Lin Lane Poet Pantoum

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On the Banks of a Woodland Stream

On the grassy banks of a woodland stream
I heard the melodic warbling of birds in flight
as I basked in the warmth of sunlight's gleam
where oaks and maples reached great height

I heard the melodic warbling of birds in flight
A breeze whispered to me on that day in Fall
where oaks and maples reached great height
It called her name, Adrianne; a love I recall

A breeze whispered to me on that day in Fall
Each waft held fragrance of her jasmine hair
It called her name, Adrianne, a love I recall
I walked this winding path with my lady fair 

Each waft held fragrance of her jasmine hair
She was in my arms again, as we swayed
I walked this winding path with my lady fair
Sweet memories of Adrianne will never fade.

She was in my arms again, as we swayed.
As I basked in the warmth of sunlight's gleam,
Sweet memories of Adrianne will never fade
On the grassy banks of a woodland stream.


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October 6th, 2017
Write Me A Pantoum Contest
Sponsor: Kim Rodriguez

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Janice Canerdy October 19, 2017 at 8:08 PM Lovely, WINNING poem, Lin! Janice Lin Lane October 23, 2017 at 4:42 PM Thank you, Janice.

Alexis Y. October 19, 2017 at 2:40 PM Miss Lin, You are such a talented and gifted writer. It sooo romantic. You know I love to write romance and love poems. I wish I could write in this genre as good as you. Congratulations on 2nd place win. It was well deserved:-) Alexis Lin Lane October 23, 2017 at 4:42 PM Alexis..Thanks so very much for the lovely compliments.

Jan Allison October 19, 2017 at 12:33 PM Dropping back to say many congrats on your win Line its wonderful to read this gem again:-) hugs Jan xx Lin Lane October 23, 2017 at 4:41 PM Thanks very much, Jan.

Dale Gregory Cozart October 19, 2017 at 7:40 AM Congrats, Lin! Lin Lane October 23, 2017 at 4:41 PM Thanks a lot, Dale.

Roy Pett October 19, 2017 at 5:05 AM Congratulations on your well deserved win Lin, beautiful poem, a joy to read. :)) Lin Lane October 23, 2017 at 4:40 PM Thank you.

Susan Ashley October 18, 2017 at 9:26 PM Congratulations Lin on your 2nd place win with your excellent poem. Lin Lane October 23, 2017 at 4:39 PM Thanks, Susan.

Kim Rodrigues October 18, 2017 at 9:01 PM A lovely write! Congrats on your 2nd place win, Lin! Lin Lane October 23, 2017 at 4:39 PM Thanks, Kim.

Lim'Rik Flats October 8, 2017 at 11:51 AM Triple Wowsa! Don't know a pantoum from a peanut, but I love a love lullabye (it is, to my eye). ~ john Lin Lane October 8, 2017 at 12:00 PM aww, thanks so very much, John. Love the phrase, 'love lullabye...with a 'e' lol

Geoffrey Brewer October 7, 2017 at 9:43 PM Sorry! I meant ‘Lin’. Lin Lane October 8, 2017 at 11:59 AM You can call me whatever with comments such as you just left below. lol Thank you.

Geoffrey Brewer October 7, 2017 at 9:40 PM This poem is admirable and pleasing in many ways: in the immediacy of the beautiful images; the spare, effective, evocative words and phrases; the rhymes and meter; the skill in constructing to the form; the whole combined into a true work of art. Well written, Kim. Lin Lane October 8, 2017 at 11:59 AM I really appreciate the detailed remarks on this one, Geoffrey. Thanks very much.

John Gondolf October 7, 2017 at 9:11 AM Lin, such a sweet and romantic poem; I love the way you brought it together at the end. Good luck in the contest. Lin Lane October 8, 2017 at 11:58 AM Many thanks for your kind comments, John.

Russell Sivey October 7, 2017 at 7:09 AM Yes! A fabulously well written Pantoum my friend! I really loved reading your delightful poem here this morning! The warmth you have created within this poem is astounding Lin, Adrianne sounds like such a wondrous name! Beautifully crafted piece, written flawlessly! Great Work!! Lin Lane October 8, 2017 at 11:58 AM Thanks ever so much, Russell. I truly appreciate your grand comments. I love the name, Adrianne, as well.

Darren White October 7, 2017 at 3:39 AM Love pantoums. Especially when written in such a manner that it flows so naturally that it seems nothing is being repeated. Yours does that. It's beautiful. Good luck in the contest. Lin Lane October 8, 2017 at 11:57 AM Thank you, Darren, for such wonderful remarks.

Frederic Parker October 6, 2017 at 2:41 PM a form I don't believe I have ever written a poem in...seems from reading you have mastered it, this is a really nice poem...good luck Lin Lane October 8, 2017 at 11:57 AM You, dear Frederick, must write in Pantoum form. You'd have no trouble in succeeding with the challenge. Thanks very much.

Charlie Smith October 6, 2017 at 12:11 PM A really tough form done so effortlessly, or so it seems, well done Ms. Lin... Lin Lane October 8, 2017 at 11:56 AM Thanks for your glowing comments, Charlie.

Tim Smith October 6, 2017 at 10:58 AM She must have been some woman... great poem Lin Lin Lane October 6, 2017 at 11:01 AM I hear tell she was a beauty. Thanks, Tim.

Jan Allison October 6, 2017 at 10:44 AM An absolute gem of a romantic pantoum Lin. i so love this form and your vivid imagery is delightful:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx Lin Lane October 6, 2017 at 11:01 AM Thank you, Jan. I love the form, too. It's a challenge, but worthwhile when it all comes together in the last verse.