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Parched Earth-2 Forms

1. Form: Free Verse/Theme: Indulgence Singing those praises in church, I see a vision of a parched earth. Geosmin scent ascends; or descends. Transference between reality and surreality. My mind is soaked in soil microbes, no shower sensation in sight. Today it might rain; or not. Sunday, I’ll be praising in church, whether, or not, we get relief; but there will be comforting amidst the suffering; or not. Can you tell, Georgia needs rain? Our birds crave it. My lillies lay in wait to relieve the scorch of Summer heat. I am conditioned with air, but I need to hear the rain and smell the petrichor ‘plash. For that I’ll accept the invitation to sit on my screened-in deck, hopefully hear the roar of thunder, and the whooshing wind through the plush leaves, as the treasures of heaven, fall like silver coins, to make mud. 2. Form: Rhyme/Theme: Indulgence Sing chorus of reality; A parched sur’ality. From the dry earth, a scent ascends; Geosmin scent descends. In soil microbes, my mind awoke, tempting shower, a soak. Where rainfall’s sensation is bliss, The serpent-earth’s amiss. Today the rain might fall; or not - Our suffering; or not. In church, we will be still and praise - Weather or not, we’ll praise. I think you know, Georgia needs rain. The birds crave its refrain. Relieve the scorch of Summer heat. My lillies wait for beat. Air-conditioned, am I, but I Am longing drench, not shy. I wish to smell the petrichor - A splash of rain, adore. To hear the roar of thunder-speak; The whooshing wind, this week. Heaven’s treasures pour out and sud And mix the silver’d mud. I’ll sit on deck and marvel at The rush of leaves, the splat; Splish-splosh and churning soil to cure Descend, ascend, endure.

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Date: 7/5/2024 9:20:00 PM
Dear Kim, I love both the poems expressing your desire to see the mud soaked in rain and smell the petrichor rising thereof. One month back, we too longed for rain in the height of summer and sweltering heat. But now we have rains and only rains. The transfer from free verse to rhyming quatrains is done wonderfully well. Congratulations on your win.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/6/2024 6:48:00 AM
Thank you so much! This was not easy, both to come up with worthwhile subject matter and to transfer into a different form. God bless you always, Valsa!
Date: 7/5/2024 7:40:00 AM
Well lookie here who it is! Yay! Congratulations on your 2nd place win! I loved this poem and how perfectly you were able to change forms without losing anything necessary to keep the imagery, emotion, and message clear. This poem felt like a breath of fresh air after a cleansing rain. Classic and beautiful words and imagery. Ty for entering! Xoxo
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/5/2024 3:49:00 PM
Wow, Crystol, thank you so much! xoxo!
Date: 6/28/2024 6:34:00 AM
So much in life to be preoccupied with --you showed us that in your mixed forms
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/28/2024 8:45:00 AM
Thank you, Patti! It is fun to write with various forms.
Date: 6/28/2024 2:23:00 AM
Wonderful, Kim. You changed forms but kept the same meaning. You are very talented. Best for a win.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/28/2024 5:53:00 AM
Thank you, my sweet friend!
Date: 6/27/2024 10:48:00 AM
Amazing poetry! I liked how you mixed the forms together to make this marvelous poetry- hugs <3
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/27/2024 10:55:00 AM
It is for a contest. Thank you so much!

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