Notes About The Poem

 Mysterious Architecture: Secret passages & hidden rooms were built in  almost every castle & palace since ancient times - Walls with Stories

Past Doorways

By allowing her to leave in haste
and miss the signal of fate’s consequence,
I  wrestle with this fumed moment…and
as knuckled hands tighten,  my quest
for closure suffocates a  hallway.

Backdoor  lightly opens…the shadow- woman
rushes down  down  iron stairways.
I clutch those quivering hands upon rails...
her sweat mixed with tears grinding on my arms,
while I taste its pain, smell  its despair. 

The pungent flavour reeks of hidden sins,
of untold confessions trapped within 
hardened pores: I wail, she wails
on the steep floor... 
and we  holler again. This need to open
what is locked from chains revolts me.
Afraid , I let go    plugging the knob
which could finally release      my false self.


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Craig Cornish's Contest
The Fourth Floor of Nowhere
9/19/2020
Copyright © | Year Posted 2020

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Minardi Avatar
September 24, 2020 at 10:14 PM
what a great write Nette and you won the contest too. Big congrats. I really love the last paragraph. Stay safe :)
Goldsmith Avatar
September 23, 2020 at 9:11 AM
Congratulations on your wonderful win. What a story/poem. Enjoy your win.........
Proxenos Avatar
September 23, 2020 at 3:11 AM
This is wonderful poetry, struck with fear, and revolted, you let .... 'plugging the knob which could finally release my false self' Congratulations my friend, very well deserved on this remarkable win. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.
Hamilton Avatar
September 22, 2020 at 7:06 AM
Congrats Nette on a great win, a very worthy winner, the emotions are palpable in this write.
Mcintosh Avatar
September 22, 2020 at 5:35 AM
This is spectacular, Nette. I love it. It's a inspiration and brilliant verse. Amazing. I love it - God bless you with many, many more. Love and prayers sent your way, Gina
Agustin Avatar
September 22, 2020 at 1:15 AM
Wow! Congrats! Thanks for sharing this liberating muse. God bless you.
Rodrigues Avatar
September 21, 2020 at 8:19 PM
Congratulations, Nette, on top win! The scents and imagery palpable!
Kauffman Avatar
September 21, 2020 at 4:32 PM
Back with congratulations, Nette. So glad I got to read this before the contest. Sending you blessings!
Watt Avatar
September 21, 2020 at 3:43 PM
Amazing writing, Nette, with an intensity that doesn't let up, and imagery that draws the reader into the struggle. "My quest for closure suffocates a hallway" is one of many powerful phrases. Easy to see why Craig would choose this as #1 in his contest; hearty congratulations!
Dutta Avatar
September 20, 2020 at 8:39 AM
Deep feeling. Too tough to follow. I had to read several times. But it attracts.
Vaso Avatar
September 19, 2020 at 11:32 PM
Beautiful
Conte Avatar
September 19, 2020 at 10:41 PM
My buttons were triggered by this intense, surreal work, Ms Nette.I encountered an incident when I had to face a recurring fear and your poem just took me in.
Kauffman Avatar
September 19, 2020 at 5:23 PM
Incredible depth, Nette. "Pungent flavour reeks of hidden sins," "tears grinding on my arms," "suffocates a hallway." These are powerful, visceral images all summed up in your last three words. Best wishes for the contest!
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