Onslaught

Grief comes uninvited, like a marauder, like a one man army charging, he makes an unexpected onslaught. A thief in the dark who comes stealthily, without pausing to seek permission and settles in the heart like an intruder His stay is long and tedious. He eats away our vitality, sups on our vulnerability, sucks our life sap and fattens on our gloom. Like a tenant who hasn’t paid a single dime as rent, he invites our wrath! Even under threat, he would never vacate It is at night, he revels and makes the most fierce onslaught He snubs out our sleep, disturbs our calm Wide eyed, we have to watch the nasty antics of this tyrant He drives out all hope, battles with our cheer, evicts all positive vibes, and invades the entire space. Weaving sticky gossamer threads to ensnare all happy thoughts which come our way and like an ugly spider, he arrogantly dwells in our heart! __________________________________ Sept. 11.2022 ~ Placed First~ Pick a Title, Vol.32. Poetry Contest Sponsor- Edward Ibeh

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Date: 10/17/2022 7:56:00 AM
A truly exceptional piece, Valsa:-) Heartiest congratulations on your top win in my contest!
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Date: 10/18/2022 10:28:00 PM
Thank you so much Edward ! So glad you like my poems and feel obliged for this great win.....
Date: 10/15/2022 11:03:00 PM
Wow! An outstanding write indeed, Valsa ~ congrats on your top win, well deserved
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Date: 10/14/2022 10:18:00 AM
Back with congratulations on your 1st place contest winner. You amply deserve it, Valsa. Blessings
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Date: 9/12/2022 7:41:00 PM
Valsa, you have done a magnificent job of describing suffering, and you have done so in a way that is both gorgeous and lyrical. The imagery that you have conjured up with your beautiful verse has a convincing ring to them. Best wishes for a win.
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Date: 9/12/2022 6:51:00 PM
It's sickening as your piece deftly indicate, intricate trap that appear endless, yes you do well not being stricken. I pray to overcome nonetheless.
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Date: 9/12/2022 9:47:00 AM
Valsa, you have so deftly described grief and in a most beautiful and poetic way! The images that you have created with your marvelous lines ring true! Well done!!!
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Date: 9/12/2022 7:44:00 AM
Oh so nicely perfected Valsa. Each stanza flowing elegantly into the next to the final climax! Linda
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Date: 9/11/2022 12:08:00 PM
Wow in such fab great metaphoric natration narration you describe how grief steals into our hearts like an unwelcome invader, long staying not paying tenant. Kudos!!
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Date: 9/11/2022 12:05:00 PM
Well thought, said, and done. The web of life is sticky indeed! Aloha!
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Date: 9/11/2022 10:35:00 AM
At the top of Calvary, one thief repented the other did not. Like this unrepentant thief we have millions. They care not that they might leave impoverished people. Great poem with a perfect description of someone who thrives in luxury without working. Well done, dear Valsa.
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Date: 9/11/2022 8:18:00 AM
A accurate description of grief, Valsa. Your poem and your metaphors are exquisite my friend. It brought back briefly the terrors of my own past grief. Excellent writing and entry for the contest. Good Luck! Peace be with you! Bill
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Date: 9/11/2022 5:30:00 AM
The uninvited intruder roils humanity. Well delivered verse on grief, Valsa. Best to you.
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Date: 9/11/2022 12:52:00 AM
You discribed grief so well Valsa, trying to fight it is impossible, it always runs its course, eventually we can overcome come it but the scars often remain. Tom
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Date: 9/10/2022 10:03:00 PM
Beautifully crafted, Valsa. Thus it is, consumed by the monster we ourselves indulge, with our attention.
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Date: 9/10/2022 9:57:00 PM
Oh, so different from you, Valsa, yet shows the diversity of your skilful applications, you are treasure here on soup, long may you reign. harry
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