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Poetry/Sonnet/Haiku-Senryu/Monoku/Oh, Forgive Me
Copyright Protected, ID 11-1598-425-17
All Rights Reserved, 2023, Constance La France

Written, November 17, 2023
For the International Contest, Sonnet Ku-Ku
Sponsor, Charles Messina, Judged 01/02/2024

First Place

"just the other day, I came across a picture of you with your horse, and I was amazed to see how much we look alike: could it be true that you are just words upon cold stone; my beautiful and kind Jacqueline " Quote by _Constance Mom, I pray forgiveness as it was me, I had to let go- it dwells in my mind; it was me mother who said set her free, I was the one who had papers to sign. There was nothing I could do to change fate, I would have mom, even given my life; the decision so hard but could not wait, my heart was stabbed with a sharp blood-soaked knife. With each gasping, breath you took in this world, I asked God is there nothing to be done? I hated what had to be- it still whirls, I asked God why I have to be the one? Can you forgive me mom for letting go? Mom, you were so kind and I loved you so. had to let you go and mom it still twirls and whirls ... a knife stabbed my heart with each gasping I kept asking God- is there nothing that can be done

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Silent One

Date: 1/6/2024 2:31:00 PM

Great use of form..Congratulations on your placement in the contest..

Constance La France
Date: 1/9/2024 11:23:00 AM

Silent, thank you so much for the compliment and congratulations, Constance

Charles Messina

Date: 1/2/2024 7:57:00 AM

Constance, this touched me so deeply. When my dad got in a car accident over 10 years ago, my siblings and I had to make that decision. It is heartbreaking to let someone you love- let go, even though it is the best thing to do. (tears) Congratulations on your top win! Happy New Year...Blessings ~Charlie

Constance La France
Date: 1/9/2024 11:25:00 AM

Charlie, thank you so much for the contest and my placement, and for the compliment, comment, congratulations and for sharing, Constance

Unseeking Seeker

Date: 1/2/2024 7:56:00 AM

Oooooh - too sad. You’ve penned it so,so artistically, Constance. A fav

Constance La France
Date: 1/9/2024 11:26:00 AM

Seeker, thank you so much for the comment, compliment and FAV, Constance

Joe Maverick

Date: 11/20/2023 2:54:00 PM

We are none perfect, all of us face different Trials of lifes course..I pray for your strengthening and solace Constance, in this as I to have regrets...Yet its not clear cut.? Not for Any we have some choice, yet unforseen events Have untoward bearing on us, I welcome Also prayer if you find time, I must get to Grip with things btw..Yet I am dealing with stuff That stops me (its why i have not finalised the Contest yet) Constance in which you already Have a place, I hope to get sorted out?

Constance La France
Date: 11/21/2023 2:24:00 PM

Joe, thank you so much for the visit, comment and sharing, sorry things have not been going well for you, and judge your contest when you are able, prayers for you and blessings

Joe Maverick
Date: 11/20/2023 2:55:00 PM

But its not been a great year.'

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 11/17/2023 4:52:00 PM

I found this poem riveting, gut wrenching and raw with emotion. This was beautifully written about a difficult situation and a dilemma many of us face. Your poem spoke to me deeply. I can imagine the lingering pain and doubt you created with your words. A masterpiece! have a splendid evening, Sara

Constance La France
Date: 11/17/2023 5:40:00 PM

Sara, thank you so much for your compassion, compliment and, comment, it was on of the hardest thing I have ever done, but there have been many others, in the end I knew my mom loved life and would not want to live like a shadow of the person she was , blessings