Poet Destroyer A Poet Free verse

One More Try

" ONE MORE TIME "

Stale and innocent I close my eyes.
Unpolished bones inside.
I mock my dreams, in hope I find reality.
I swim like streamers near an undying sea. 

STALE ............
INNOCENT against a stetson smell.
I CLOSE the door that circulates my emotions.
MY EYES, allergic to the the smallest particles of your  lies.
UNPOLISHED beauty, that can't be seen with the naked eye.
BONES INSIDE shiver like no other.
I MOCK the same words, over and over. ((I LOVE YOU))
MY DREAMS keep me from fading. 
IN HOPES I wake up to feel more alive.
I FIND REALITY when I close my eyes.
I SWIM LIKE the open sunrise.
LIKE, the moon you come and go.
STREAMERS NEAR and far, move real slow.
AN UNDYING SEA, I just want to fall and jump right back in.

BY;PD

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Robin Davis November 17, 2013 at 5:17 PM Linda These words are hopeful and gives the reader a sense that dreams don't have to die. Even if they take forever to come true, never give up on them Great job Hugs Thanks for the 2nd place with my Trickery poem.

Len Gasun May 25, 2013 at 9:07 PM I'm finally back to reread and comment here (just done my breakfast) once again my dearest sis! Soooo lovely tip-top write as always! You're forever the best! I remember one of the piano pieces i was practicing yesterday (my piano day since we didn't have yet Sat. Class, but next wk ohhh), One More Try. Thank you so much for sharing it again! love lots 4ever, Leonora

Len Gasun May 25, 2013 at 7:58 PM Hi, my dearest sis! I'm still here & at the same time reading your text. My texting & internet both go quite slow..lol. I'm coming back to comment. I'll go & read more your text messages.

Lucilla Carrillo February 3, 2013 at 11:44 AM Linda; This is beautiful. I love you. I remember saying those words many years ago, about a thousand times. They didn't work, so I never said them again - not even to my husband. I was too afraid to say them, but almost at the end of his life I did. He had earned them. Sometimes, people are afraid to love. Thanks for sharing. Your friend Lucy

Demetrios Trifiatis December 11, 2012 at 6:00 AM Well written! Philosophical! In no way are you a Poet Destroyer But a Poet Builder! Thank you for your comment, very kind of you.

Andrea Dietrich December 1, 2012 at 4:29 PM thanks so much for waiting on me. Can't believe I did that.

Len Gasun October 17, 2012 at 8:27 PM This is excellently right write my dear friend, PD. I like/love every poem you write. You're really great! By the way did you read my soupmail?

Joseph May July 24, 2012 at 7:08 PM a wonderful write PD...hugs...Joseph

David Scott July 24, 2012 at 8:08 AM I know what you mean about keeping dreams alive I think I try to relive my lost dreams over and over again like reality I close my eyes hoping everything will be different when I again open them very emotional another nice read luv david scott

Pace Ink-U-Script July 1, 2012 at 8:30 AM Now this is what I like...pure emotions from within...an excellent piece here..let me know what you placed in the contest..I know it was long ago.

Ashley Renee June 2, 2012 at 12:32 PM God your poems are great! Can't get enough.

Bl Devnath May 30, 2012 at 10:19 AM So sweet the line is and touched my heart and soul,...."UNPOLISHED beauty, that can't be seen with the naked eye", loved always, bl

Ravindra K Kapoor May 27, 2012 at 1:00 AM This one is quite different my friend. "MY EYES, allergic to the smallest particles of your lies. UNPOLISHED beauty, that can't be seen with the naked eye." Great lines in this superb verse. Congrats on your well deserving win. Love and best wishes...Ravindra...Poet D.

Patrick Cornwall May 11, 2012 at 9:15 PM Nice write

Prince Ekpemandu April 21, 2012 at 3:03 PM nice one sweet

Judy Ball April 1, 2012 at 2:27 PM WoW What a poignant piece this is. Congrats on you much deserved win. Gopd Bless, JB

Walayee Poet Lay Whitlock-Ishway March 28, 2012 at 11:51 AM Congrats on your win PD! This is such a heart wrenching write... :)

Benjamin Joshua Obeng March 22, 2012 at 10:13 PM Congrats :) this was good

Kim Merryman March 21, 2012 at 3:02 PM You did good, PD. Congrats on your win! Love, Kim

Carol Sunshine Brown March 19, 2012 at 11:59 AM Congratulations on your win in Debbie Guzzi's "Et cetera" contest P.D. Love, Carol

Gwendolen Song March 19, 2012 at 6:01 AM I read of this form on a poetry website the other day not knowing it was what Debs wanted for this contest..it said that this is one of the newer more difficult forms...So proud of this work of yours, PD...great job...keep shining, young lady! Love, Gwendolen

Debbie Guzzi March 18, 2012 at 6:52 PM Enter the conquering heroine! Congrad's Light & Love

Poet Destroyer A March 18, 2012 at 12:50 PM YEAH...ME

Joyce Johnson March 17, 2012 at 8:11 PM A good try and a great win pd. Strange how each of us did it just a bit differently.

Olusegun Arowolo March 17, 2012 at 6:06 PM Fine piece,PD.Congrats on your super win in this contest..I love your write esp "the unpolished beauty that can`t be seen with the naked eye..Keep flying my dear friend...you are forever cherished and loved....O.A

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