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On the Beach

soothing waves caress my toes a pink shell glistens 07-23-17

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Ronald A. Williams

Date: 8/10/2017 4:33:00 PM

Excellent

Jan Allison
Date: 8/11/2017 1:28:00 PM

Thank you Ronald:-) hugs Jan xx

Edward Mccall

Date: 7/30/2017 4:35:00 PM

What a great little haiku Jan. I will look for that pink shell when I go to the beach in September.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/30/2017 4:45:00 PM

Pure poetic licence for this poem as the beach i was walking on was extremely pebbly and i had my trainers on lol - we do have a glorious sandy beach about 5 minutes from where I live though but not many shells on it:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/25/2017 6:19:00 PM

This is very nice haiku, Jan!! It has that third line effect going for it!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/25/2017 6:28:00 PM

Thanks Andrea I never know if it is a real haiku but I think I am getting there:-) hugs jan xx

Joseph May

Date: 7/24/2017 10:16:00 PM

Very nice haiku Jan...best wishes

Jan Allison
Date: 7/25/2017 3:42:00 AM

Thanks Jospeh it's just a fun poem not for any contest:-) hugs jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 7/24/2017 7:52:00 PM

Oh Jan...this is just the kind of haiku I love! It has that aha moment all try to create but many miss. Outstanding! : )

Jan Allison
Date: 7/25/2017 3:42:00 AM

Oh thank you so much Connie:-) I never know if I have written a proper haiku or not:-) hugs Jan xx

Lim'Rik Flats

Date: 7/24/2017 9:11:00 AM

I think this is deelightful and quite haikuish. ('course I'm no authority on such matters) Do seashells poop? Just wonder'n... huggaminavoochies! ~ j

Jan Allison
Date: 7/24/2017 9:12:00 AM

ha ha ha well in my poems anything can happen so i guess seashells can poop lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Darren White

Date: 7/24/2017 1:01:00 AM

Lovely haiku.... only it leaves me wondering what that pink shell is up to!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/24/2017 7:49:00 AM

lol :-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 7/23/2017 9:07:00 PM

I would love to have my toes on the sandy beach and let the cool waves cool my feet and luck to find a nice size seashell. Nicely done..

White Wolf

Date: 7/23/2017 8:10:00 PM

A lovely haiku, Jan

Jan Allison
Date: 7/23/2017 8:18:00 PM

thanks WW and no mention of poop for once lol:-) hugs jan xx

Susan Ashley

Date: 7/23/2017 7:15:00 PM

Hi Jan, this is a sparkling gem! It puts me right there with you :)

Jan Allison
Date: 7/23/2017 8:07:00 PM

I think mine won't be renewed for crimes against poetry lol

Susan Ashley
Date: 7/23/2017 7:24:00 PM

Poetic license is the spice of poetry :)

Jan Allison
Date: 7/23/2017 7:17:00 PM

Thanks Susan there is a lot of poetic licence here as i was walking with trainers on and the beach was stones and pebbles :-) hugs Jan xx

Russell Sivey

Date: 7/23/2017 5:46:00 PM

Awesome! This is such a spectacular Haiku! I really enjoyed reading this tremendous piece this evening, you brought a smile to my face by your descriptive verse! I loved this write a lot! Great Work!!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/23/2017 5:54:00 PM

Thanks Russell I never know if I have written a proper haiku or not:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 7/23/2017 4:24:00 PM

Hi Jan, You have penned a lovely haiku with good imagery. I enjoy taking walks on the beach. Well done:-) Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 7/23/2017 4:35:00 PM

Thanks Alexis we have a glorious golden beach 5 minutes from the house but this beach was at the far North of the Island is just pebbles so there was a lot of poetic licence here:-) hugs Jan xx

M. L. Kiser

Date: 7/23/2017 4:11:00 PM

Been there; that takes me back...I loved picking up shells. Well done.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/23/2017 4:17:00 PM

It's poetic licence as the beach we were on today was all pebbles but I love watching the waves and hearing their soothing sound:-) hugs Jan xx

Heidi Sands

Date: 7/23/2017 4:05:00 PM

Oh wow , perfect Jan. A soothing Haiku with such detail in that ending :) A FAV.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/23/2017 4:06:00 PM

Thanks Heidi:-) we went for a beach walk this morning but it is a pebble beach so the poem is written purely with poetic licence:-) hugs Jan xx