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"Ode to My Father" - written and submitted into "Ode Poetry Contest", 4/2/2024

Regina Mcintosh, sponsor

“The heart of a father is the masterpiece of nature.” Prevost Abbe
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Beneath the vast and endless canvas of night, A father’s memory, now a distant light, I yearned for a farewell more profound, As he journeyed to the world beyond. From the precipice of destiny, he tumbled low, His head kissed the ground in a tale of woe, In a hushed repose, like a withering bloom, My father’s essence, a flickering candle in the gloom. In those final days, all memories seemed to disperse, Forgotten faces, familiar voices, in a universe. He saw me as a nurse, guiding him through, A kind stranger helping, a role he thought true. I showed him photos of our shared moments and glee, Reminded him of family and friends, but it was a mystery. To him, we were helpful strangers, caring and kind, He had forgotten it all, left memories behind. I wonder, what thoughts swirled in his mind, Who did he believe himself to be, in that bind? From distant lands and countries he did speak, Places vividly remembered, but the faces grew weak. In a world where memories danced and broke, Leaving me to wonder, what stories did he invoke? And then, one day, he took his flight, Becoming a star, a beacon of light. In the skies, a symbol of our days of play, How strong he was, in his gentle way, For his little girl, he stood so tall, But there he lay, like a leaf’s slow fall. I wonder, in the silence of the night, If he remembers me in that celestial light.

