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On the grassy banks of a woodland stream I heard the melodic warbling of birds in flight as I basked in the warmth of sunlight's gleam where oaks and maples reached great height I heard the melodic warbling of birds in flight A breeze whispered to me on that day in Fall where oaks and maples reached great height It called her name, Adrianne; a love I recall A breeze whispered to me on that day in Fall Each waft held fragrance of her jasmine hair It called her name, Adrianne, a love I recall I walked this winding path with my lady fair Each waft held fragrance of her jasmine hair She was in my arms again, as we swayed I walked this winding path with my lady fair Sweet memories of Adrianne will never fade. She was in my arms again, as we swayed. As I basked in the warmth of sunlight's gleam, Sweet memories of Adrianne will never fade On the grassy banks of a woodland stream. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ October 6th, 2017 Write Me A Pantoum Contest Sponsor: Kim Rodriguez

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Date: 10/19/2017 8:08:00 PM
Lovely, WINNING poem, Lin! Janice
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Date: 10/23/2017 4:42:00 PM
Thank you, Janice.
Date: 10/19/2017 2:40:00 PM
Miss Lin, You are such a talented and gifted writer. It sooo romantic. You know I love to write romance and love poems. I wish I could write in this genre as good as you. Congratulations on 2nd place win. It was well deserved:-) Alexis
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Date: 10/23/2017 4:42:00 PM
Alexis..Thanks so very much for the lovely compliments.
Date: 10/19/2017 12:33:00 PM
Dropping back to say many congrats on your win Line its wonderful to read this gem again:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 10/23/2017 4:41:00 PM
Thanks very much, Jan.
Date: 10/19/2017 7:40:00 AM
Congrats, Lin!
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Date: 10/23/2017 4:41:00 PM
Thanks a lot, Dale.
Date: 10/19/2017 5:05:00 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved win Lin, beautiful poem, a joy to read. :))
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Lin Lane
Date: 10/23/2017 4:40:00 PM
Thank you.
Date: 10/18/2017 9:26:00 PM
Congratulations Lin on your 2nd place win with your excellent poem.
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Date: 10/23/2017 4:39:00 PM
Thanks, Susan.
Date: 10/18/2017 9:01:00 PM
A lovely write! Congrats on your 2nd place win, Lin!
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Lin Lane
Date: 10/23/2017 4:39:00 PM
Thanks, Kim.
Date: 10/8/2017 11:51:00 AM
Triple Wowsa! Don't know a pantoum from a peanut, but I love a love lullabye (it is, to my eye). ~ john
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Date: 10/8/2017 12:00:00 PM
aww, thanks so very much, John. Love the phrase, 'love lullabye...with a 'e' lol
Date: 10/7/2017 9:43:00 PM
Sorry! I meant ‘Lin’.
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Date: 10/8/2017 11:59:00 AM
You can call me whatever with comments such as you just left below. lol Thank you.
Date: 10/7/2017 9:40:00 PM
This poem is admirable and pleasing in many ways: in the immediacy of the beautiful images; the spare, effective, evocative words and phrases; the rhymes and meter; the skill in constructing to the form; the whole combined into a true work of art. Well written, Kim.
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Date: 10/8/2017 11:59:00 AM
I really appreciate the detailed remarks on this one, Geoffrey. Thanks very much.
Date: 10/7/2017 9:11:00 AM
Lin, such a sweet and romantic poem; I love the way you brought it together at the end. Good luck in the contest.
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Date: 10/8/2017 11:58:00 AM
Many thanks for your kind comments, John.
Date: 10/7/2017 7:09:00 AM
Yes! A fabulously well written Pantoum my friend! I really loved reading your delightful poem here this morning! The warmth you have created within this poem is astounding Lin, Adrianne sounds like such a wondrous name! Beautifully crafted piece, written flawlessly! Great Work!!
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Lin Lane
Date: 10/8/2017 11:58:00 AM
Thanks ever so much, Russell. I truly appreciate your grand comments. I love the name, Adrianne, as well.
Date: 10/7/2017 3:39:00 AM
Love pantoums. Especially when written in such a manner that it flows so naturally that it seems nothing is being repeated. Yours does that. It's beautiful. Good luck in the contest.
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Lin Lane
Date: 10/8/2017 11:57:00 AM
Thank you, Darren, for such wonderful remarks.
Date: 10/6/2017 2:41:00 PM
a form I don't believe I have ever written a poem in...seems from reading you have mastered it, this is a really nice poem...good luck
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Date: 10/8/2017 11:57:00 AM
You, dear Frederick, must write in Pantoum form. You'd have no trouble in succeeding with the challenge. Thanks very much.
Date: 10/6/2017 12:11:00 PM
A really tough form done so effortlessly, or so it seems, well done Ms. Lin...
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Date: 10/8/2017 11:56:00 AM
Thanks for your glowing comments, Charlie.
Date: 10/6/2017 10:58:00 AM
She must have been some woman... great poem Lin
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Date: 10/6/2017 11:01:00 AM
I hear tell she was a beauty. Thanks, Tim.
Date: 10/6/2017 10:44:00 AM
An absolute gem of a romantic pantoum Lin. i so love this form and your vivid imagery is delightful:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 10/6/2017 11:01:00 AM
Thank you, Jan. I love the form, too. It's a challenge, but worthwhile when it all comes together in the last verse.

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