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February 19, 2025

~ First Place ~
Premiere Contest: Poetry Marathon Mile 24
Sponsor: Mark Toney

~ Ninth Place ~
Premeire Contest: Healing
Sponsor: Kai Michael Neumann


 

Premiere Contest WinnerOrphan

I chance upon her
in the far reaches of the backyard,
a place I never go. There she trembles. 
A tiny tiger, whose newborn eyes blur the world,
secreted in mother-scented-shadows 
below blackthorn shrubs. 

Faint mews draw me closer.
The power of her vulnerability
fills my veins with a ripple rising,
brimming me with a nectar needed,
like a dry stream bed restored by remedy rains.

How helpless she is with new eyes open.
Her eyes like skylights — clear
and filled with new-wild-blue innocence.
Neglected yet beautiful, I sense in her
the familiar phenomenon of the impulse to pulse.
Her outsized feistiness belying
such a petite package of plea and need
with teeny needle claws and barely a wisp of a hiss
  ...and I recall when I felt the fear
of being small and voiceless in a choiceless world.

Born a feral kitten, her mother likely lost
to speed-wheels of a car or snap-jaws of coyotes,
whose throats float steaming howls above black
saw-toothed pines to haunt the long night moon
  ...and I wonder, if she wonders, 
if the sweet-milk-purrs with soft belly fur
will ever return to snuggle her.

She’s been cold and alone for far too long.
So I gather her in the hug of my hands
warming her as I draw her in and curl 
my chest around her littleness.
A shield formed against her lone-ness.
  ...and I, a long-ago-child abandoned, 
a child whose silent cries heard only by stoic walls, 
reclaims a voice that helps me make a choice 
not to let Nature decide how birth and fate collide.

