Rama Balasubramanian Poet Free verse

On Move

I have been on the move since birth
No idea where I am headed to
Not sure what will happen next
No clue when my journey will end

I walk on despite obstacles 
making friends, enjoying scenery
Mind filled with memories
Amidst laughing and crying I walk on..

For 
Contest Name : Workshop: Adjectives Deleted
Sponsor : Jack Webster
3rd place
21.06.2021

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Christuraj Alex July 24, 2021 at 10:39 AM Great, indeed!

Paula Goldsmith July 13, 2021 at 1:40 PM Back with congratulations on this win. Enjoy your win with blessings as you write away..........

Sotto Poet July 12, 2021 at 7:39 AM Congratulations on a well deserved win

Christuraj Alex July 12, 2021 at 3:37 AM Amidst laughing and crying I walk on.. Beautiful Words. Congratulations!

Paula Goldsmith June 30, 2021 at 8:56 AM A wonderful write. In life, all we have are our memories. Hold on to the good ones and let the bad ones go. Have a blessed day................. Rama Balasubramanian June 30, 2021 at 9:44 AM Thanks. You too enjoy your day

Darlene De Beaulieu June 23, 2021 at 10:20 AM Hello Rama, I hope you are having a nice day. obstacles block many of us from moving forward. the key is to find a road not taken. then move on. Yes I agree move on. blessings. Myfriend. Darlene De Beaulieu June 23, 2021 at 4:09 PM Hello Rama, I am glad you do like it. I am glad that you are fine. I will. You enjoy your evening . God bless my friend. Rama Balasubramanian June 23, 2021 at 12:06 PM WoW! What an inspiring idea, to go on a road not taken... Loved it. I am fine Darlene, hope the same about you. Have a wonderful day ahead friend. Take care, God bless!

Kim Rodrigues June 21, 2021 at 8:14 PM Nicely done!

Joseph P. DiMino June 21, 2021 at 1:50 PM For sure; everything one does becomes a perminant part of us. Well said, Rama!

Andrea Dietrich June 21, 2021 at 12:39 PM I do see an adjective in here, my friend. "smooth" but the rest seems just fine! I think the sponsor said he would accept articles such as a and the. I do not consider them as adjectives myself though in a way they are!! Good job.

Daniel Turner June 21, 2021 at 7:02 AM The word "the" is always considered an adjective. I do love the poem though. Rama and i would not change a thing. Writing a good poem is more important than winning a contest! Rama Balasubramanian June 21, 2021 at 7:09 AM I agree. Will see if I can write another one for contest. Inthe meanwhile, I am submitting this only. Thanks for pointing out the mistake. God bless you

Demetrios Trifiatis June 21, 2021 at 4:41 AM One ought to focus on the symbolism of your poem and not on the " Walking" which may be perceived also as a gerund! A profound message, dear Rama. Rama Balasubramanian June 21, 2021 at 7:10 AM Thanks for your compliment. Take care. God bless!

Tom Cunningham June 21, 2021 at 4:30 AM Walking can be an adjective, but it is more commonly used as a verb or noun. Depends whether or not the sponsor sees it as a verb or noun. Good luck in the contest Tom Tom Cunningham June 21, 2021 at 5:33 AM If I were you Rama I'd change the title too. Tom Rama Balasubramanian June 21, 2021 at 4:36 AM Thanks for pointing out. Will change the poem. Have a wonderful day ahead friend