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Old World

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I've turned on the light my eyes move to focus this world can not be bleak no more the deep sounds tremble helicopters pass by media scattered abrupt as if a hellish creature roars I'll tell you a story about a world, an old world there's not just one world In this place there is no such thing as space it all ascends with grace ...them and I included Our own entire journey here, the past but not all has been forgotten though adapted and changed the downtrodden can be as powerful as them all sadly the instinct paths have been corrupted watching the numbers on our backs sooner or later fall A small group of us are making a stand we've put aside what we've discovered contradictive differences within our skin Our heartbeats as a collective it's our destiny to bring down our hierarchy ...stop the recording... So I thought, "change" hmm one once wished from the rubble between my feet to the love one that sleeps Did I cause this? Was this inevitable, it this what means to "be"? Do I just adapt to change, who are we truly to have a say... I suppose I can take comfort in knowing The good will always prevail.

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Date: 3/24/2024 4:24:00 PM
It is so refreshing my friend to see you gathering a fan base as well you should. Once word gets out of your talent it will steadily grow and your recognition will be as you deserve. I am in rapture over your words here. It's never futile to form unity to bring about good, I guess in history good always eventually prevails but sometimes it takes a long time. . Best wishes my friend Your presentation is haunting your diction perfect and your words incite much thought. .. Wen
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Lee Norton
Date: 3/24/2024 5:28:00 PM
Thank you so much for your kind words, Wen. Your encouragement means a lot to me. It's heartening to hear that my work resonates, so please to have found a platform that allows me to express, others weren't so accepting... Your support is truly appreciated, very best wishes to you as well. Xx
Date: 3/21/2024 7:01:00 PM
Beautiful poem. Loved it, and as well as the video and recitation.
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Lee Norton
Date: 3/21/2024 7:15:00 PM
Thankyou ever so much :)) means a lot to see.
Date: 3/16/2024 5:46:00 PM
LOVE IT. Viva la révolution! I agree with below's comment.
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Candide Diderot
Date: 3/19/2024 1:15:00 AM
You're onto something outside the squares. Stick with this format - it is fabulously innovative for such a mothballed corner of the world. I could not help but think of segments of an Evanescence video with cityscape/falling visuals, "Bring Me to Life". I think you are onto something and I'd like to see more of this CGI format incorporated with the poetic. Outstanding. I will add it amazes me this poem of yours, with the elaborate time and effort with editing, etc, along with the poetic words, did not receive POTD.
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Lee Norton
Date: 3/16/2024 6:12:00 PM
Thank you for this :)) Great!
Date: 3/11/2024 12:08:00 PM
Fascinating skillset you have with cgi and composition. Exciting to see this kind of thing coming up in the poetry here.
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Lee Norton
Date: 3/11/2024 12:19:00 PM
Ah great, that's wonderful to see ...very much enjoyed the creative process, given my first poem written (early 2000's) well deserved make over lol. Thankyou always for your comment.

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