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How the movement of light seems to trace my ardor lingering in whirls of flame; where glimmers of a cherished dream become this heart’s desire to journey with you along waves of endless moments. I cuddle hours waning through faded notes, for my affection always clings inside your breath...but trickles of rain sweep this sweet intent I cannot ever have; yet I memorize those fingers well, knowing my love is one-sided... O painful the ache of a moon blue releasing your quickened look as the train whistles of farewell while you hug me mildly... calling me 'dear friend.' For Nayda Ivette Negron's Contest: Unrequited Love 11.30.2016

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Michael Thompson

Date: 12/5/2016 12:12:00 PM

Wow....This is truly beautiful.

Just James

Date: 12/4/2016 1:40:00 PM

Bitter, sweet, lovely!

Frederic Parker

Date: 12/1/2016 12:52:00 PM

this one touches the heart and allows a glimpse into a gentle soul..beautiful poetry my friend

Rob Carmack

Date: 12/1/2016 4:05:00 AM

Excellent Nette, but then again, that is all you write. I liked everything, except the title. The title seems beneath the poem. Congrats!

Probir Gupta

Date: 12/1/2016 4:01:00 AM

impressive imagery ... congratulations ...

Pashang Salehi

Date: 11/30/2016 10:40:00 PM

Very beautiful... Good luck..

Jan Allison

Date: 11/30/2016 5:51:00 PM

Dropping back with my congrats Nette:-) hugs Jan xx

Nayda Ivette Negron Flores

Date: 11/30/2016 5:19:00 PM

Congratulations Laura in the placement of the contest.

Robert Lindley

Date: 11/30/2016 4:10:00 PM

So beautiful and a pleasure to read my friend...

Tim Ryerson

Date: 11/30/2016 2:46:00 AM

Ah Nettie, I can surly identify with this superb gem, especially the last two lines...As they say: 'Been there, done that'...You have turned the pain of rejection into a thing of beauty with your usual style and elegance...A 1st place winner in my book - Tim

David Mohn

Date: 11/29/2016 8:40:00 PM

no one can wrap pain in silk quite the way you can Nette...exceptionally written

White Wolf

Date: 11/29/2016 7:56:00 PM

You are a great writer, Nette, and this is no exception! Well penned my friend and good luck.

Heidi Sands

Date: 11/29/2016 3:52:00 PM

This is so well written Nette! Good luck in the contest :)

Gary Smith

Date: 11/29/2016 3:40:00 PM

Just beautifully written Nette. :)

Doug Vinson

Date: 11/29/2016 3:24:00 PM

Oh, how the ending makes us feel. Nette, that is the real deal, and now it's like I need to take a painkiller. Cheers, Doug.

Noel Onat

Date: 11/29/2016 3:08:00 PM

Written with depth and haunting tone tone, you give me this streak of melancholia utterly staggering and painfully erupting.A poem to re-read and remember as I have this thing about trains.

Becca Teagan

Date: 11/29/2016 3:04:00 PM

oh this gives me goosebumps... you nailed this in a stunning way, Nette.. very nice.. as always. I'm always in awe. Hugs

Chris Green

Date: 11/29/2016 2:15:00 PM

Nette, this is so sad. To have these feelings build up and then deflated by a friendly two word term that is not even close to what you wanted to hear. Your poem is beautifully, it is so wonderfully written, it keeps the reader up there with you and then watches us fall in the end, crying along. I really loved this poem.

Jan Allison

Date: 11/29/2016 2:10:00 PM

Aww Nette this is so so sad I had a huge lump in my throat by the end of the poem:-) Good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx