Outside My Window For Contest

A million shimmering lights twinkling in the moonlight 
paint their glittering shadows across the blue lagoon, 
as upturned dancing candles’ hot flickering fingers
curl to beckon me beneath the whispering waters.

Two swans; lost in their embrace, interlaced with shadows;
serenity in motion, but not a ripple made.
Patrolling borders as one, parading their passion   
as if no-one is watching, together forever.

But the vista disappears as harsh tones fill my ears
and my new panorama now slides away from sight;
the truck which bore my tableau pulls away to reveal
in it’s glory, the old view; my neighbour's dull back yard. 

Bill Lindsay 

September 12th 2015
Copyright © | Year Posted 2015


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Date: 10/10/2015 12:13:00 PM
Well done x I love it x congrats wendy
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Date: 9/30/2015 11:45:00 PM
congrats Bill. You have great views and a great capture of them. Curtis
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Date: 9/29/2015 9:42:00 AM
Thanks everyone for your uplifting comments; my view is as boring as described, I therefore imagined what I would like to see and went from there .. ;)
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Date: 9/29/2015 9:34:00 AM
DAMN....follow that truck....find out where that picture was taken....GO THERE!!!! Well done....loved the twist at the end. We must seize what gentle moments as we can...then let them pass. CONGRATS on the win....well deserved.
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Date: 9/29/2015 5:03:00 AM
Well done x congrats x Wendy
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Date: 9/29/2015 2:41:00 AM
A well deserved win Bill! Congratulations!
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Date: 9/29/2015 1:55:00 AM
A paradoxical write! Congrats Bill!
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Date: 9/29/2015 1:21:00 AM
Congratulation on your win. Excellent.........A.M.
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Date: 9/28/2015 11:38:00 PM
Very brilliant take on the theme Bill! Congrats on first place win!
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Date: 9/28/2015 10:58:00 PM
Hi Bill, Congrats in Bev Smith's, contest. Hugs **SKAT**
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Date: 9/28/2015 8:45:00 PM
A very pretty and creative poem, Bill. Congratulations on your well-deserved win ... CayCay
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Date: 9/28/2015 6:37:00 PM
Wonderful twist, Bill. You had me wishing for that same view right to the end. Congrats on your first place win. :) Janece
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Date: 9/28/2015 5:19:00 PM
Bill, great write. Mixing ad based dreams with reality. Love it.
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Date: 9/28/2015 4:04:00 PM
Such fabulous imagery Bill I can see why this got the top spot - many congrats:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 9/12/2015 10:08:00 AM
Great image - A mirage before reality struck again, revealing your neighbor' backyard. Good write and good luck in the contest.
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