So I sit with her, swaddle her, love her. 
Nourish her with eye-dropper milk where
hearth embers still glow after the fire,
to heal the orphan and raise the phoenix within.
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Date: 11/9/2025 5:15:00 AM
Congrats on your win! You are top-notch, Susan!
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Susan Ashley
Date: 11/11/2025 7:45:00 AM
Dear Kim, thank you for your kind congrats and inspiring words. I am humbled by your precious thoughts. Warmest wishes, my poet friend.. ~Susan
Date: 10/30/2025 9:11:00 AM
Sweet Susan ,this has been a real treat. I see your motherly instincts in full play. A tender baby, no matter of human species or animal species needs so much of care and attention soon after its birth. If the mother is not there to take care of, it becomes an orphan. You have delineated the sad plight of a little feral kitten which has lost its mother. The way you have connected your own life with the orphaned kitten is so touching and how you have narrated your earnest efforts to heal the orphan and raise it into a phoenix is simply adorable. I read this poem three times, not because I needed extra clarification, but simply because I loved every line of it. This is highly emotive, sensational, stirring and equally beautiful- first rate poetry. Congratulations dear one on your well deserved trophy win.
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Susan Ashley
Date: 11/4/2025 7:45:00 AM
Dearest Valsa, my enlightened poet friend, I relish the golden glow you shine upon my humble poem. Your poetic presence and beautiful thoughts add value to my poem. I am both humbled and uplifted by your treasured words and kind congrats. Thank you for sharing in the imagery and emotions of this poem with me. The orphaned kitten is symbolic of the speaker as an abandoned child. In rescuing the kitten, the now adult speaker rescues their own inner child to begin a healing process through the beauty of empathy and the power of choice. The beauty of your tender heart shines through your lovely thoughts and I'm so very happy to know that you were touched by this piece. Warmest wishes, my lovely and gifted poet friend.. ~Susan
Date: 10/29/2025 4:12:00 PM
Such a sweet poem of caring, nurturing and loving. I'm not huge on pets or ferals but I get the appeal. Can't imagine a child feeling so alone and afraid but happens all too often. Congrats on your first place win.
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Susan Ashley
Date: 11/4/2025 7:38:00 AM
Dear Tom, thank you for sharing in the emotions and imagery of this poem with me. The kitten is symbolic of the speaker of the poem, an "abandoned child", now an adult. In rescuing the kitten, the speaker rescues their own inner child to begin a healing process through the beauty of empathy and the power of choice. Like you, I can't imagine a child feeling so alone and afraid, and yes sadly, it happens all too often. Your kind congrats are greatly appreciated. Warmest wishes, my inspiring poet friend.. ~Suze
Date: 10/29/2025 1:31:00 PM
Susan, Congratulations on a first-rate write. Wonderful compassion.
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Susan Ashley
Date: 11/3/2025 5:30:00 AM
Dear David, thank you for your gracious visit and kind congrats. We all need compassion like we need the air we breathe. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 10/29/2025 10:29:00 AM
Susan, “Orphan” starts out like an endearing kitten rescue, but quickly becomes a reflection of your own personal experience, “...and I, a long-ago-child abandoned, a child whose silent cries heard only by stoic walls, reclaims a voice that helps me make a choice not to let Nature decide how birth and fate collide.” Brilliant! Congratulations on your trophy win on Mile 24 of my 2025 Poetry Marathon Contest. Keep your running shoes on, because Mile 25 has already started. Only 2 more miles to go before the Qualifiers’ Final Placement contest!
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Date: 10/31/2025 8:13:00 AM
Dear Mark, yes, the orphaned kitten is symbolic of the speaker as an abandoned child. In rescuing the kitten, the speaker rescues their own inner child to begin a healing process through the beauty of empathy and the power of choice. I'm so glad to know that particular line resonated with you, it's one of my fav lines in the poem. Thank you for the honor of my poem's placement in your esteemed contest. I'm thrilled to be among the gifted poets on your list. Your kind congrats are truly appreciated too. The finish line is within view of the naked eye :)) Warmest wishes and thank you for your contest sponsorship.. ~Susan
Date: 10/29/2025 10:15:00 AM
Susan, this is beautiful. You do two things which are just about impossible (clearly, not impossible to YOU): you balance those conflicting impulses that are in us all - the fight instinct and the yearning for help: and you allow the story to unfold at just the right pace, giving us fragments of information, one by one. You're a worthy champ! Michael
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Susan Ashley
Date: 11/4/2025 7:34:00 AM
Dear Michael, I truly relish your beautiful response to my poem. I'm so glad you noticed the unfolding nature and pacing of this poem. Those two things were very important to me, to reveal the introspection and epiphany as emotions naturally emerged. Thank you for sharing your treasured insights delivered by your enlightened poetic spirit. I'm honored, my poet friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 3/10/2025 8:23:00 PM
Susan, wow, this is outstanding and excellent in everyway possible, emotional and beautiful, I love it and FAV it, well done, blessings ~
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Susan Ashley
Date: 3/12/2025 12:44:00 PM
Dear Constance, I am honored by your beautiful response to my poem. I know you have a tender heart full of love for animals, especially cats, so I'm not surprised that this poem resonated strongly with you. We are so similar in our affection for animals. Thank you for your gracious visit and precious thoughts. The honor of your fav is deeply appreciated. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 3/2/2025 10:26:00 AM
Hello Susan, I love the ending. I am glad the kitten got a new home. My fav. Hugs. /Darlene/
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Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 3/3/2025 11:25:00 AM
Hello Susan, Thank you Susan. This poem deserves a fav. You are welcome my dear friend. Hugs. /Darlene/ Warm wishes.
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Susan Ashley
Date: 3/2/2025 8:22:00 PM
Dear Darlene, I cherish your beautiful thoughts. The honor of both your friendship and fav is truly appreciated. Thank you for your gracious visit my sweet poet friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 3/1/2025 10:33:00 AM
