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Our Last Goodbye

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My husband was helping out in a church yesterday ... I sat outside and wrote this poem

I sit in solitude under the willow tree within the shadow of a broken heart I carry your casket along with me it is here that we will forever part I pray you’re looking down from high above where heaven cares for the souls of the dead I scatter your ashes in a spot that you love and leave a rose in a deep shade of red Your sudden death left a gaping hole I’ll remain alone for the rest of my days My constant grieving has taken its toll as each day passes in a melancholy haze Wishing that this wasn’t our last goodbye I raise my tear filled eyes up to the sky One In Four Poetry Contest chosen line 3. Within the shadow of a broken heart Sponsored by Joseph May 8/9/19

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John Hamilton

Date: 9/5/2019 1:12:00 PM

Very nice Jan, I like your serious poems this one shows off your talent, congrats on a winning write!

Heidi Sands

Date: 8/26/2019 6:42:00 PM

Congratulations for your win Jan :)

Sandra Adams

Date: 8/25/2019 7:09:00 PM

wow...poignant yet so beautiful within it's sadness...congrats on your win, i think it's deeply beautiful! hugs :)

Lu Loo

Date: 8/25/2019 12:17:00 PM

wow what perfect rhythm and rhyme, Amazing job sweet Jan- congrats :)-luloo

John Gondolf

Date: 8/25/2019 12:07:00 PM

A beautifully written melancholy poem, Jan, congrats on you win. Hugs, John

Joseph May

Date: 8/25/2019 8:53:00 AM

A poignant write Jan..Congrats on your win..

Edmund Strempfl

Date: 8/11/2019 10:04:00 PM

Can feel the thoughts the way you have written this emotional absorbing poem poem

Jan Allison
Date: 8/12/2019 2:26:00 AM

Thanks Edmund I much prefer to write humour but am delighted with the way this turned out:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 8/10/2019 11:26:00 AM

Hi Jan, This poem literally moved me to tears. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Have a great weekend my friend- Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 8/12/2019 2:25:00 AM

Thanks Alexis makes a change to write a serious poem:-) hugs Jan xx

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 8/10/2019 8:34:00 AM

Beautiful words that are worthy of contemplation. Hugs Rick.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/12/2019 2:24:00 AM

thanks Rick:-) hugs Jan xx

Tom Wright

Date: 8/10/2019 7:59:00 AM

Very heartfelt emotional write Jan. Touched my heart. God bless you friend. Tom

Jan Allison
Date: 8/12/2019 2:24:00 AM

Thanks Tom, thankfully its fiction for me:-) hugs jan xx

Kaveesha Ruwindi

Date: 8/10/2019 3:27:00 AM

Wow this is awesome! Simply perfect! Best of luck in the contest :)

Jan Allison
Date: 8/12/2019 2:21:00 AM

Thanks Kaveesha I much prefer writing humour but do surprise with the odd serious poem:-) hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 8/9/2019 4:34:00 PM

I know one day this will be me Jan, so your poem felt very emotional. Today is my husband's 75th birthday and I am so grateful he is still with me. This is a lovely moving poem Jan. I think it will rate high in the contest! : ) xxoo

Jan Allison
Date: 8/9/2019 5:03:00 PM

aww Connie your comment brought a lump to my throat, Happy birthday to your hubby, and may you have many years left together my friend:-) hugs jan xx

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 8/9/2019 1:54:00 PM

This is so heartfelt and and heartbreaking, a perfect poem for the contest, best of luck, Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/9/2019 2:08:00 PM

Thanks Michelle, I wrote it in a churchyard car park... maybe I should go there more often!

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/9/2019 12:34:00 PM

- A place for thoughts and words ... beautiful and moving, Jan - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 8/9/2019 12:39:00 PM

I've never written in a churchyard car park before!:-) hugs Jan xx

Vijay Pandit

Date: 8/9/2019 11:16:00 AM

Excellent poem Jan..written so perfectly..it captures the feelings of the theme.. and essence of a broken heart.. in wonderful rhymes. I predict a TOP win..it is so for me.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/9/2019 12:39:00 PM

thanks Vijay I hope Joseph likes it:-) hugs Jan xx

Tom Cunningham

Date: 8/9/2019 10:46:00 AM

You captured the theme well Jan in your sad verse. Good luck Tom

Jan Allison
Date: 8/9/2019 12:38:00 PM

Think I need to sit in a churchyard more often i wrote 5 poems whilst hubby was helping a friend in the church!:-) hugs Jan xx

Quoth Theraven

Date: 8/9/2019 9:29:00 AM

Jan, Very expressive and thought provoking rose. -Richard

Jan Allison
Date: 8/9/2019 12:37:00 PM

thanks Richard:-) hugs Jan xx