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On Move

I have been on the move since birth No idea where I am headed to Not sure what will happen next No clue when my journey will end I walk on despite obstacles making friends, enjoying scenery Mind filled with memories Amidst laughing and crying I walk on.. For Contest Name : Workshop: Adjectives Deleted Sponsor : Jack Webster 3rd place 21.06.2021

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Christuraj Alex

Date: 7/24/2021 10:39:00 AM

Great, indeed!

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 7/13/2021 1:40:00 PM

Back with congratulations on this win. Enjoy your win with blessings as you write away..........

Sotto Poet

Date: 7/12/2021 7:39:00 AM

Congratulations on a well deserved win

Christuraj Alex

Date: 7/12/2021 3:37:00 AM

Amidst laughing and crying I walk on.. Beautiful Words. Congratulations!

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 6/30/2021 8:56:00 AM

A wonderful write. In life, all we have are our memories. Hold on to the good ones and let the bad ones go. Have a blessed day.................

Rama Balasubramanian
Date: 6/30/2021 9:44:00 AM

Thanks. You too enjoy your day

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 6/23/2021 10:20:00 AM

Hello Rama, I hope you are having a nice day. obstacles block many of us from moving forward. the key is to find a road not taken. then move on. Yes I agree move on. blessings. Myfriend.

Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 6/23/2021 4:09:00 PM

Hello Rama, I am glad you do like it. I am glad that you are fine. I will. You enjoy your evening . God bless my friend.

Rama Balasubramanian
Date: 6/23/2021 12:06:00 PM

WoW! What an inspiring idea, to go on a road not taken... Loved it. I am fine Darlene, hope the same about you. Have a wonderful day ahead friend. Take care, God bless!

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 6/21/2021 8:14:00 PM

Nicely done!

Joe Dimino

Date: 6/21/2021 1:50:00 PM

For sure; everything one does becomes a perminant part of us. Well said, Rama!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/21/2021 12:39:00 PM

I do see an adjective in here, my friend. "smooth" but the rest seems just fine! I think the sponsor said he would accept articles such as a and the. I do not consider them as adjectives myself though in a way they are!! Good job.

Daniel Turner

Date: 6/21/2021 7:02:00 AM

The word "the" is always considered an adjective. I do love the poem though. Rama and i would not change a thing. Writing a good poem is more important than winning a contest!

Rama Balasubramanian
Date: 6/21/2021 7:09:00 AM

I agree. Will see if I can write another one for contest. Inthe meanwhile, I am submitting this only. Thanks for pointing out the mistake. God bless you

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 6/21/2021 4:41:00 AM

One ought to focus on the symbolism of your poem and not on the " Walking" which may be perceived also as a gerund! A profound message, dear Rama.

Rama Balasubramanian
Date: 6/21/2021 7:10:00 AM

Thanks for your compliment. Take care. God bless!

Tom Cunningham

Date: 6/21/2021 4:30:00 AM

Walking can be an adjective, but it is more commonly used as a verb or noun. Depends whether or not the sponsor sees it as a verb or noun. Good luck in the contest Tom

Tom Cunningham
Date: 6/21/2021 5:33:00 AM

If I were you Rama I'd change the title too. Tom

Rama Balasubramanian
Date: 6/21/2021 4:36:00 AM

Thanks for pointing out. Will change the poem. Have a wonderful day ahead friend