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Pale Shelter

` Love, to you nothing more than washed away graffiti, once dripping along the mismatched bricks of this worn facade where tattoos mean forever . . . even when they fade A clutched lamppost, scarred and dented, a fake shade of green meant only for leaning and illuminating handbills advertising high rent in the slums, supports me As I look beyond the littered gutters needing a good rain to wash away the past where you left me standing again, uncovered, exposed . . . winter called and thinking it was you, (it had the same chill affect) I answered I thought you were it, that thing that I needed, not a leaking roof draped in a blue tarp, but the east to my west when my direction pointed north until you ran south taking it all with you Beyond my control, you laughed at love, (cackled) thought you knew better, cut holes in my umbrella and then prayed for rain, while my life was already drowning You gave it and took it and with my happiness in tow on that one way street where “No Vacancy” signs were misspelled, drove away, drove away from me, tail lamps and your heart . . . never braking 11/12/19 Written for the Pale Shelter Poetry Contest Sponsored by John Hamilton

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Date: 12/8/2019 7:00:00 PM
Congratulations for your top win Chris! You are on a roll! I am happy for you :)
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Chris Green
Date: 12/9/2019 8:50:00 AM
Thanks so very much my friend. : )
Date: 12/8/2019 5:41:00 AM
Congratulations on your superb win. This poem is amazing. Kind wishes, Kai
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Chris Green
Date: 12/9/2019 8:48:00 AM
Thanks so much Michael. I am thrilled you liked this one.
Date: 12/7/2019 11:15:00 PM
Congrats, Chris. I knew this one would be a winner! Very well thought out.
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Chris Green
Date: 12/9/2019 8:48:00 AM
Thank you so very much Juliet.
Date: 12/7/2019 8:06:00 PM
"cut holes in my umbrella and then prayed for rain" that's cruelty to the nth degree. Happy to share the honor with you, Chris.
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Chris Green
Date: 12/9/2019 8:48:00 AM
Thank you so much my friend. our kindness is always a gift to me.
Date: 12/7/2019 5:36:00 PM
Congrats on your winning poem Chris
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Chris Green
Date: 12/9/2019 8:47:00 AM
Thanks again Greg. I appreciate your kind thoughts
Date: 12/7/2019 2:12:00 PM
Chris your narrative approach on this was brilliant, with using words with such color and street depth its one of my faves!! Lonna
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Chris Green
Date: 12/9/2019 8:47:00 AM
Thank you so very much Lonna. I am happy you liked this one.
Date: 12/7/2019 1:51:00 PM
I told you this would shine at the top...well done Chris...congratulations on your first place win :) hugs
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Chris Green
Date: 12/9/2019 8:46:00 AM
Yes you did. : ) Thank you for your kindness and the faith you have in my poetry Sandy. I appreciate everything you do my friend.
Date: 12/7/2019 1:35:00 PM
Well done Chris, you tell a sad tale, with vivid descriptions only a master storyteller can do. Congrats on a top win!
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Chris Green
Date: 12/9/2019 8:45:00 AM
Thanks so much John. I am honored your enjoyed this one enough to recognized it in your contest.
Date: 11/15/2019 1:09:00 PM
Wow, powerful verse!
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Chris Green
Date: 11/15/2019 1:35:00 PM
Thanks so much Juliet. I appreciate your visit today
Date: 11/14/2019 10:10:00 AM
This is a superbly written poem with all the descriptions and the aching of heartache is so deeply felt. It is hard to read this one and not cry. It reaches the reader strongly. Well done Chris ! :)
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Chris Green
Date: 11/14/2019 10:34:00 AM
I appreciate you saying so Heidi...now if will only reach the judge. : ) Thanks my friend
Date: 11/14/2019 8:47:00 AM
WoW! Chris, You did a great job with the contest theme. This is a slam dunk! This is a top contender. Excellent job. Best wishes in the contest. Have terrific day my friend:-) Alexis
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Chris Green
Date: 11/14/2019 8:59:00 AM
Thank you so very much my friend. I appreciate all of the kindness you show me always.
Date: 11/14/2019 7:02:00 AM
Awesome write... sure it's a winner. Blessings to you, Love, Gina
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Chris Green
Date: 11/14/2019 7:03:00 AM
Thank you so very much again Gina for always being so nice to me.
Date: 11/14/2019 12:22:00 AM
A winner in my book. Good luck in the contest, Chris.
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Chris Green
Date: 11/14/2019 7:00:00 AM
Thank you so very much Caren
Date: 11/13/2019 4:24:00 PM
Talk about pale shelter---You have written the primer on t! Bravo! As the Rolling Stones once sang, 'Gimme Shelter!' :) gw
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Chris Green
Date: 11/13/2019 4:29:00 PM
Wow, I wish I would have thought of that. One of my favorite songs. Thanks so much my friend. I'm glad you liked this.
Date: 11/13/2019 3:53:00 PM
wow this is deep, your depictions are outstanding. The depth of the pain show the reader your feelings perfectly. Thanks for sharing this. Good luck in the contest. A small note: In the poem you mentioned gutters. I just finished my work for the day and today my job was cleaning out gutters. 13 houses to be exact. Have a great day.
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Chris Green
Date: 11/13/2019 4:22:00 PM
Ha, I didn't mean those gutters but I know what you mean, just cleaning out my own is a chore. : ) Thanks so much Greg. I appreciate your comment today.
Date: 11/13/2019 3:33:00 PM
I've got an ending to add to your poem: And in hindsight finally realized how you weren't good enough for me... Well penned, Chris.
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Chris Green
Date: 11/13/2019 3:34:00 PM
Thanks so much my friend. I like that but I'm not really sure I have realized that yet. : ) I appreciate you Line, you are always so nice to me.
Date: 11/13/2019 2:54:00 PM
Beautiful, deep, sad poem. I love the fluency and the layered descriptions that permeate throughout this piece. Best wishes for the contest.
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Chris Green
Date: 11/13/2019 3:33:00 PM
Thanks so much for stopping by to read and for leaving such a nice comment for me. I appreciate your visit.
Date: 11/13/2019 2:22:00 PM
Wow. Talk about an emotionally painful poem ... I could feel this one my friend ... well penned poem that is sure to shine at the top of the winner’s circle :) hugs
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Chris Green
Date: 11/13/2019 2:28:00 PM
Sandy, your kind comment has brought the biggest smile to my face. I wasn't sure how some might take this because it is not my normal flowery love poetry. I appreciate you my friend.
Date: 11/13/2019 2:21:00 PM
Wow. Potent gripping write, the winner for me. xomo
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Chris Green
Date: 11/13/2019 2:27:00 PM
Thanks so much my friend. I am thrilled you came by to read this one and even more thrilled you liked it so much.
Date: 11/13/2019 2:14:00 PM
That is heartbreaking!
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Chris Green
Date: 11/13/2019 2:19:00 PM
Thank you Christine. I am glad you felt this one, that theme is what I striving for. I appreciate your kindness and you taking the time to read this.

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