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Open the Floodgates

(Fictional, but based on the real experience of one of my close friends who lost her daughter in an accident)
As I sat on my desk, Hurrying with my pent up work, A scrap of paper, left unnoticed Clumsily scrawled by tender hands, Swept me right off my feet Distressing thoughts came undulating, With a wave of remorse, surging over I see you darling, before my eyes, Lying still in wreaths of blooms, Your eyes so peacefully closed, The delicate curls, bordering your face, The innocent smile fading from your lips, In a coffin, amid wailing friends and kin, Like a vanishing dream, you lay. In deep quiet, your body reposed, Unmindful of everything around I still recall the day it occurred. I was impatient with you as you dawdled, With toys and trinkets, strewn all around I irritably motioned to clear the mess, And rattled off like the stern sergeant, To get dressed and be off to school You departed in a shuffle, Your face cast down to hide the hurt. Before the wall clock struck nine, Before the tiffin packed and kept, You came dressed in grey pinafore, Your long hair braided on either side, And flashing ribbons tying the ends, With the satchel, lying heavily on your back As you were about to leave, You turned sheepishly to my side, And shouted out in tremulous words, ‘Bye Mommy, Bye……!’ Never I guessed it be a parting knell! Before long, like a lightning came The news of the school bus colliding with a truck! A chill of fear ran down my spine, Awful thoughts went spinning through. It crushed my spirits, as I learnt, Late that evening, you were gone! Each time as I rehearse the scene, A thousand razors cut through my vein, Smile has long deserted my face, Never a tear runs down my cheeks. I fear, oh I deadly fear, Over the humid darkened sky, The rain clouds, never shall trail! Oh my child, will you come, Just once to throw your arms around, And kiss me on my hollow cheeks, To break loose the clouds in torrential flow How in vain, I yearn for a life, To start anew, all over again, With the same beats, resonant and ringing, With the same rhythm in every step Picking up that souvenir of love, Clumsily scribbled by tender hands, So thoughtfully gifted on Mother’s Day, I cried my heart out to naught, As the flood gates of heaven had opened Till my eyes were reddened to blood, Bereft of another drop to shed Feeling relieved, I went back to work, With the pain allayed… With my heart purged… Like the clean, azure sky, after the rains! ------------------------------------------------ May.2. 2022 Placed First Pick a Title, Vol.30. Poetry Contest Subject- Open the Floodgates Sponsor- Edward Ibeh

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Date: 5/30/2022 8:21:00 AM
Back with BIG congrats on your TOP win, Valsa. Well deserved as always.
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Date: 5/30/2022 7:46:00 AM
Your poems have great sentiments expressed very subtly and beautifully. Congratulations!
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Date: 5/29/2022 7:13:00 PM
Valsa, back with sincere congratulation on taking first place with your remarkable poetry! You are more than deserving of it.
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Date: 5/29/2022 4:31:00 PM
Heartiest congratulations on your top win in my contest with this absolutely brilliant poem, Valsa:-) Powerfully moving and well-written. WOW!
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Date: 5/29/2022 9:16:00 PM
I feel so thrilled, equally moved by your words of encouragement and kindness. I owe you much Edward.... ! So far, in your contests, I could do rather well . May God bless you for taking the trouble of conducting these challenging contests...
Date: 5/5/2022 3:22:00 PM
So tragic, but such an opportunity to feel the healing hand of God, as time heals the deepest wounds. A meaningful poem with much wisdom and help for others. It will help some pass through the darkest hours and others to prevent much of the needless pain through personal growth. Bless you for sharing such a personal poem, Valsa. Good luck! Bill
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Date: 5/4/2022 6:17:00 AM
Wow, Valsa, this poetry is quite emotional; yes, I can relate to every word you've written here. Throughout, both love and suffering are present, and they both heave at the emotional core. As is usual for you, my friend.
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Date: 5/2/2022 11:25:00 PM
" a thousandvrazors" of recall when a child, or lived one, goes too soon, and we missed saying bye! How can we know every-thing. Pathos poem, kudos. Shalom shalom sis Valsa
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Date: 5/2/2022 11:21:00 AM
Remember "thoughts are things" and try to imagine more positive happenings! Your language skills are first-class! Aloha!
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Date: 5/2/2022 11:03:00 AM
This poem is grand. There's emotion, imagery, relationships etc. Your poetry is always first class.
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Date: 5/2/2022 7:02:00 AM
Wow, so heartfelt is this poetry, Valsa, yes i can relate when hanging on to every word.
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Date: 5/2/2022 5:24:00 AM
So heartfelt and emotive poem, Valsa. Both love and pain exude throughout--and tug the heart. Well composed as always my friend. Best to you.
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Date: 5/2/2022 4:46:00 AM
A heartbreaking verse Valsa, to lose a child is unbearable, I'm so sorry for your friend. Tom
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