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can you tell me? do eyelids rest when closed - or does effort increase? it all feels spring loaded to me as I sit here, I don't want the answer to that no - let us set that aside where do we look with closed eyes? or in sleep? for sight has not been explained to me or else I didn't listen... so here in semi conscious wonder I lay with closed eyes, casting my gaze casting my thoughts willing for something to catch hold out of sight, but tugging just enough that I sense it like the flicker of an eyelid I've not mentioned ears but they just fell silent I hadn't registered the noise before the contrast if we oscillate it's hard to get a bearing we let everything rest we don't question it just expect the cycle of wakefulness and sleep not knowing which feeds the other maybe don't answer my questions not right now

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Date: 2/9/2024 12:38:00 PM
I do believe the lids rest, Dilly, after all that blinking, except during rem?? Congratulations on your win! Interesting perspective on Rendon's oil portrait.
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Date: 2/10/2024 12:26:00 AM
Thank you Anaya, I'm sure they must - the more you think about eyelids the less they make sense despite the simplicity of the concept they are very sophisticated x
Date: 2/9/2024 11:22:00 AM
A dreamy quality to it, enticing me to give in to the ebb and flow of wakefulness and sleep... Have a good weekend, DD. ;)
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Date: 2/9/2024 11:24:00 AM
Thank you Suzette! I imagined it as a conversation in the dark whilst falling asleep - so glad the vibe came through x
Date: 2/7/2024 10:23:00 PM
An interesting poem. I like my eyelids best when they don't feel droopy. The poem concentrates on one facial feature but says much more about emotion. Thank you for this poem.
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Date: 2/8/2024 2:56:00 PM
Thanks Hilda, glad you like this one
Date: 2/7/2024 10:05:00 AM
Congrats for your win in the contest D. Another wonderful Ekphrasis. You certainly are a master at these. Best wishes Wen
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Date: 2/7/2024 10:14:00 AM
You're sweet Wen, thanks! Thought I'd keep my hand in even if I'm not writing for many contests now x

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