Soul touching poetry. I took my time, reading every word, feeling every breath, and glimpsing the story between the lines. You are an amazing writer Ms.Susan... and person. I hope there was someone, much like yourself, in your youth, who took you into the hug of their hands to swaddle and norish you, as you did for this brave (and blessed) kitten. Xoxo
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Susan Ashley
Date: 3/2/2025 8:19:00 PM
Dear Chystol, thank you for sharing in the emotions and imagery of this poem with me. I’m honored and humbled by your beautiful comments and they are held in my truest appreciation. In gratitude for your kindness and friendship. Warmest wishes, sweet poet friend, your golden pen and heart shines~Susan
Date: 2/25/2025 9:17:00 AM
Dear Susan, Wow, it holds such tender power, an exquisite intertwining of rescue, memory, and healing. I love the way you breathe life into both the tiny tiger and the orphaned soul within is very moving. Love is such a quiet testament to the redemptive power of compassion. Beautifully done. Winter Blessings, my Dear Friend, Daniel
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Susan Ashley
Date: 3/1/2025 8:50:00 AM
Dear Daniel, your compassion is a potent force that extends beyond the confines of the comment box to expand across the universe. Thank you for exploring the emotions and imageries of this poem with me. Your treasured insights are always deep, rich and beautiful, as expressed here - "Love is such a quiet testament to the redemptive power of compassion" - so very true, my poet friend. I am humbled and honored by your kind poetic spirit. Warmest wishes with appreciation.. ~Susan
Date: 2/24/2025 11:53:00 AM
Wow - this was absolutely amazing to read. That ending is so heartwarming... healing the orphan within. Incredible writing! It's so nice to revisit your page! So so many memorable lines. Always, Laura
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Susan Ashley
Date: 3/1/2025 8:12:00 AM
Dear Laura, my soulful poet friend, I revel in your return to the pages of PS. It's wonderful to receive your thoughtful, insightful and uplifting comments. Thank you for sharing the the emotions and imageries of this piece with me. Your poetic spirit is truly appreciated and embraced. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 2/23/2025 5:49:00 AM
Good if that poor animal survive. You have a tender heart.
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Susan Ashley
Date: 2/27/2025 9:33:00 AM
Dear Victor, thank you for your gracious visit and lovely response to my poem. The beauty of your empathy shines. This poem is as much about the kitten's present as it is about the speaker's past. The orphan within applies to both. Warmest wishes my inspiring poet friend.. ~Susan
Date: 2/22/2025 11:19:00 AM
Sad and beautiful, Susan!
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Susan Ashley
Date: 2/27/2025 9:31:00 AM
Dear Kim, thank you for your gracious visit and lovely response. Warmest wishes dear poet.. ~Susan
Date: 2/21/2025 4:12:00 AM
It's a tough, cruel world out there and nature is relentless, but sometimes fate takes a helping hand and all is good in the world again.
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Date: 2/21/2025 7:33:00 AM
Dear Paul, thank you for your positive view on my poem. Indeed, it's a tough, cruel world and a helping hand makes all the difference in one's fate. This poem is as much about the kitten's present as it is about the speaker's past. The orphan within applies to both. Thank you for your gracious visit and kindness. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 2/20/2025 3:08:00 PM
This has a sweetness and compassion that renews faith. I hope that the kitten survived and had a happy life. May your kindness be rewarded.
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Susan Ashley
Date: 2/21/2025 7:35:00 AM
Dear Hilda, thank you for seeing/feeling the compassion of this poem. This poem is as much about the kitten's present as it is about the speaker's past. The orphan within applies to both. To receive and extend kindness is truly a beautiful thing. Your lovely presence here is truly appreciated, my poet friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 2/20/2025 7:49:00 AM
The last line tugs at my heart dear Susan . I have missed your poems, heart and soul . Healing the orphan within is an ongoing process and can be revisited time and time again through life’s journeys. What a lucky little feral tiger ! Big hugs dear friend. I have missed being here. Sending love and light on the whispers of white wings. Love, Susan :)
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Susan Ashley
Date: 2/20/2025 9:55:00 AM
Dearest Susan, my sweet soulful poetry sister, your glowing presence that so brightens my soul and my poetry pages has sorely been missed. I'm thrilled to see you this morning! Your thoughtful insights are cherished and I revel in sharing the many facets of many lifetimes with you. When the heart shatters the heart can also heal without seams. Big hugs to you my dear friend. Warmest wishes and love sent on the glide of white wings.. ~Susan
Date: 2/19/2025 4:15:00 PM
I love cats so much. This is touching work. What a cat mother you make - :)
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Susan Ashley
Date: 2/20/2025 8:48:00 AM
Dear Paige, I've adopted a few feral kittens over the years, all of whom made wonderful pets, especially Fudgie who passed at age 18. So glad to know you were touched by my poem. Your thoughts are cherished, my sweet poet friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 2/19/2025 10:21:00 AM
Hello Susan, this is really a very touching write. It went straight into my heart. To save, care and love a lost soul. Sending Blessings your way, my friend.
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Susan Ashley
Date: 2/20/2025 8:45:00 AM
Dear Zyrool, I'm honored and touched to know that my poem 'went straight into your heart'. Thank you for sharing in the emotions and imagery of this poem with me. Your thoughts are treasured and your compassion shines. Warmest wishes my poet friend.. ~Susan
Date: 2/19/2025 10:17:00 AM
Oh Susan your poem is so moving l love the lines ....she wonders "if sweet milk purrs with soft belly fur will ever return to snuggle her" that is just beautiful it makes me want to care for and snuggle the little orphan.....Debx
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Susan Ashley
Date: 2/20/2025 8:42:00 AM
Dear Deb, it's wonderful to see you! Thank you for your treasured thoughts. I'm so glad to know my verse moved you. The beauty of your empathy shines as brilliantly as your golden pen! I find the line you highlighted to be on of my fav lines in the poem too. My heart goes out to the helpless among us. Warmest wishes my sweet poet friend.. ~Susan
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