Carrie Richards Poet Tanka

Pass the Salt

early sunrise
sugarcoats the morning mood
masking last night's news
in a charade of cheer
melting frozen, salty tears 


sun's antidote
sweetens my attitude
I must embrace 
new beginnings, and rub salt
into wounds of yesterday



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10/14/13
For Andrea Detrich's Contest: "Sweet or Salty"

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Cecilia Macfarlane November 8, 2013 at 12:43 PM Excellent write and win Carrie! Hugs

Skat A November 7, 2013 at 11:55 AM Carire *nice* SWEET Or SALTY win................... HUGS ~SKAT

Poet Destroyer A November 6, 2013 at 7:23 PM Carrie, , Congratulations On your way to xool Sweet & Sour win... always~ Linda aka PD

Nette Onclaud November 6, 2013 at 11:23 AM how can i not LOVE the poetic flavor of this piece, carrie... happy cheers to you for your win!..:) huggs

Sara Kendrick November 6, 2013 at 7:42 AM Congrats on your great win with this intriguing work..Sara

Lisa Mccall November 6, 2013 at 12:22 AM Lovely write congrats on ur win

Juliet Ligon November 5, 2013 at 8:44 PM Inspirational. Congrats, Carrie!

David Fisher November 5, 2013 at 6:04 PM This is terrific...congrats on the win!

Joyce Johnson November 5, 2013 at 10:58 AM Always a winner Carrie. Congratulations. Love, Joyce

Donna Jones November 5, 2013 at 10:17 AM Sometimes things do look a little brighter with a new tomorrow's sunrise.....congratulations Carrie...

Ilene Bauer November 5, 2013 at 8:59 AM wonderful! a well-deserved win, carrie!

Debbie Guzzi November 5, 2013 at 8:23 AM Salt is very painful in a wound don't do it! ;) Congrad's on your win

Richard Lamoureux November 5, 2013 at 8:12 AM Well done Carrie! Congratulations.

Andrea Dietrich November 5, 2013 at 7:42 AM Hi, Carrie, I am not surprised this one was yours. I don't know how well I understand tanka poetry, but in my opinion this is superb. Congrats for your first place in my contest.

Harry Horsman October 17, 2013 at 8:36 AM Oh yes, i also see this as having time to muse on what happened in your yesterdays,, i just love Tankas and these are as good as i've ever seen...

Tim Ryerson October 16, 2013 at 1:28 PM I think I know where this one comes from Carrie...LOVE the contrast here and the way you use salt as a healer for the 'wounds of yesterday'...True, it stings but it heals as well and the healing process hurts too...

Poet Tacito October 15, 2013 at 10:38 AM Fantastic. Sometimes, that's the only way to remove "yesterdays".

Monterey Sirak October 15, 2013 at 8:22 AM Love it! A winner for sure.

Mpho Leteng October 15, 2013 at 7:34 AM great write!

Dr.Ram Mehta October 14, 2013 at 10:31 PM Two nice images of the use of salt, Carrie

John Posey October 14, 2013 at 9:57 PM I've not written many tankas. I hope they will all turn out as great as yours... Thanks for the comment on my latest.... Yea, this was set to country type accompaniment -- guitar, base guitar, drums and steel guitar turned out nice.... Love that ya loved it.... Hugs... Jake.