wraps its arms around my dejected shoulders like a winding sheet. A howling wind rattles the paper-thin glass making up my windows, as I ponder how I became the living dead. Traumas poisoned my sanity, slowly paranoia replaced reason, delusions became my nightly bedfellow, whispering sweet unpleasantries into tainted ears, leaving hallucinatory trinkets in my repeating nightmares. The world is shrinking, withering, yet as I am becoming paralyzed by fear, I am unequipped to stop it. Like a freight train derailed, bellowing at full speed towards the inevitable, I too am racing at the speed of light towards oblivion.

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Date: 4/27/2025 7:46:00 AM
Sara, I could read this a thousand times and still not gain from it the emotions you exposed when hearing you read it. Your voice lives each tragic line.
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Date: 4/21/2025 9:03:00 AM
Awesome! This is powerful!
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Sara Jama
Date: 4/21/2025 9:14:00 AM
Thank you very much.
Date: 4/20/2025 8:15:00 AM
Brilliant poem, amazing reading, congratulations
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Date: 4/20/2025 6:43:00 AM
"Thoughts cyclone like a tsunami within a withdrawn mind" - Indeed, very powerfully written. Congratulations!
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Date: 4/20/2025 3:47:00 AM
gifted write. Congratulations on your win dear poet. Cheers!!!
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Date: 4/19/2025 12:12:00 PM
Sara, heartiest congratulations on your win in my contest with this masterfully crafted poem. I loved it. Great imagery and diction!
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Sara Jama
Date: 4/19/2025 12:26:00 PM
Thank you for placing me. And the kind words.
Date: 4/9/2025 8:22:00 AM
I want to say wow and first of all and you know, be coherent, but how can I be so composed when complete brilliance just landed on Poetry Soup! Narration of the highest standard here which displays with all the right flourish the excellent entry for the contest. Congratulations on being so clever and talented :) good luck for the contest.
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Sara Jama
Date: 4/19/2025 12:25:00 PM
Thank you very much.
Date: 4/9/2025 7:20:00 AM
Wow grumpy! Youv nailed it not with just the reading of the poem but also with how youve depicted psychosis and what it does and how it feels in such a detailed manner , brilliant metaphors and imagery and flow of your lines in this poem is seamless! I always tell you this that you should share your spoken words as you do them so wholeheartedly. And you have read more than 100s of poets on insta writing community! Maybe you should do readings for soupers? Haha! Would be so nice! FAVE. BOL!!
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Sara Jama
Date: 4/19/2025 12:25:00 PM
Thank you Ink.
Date: 4/8/2025 4:43:00 PM
wow, you got such great terrorizing emotion out of that topic. Wish I could do one like that!! I'd probably just talk about how I pick at my scabs!! I bet this scores high!
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Date: 4/8/2025 5:47:00 PM
Thank you so much for your kind words. I bet you will write an amazing poem on the title you pick. I can't wait to read it.
Date: 4/8/2025 12:42:00 PM
I could relate to this . Paranoia , delusions , and sleeplessness . Sighs . Loved reading it .
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Sara Jama
Date: 4/8/2025 12:45:00 PM
I'm so sorry you can relate to this. Thank you for reading my poem. I appreciate your support.

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