Painful Hibernation

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This is my cocoon, my bed, and I am sleepy For no one will I leave this warm place, I hibernate With my slender fingers, with the last bit of my strength I build this final place I wrap my arms around my head, they are so painful My knees around themselves, so thin and bone alone I rest my head inside my arms, and push it all away Outside this final place I am no more, today I finally stop being I never asked to have this strange body that I loathe Those ever crying thoughts that haunt inside my brain Let me my final place *** If this is cease to be, how come the flying colours? The strange sensations while I suddenly can move? Is this crawling out of painful hibernation Leaving life of darkness then? *** January 31, 2017

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John Herlihy

Date: 2/1/2017 2:17:00 AM

Very intense, very moving. I know what you are talking about. I wrote a poem recently that I may eventually post on the very same subject where I say that moments come when I just shut myself away. There is a cure in solitude. JH

Darren White
Date: 2/1/2017 2:21:00 AM

I can only *nod*. Yes, absolutely. If you ever decide to post, I would very much like to read it.

Chris Green

Date: 1/31/2017 8:51:00 AM

I can see and understand the analogy here and it is painful. But, with every pain there is another part that is enhanced, like the brown caterpillar who emerges with wings of vivid colors, your colors my friend are extremely vivid and are seen in your poetry.

Darren White
Date: 1/31/2017 9:15:00 AM

I am working my way through difficulties, with pain. But I indeed chose this analogy very deliberate. Hopefully my colours shine for everyone.

White Wolf

Date: 1/31/2017 8:31:00 AM

A very heart-wrenching poem! Leaves one speechless to say the least! 7/7

Darren White
Date: 1/31/2017 8:34:00 AM

Thanks Budgie... Yeah...

Joanna Daniel

Date: 1/31/2017 8:31:00 AM

What a vivid write, Darren!! I can feel the pain of the butterfly, surely this is great poetry:) a 7:)

Darren White
Date: 1/31/2017 8:33:00 AM

Thank you, Jo! Also for the 7 :)