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Date: 4/28/2024 2:05:00 PM
such memories, such heart, such poetry inspires, enlightens, embraces with love that can't be forgotten, ever, - with all my heart, I love this and you. God bless you and congrats my friend, love, Gina
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/28/2024 6:18:00 PM
thanks for your heartfelt and compassionate words, dear Gina. I'm grateful you loved this poem and I appreciate your outpouring of love. I'm enjoying our 'sisterly' love and connection. Have a great evening, hugs & blessings, Sara
Date: 4/25/2024 8:51:00 AM
oh it's so sad that he lost his memories. He had to have been so marvelous. I wish I had had a father figure like this one. Mine I did not get to live with but I went to his funeral about four years ago, and I 'm glad that I got to remember him with relatives I did not grow up with. Congrats on your well deserved win. You used such lovely images in this poem
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/25/2024 6:18:00 PM
how said for you, Andrea, that you did not get to live with your biological father. Going to his funeral filled an empty hole in your heart & I'm glad about that. Thank you for sponsoring this contest and for my place. I'm grateful for your congratulatory words. Hugs & blessings, Sara
Date: 4/25/2024 6:19:00 AM
I yearned for a farewell more profound… He saw me as a nurse, guiding him through, A kind stranger helping, a role he thought true…love those beautiful final verses…when my Grandma died I found myself especially remembering the grandma she was, leaving the disabilty behind. Blessings! Congratulations on a great placement, Sara! Hugs ~ Kim
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/25/2024 6:17:00 PM
thanks for your compassionate remarks, Kim. I agree...we do tend to remember the 'person that was' Remembering my father before his stroke lightens my load. Thanks for your congratulatory words. Have a blessed evening, hugs, Sara
Date: 4/8/2024 6:38:00 PM
I am sorry you lost him that way. I am sure he remembers you now in that 'celestial light- condolences
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Date: 4/3/2024 1:33:00 AM
Of course he remembers you, as also God who is everywhere. There is no dementia in Heaven Great tribute to your father.
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/3/2024 4:10:00 AM
aww, what a wonderful thing to say Victor. "There is no dementia in heaven." I'll remember that and hold onto those gentle and comforting words. Enjoy your day, Sara
Date: 4/2/2024 8:28:00 PM
This is brilliantly penned, Sara. Right into my Faves... Heartbreakingly, poignantly honest and real. Thanks for posting it, Gershon
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/3/2024 4:10:00 AM
awww, thank you Gershon, for your positive comments. I appreciate your visit and am humbly grateful for the fave. Have a pleasant day, Sara
Date: 4/2/2024 7:17:00 PM
The poem delves into the profound emotional journey of losing a loved one to memory loss and eventual death. It delves into the mixture of bitter and sweet feelings that arise from witnessing a father slowly lose his mental faculties and grasp on memories that slip away. Ultimately, the poem finds solace in the concept of the father's presence in the afterlife. The structure and language of the poem evoke a deep sense of nostalgia and sorrow. The choice of words is carefully crafted to convey the speaker's intense emotions as they navigate the complexities of loss and memory. The poem also employs literary devices such as metaphor (e.g., comparing the father's memory to a distant light) and personification (e.g., describing the father's essence as a flickering candle in the darkness) to enhance the imagery and paint a vivid picture of the father's decline.
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/3/2024 4:13:00 AM
dearest Sotto-I appreciate your in depth read of my poem, especially the 'bitter' and 'sweet' memories comment. I'm grateful you seem to understand the underlying meaning and emotions within my images, literary devices, etc. Your input is always spot on and helpful. Hope you're having a wonderful week. hugs, your poetess friend in Texas, Sara
Date: 4/2/2024 7:12:00 PM
An emotion filled poem my dear friend. To lose a loved one is a tragic thing. but to watch them slowly fade is unbearable. Hugs to you for your loss, Sara.
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/3/2024 4:09:00 AM
You're right, Jerry. Watching a loved one fade is gut wrenching and gives one such a helpless feeling. Thanks for your kind and caring words. Enjoy your day, Sara
Date: 4/2/2024 6:47:00 PM
Heart wrenching. Both my grandparents succumbed to Alzheimer’s disease. It is a cruel disease. Sometimes music will bring them back for a spell. Well expressed and sensitive.
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/3/2024 4:08:00 AM
thank you, Richard, for your thoughtful comments. Alzheimer's is a thief for sure and cruel. Hadn't thought about music...but I've read that it does bring folks back for a spell. Have a pleasant day, Sara
Date: 4/2/2024 5:19:00 PM
He'll definitely remember up there. Now a star he's watching and shooting for your shine. It's such as sad thing not to remember what made our heart tickle at some point but it's also a stage in life we cannot bypass. This is a lovely ode to your father. "In a world where memories danced and broke." Loved this line. Some memories break even without us having amnesia.
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/3/2024 4:06:00 AM
thank you, Tonye, for your touching, kind, and insightful words. I agree....sometimes memories break without dementia or amnesia. Have a pleasant Wednesday, hugs, Sara
Date: 4/2/2024 4:06:00 PM
Sara, this is very profound. This poem reaches the botton of my heart. That's the question ..maybe he remembérs that celestian light. It doesnt matter until you remember him
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/3/2024 4:05:00 AM
good to see you, Maria! I appreciate your visit and your thoughtful words. Always a joy reading your posts. Have a splendid day, hugs, Sara
Date: 4/2/2024 10:36:00 AM
Nice ode to remember your father. Fits the genre of a great ode.
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/3/2024 4:04:00 AM
thank you, Jay. I appreciate your positive comments, especially about the 'ode genre.' Means a lot to me. Enjoy your day, Sara
Date: 4/2/2024 10:35:00 AM
An emotional write Sara and a beautiful tribute to your father. I'm sure he's keeping watch over you. Tom
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/2/2024 6:03:00 PM
thank you for visiting, Tom, and for your kind words. I do feel his presence sometimes. Have a great evening, Sara
Date: 4/2/2024 9:01:00 AM
Dear Sara, What a heartfelt Ode and a wonderful tribute to a cherished relationship and the bittersweet journey of loss and remembrance. I loved how, through your lyrical prose, you capture the depth of emotions surrounding the passing of a loved one, the complexities of memory, and the enduring bond between father and daughter. Sara, what a deeply moving piece. - Blessings, Daniel
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Date: 4/2/2024 8:17:00 AM
These lines resonate with me and the relationship I had with my father. He was my hero and never let me down, only in that he passed too soon, and that too, was not his fault. Emotionally moving, Sara.
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Date: 4/2/2024 8:01:00 AM
Heartfelt poem Sara. This ode to your father echoes in treasured memories. Eternal bond!
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Date: 4/2/2024 5:50:00 AM
Sara, Beautiful! Your poem evokes a sense of loss and longing, as you grapple with the fading memories of your father and the inevitable passage of time. Yet, there's a tender acknowledgment of his strength and the enduring bond with your father. Here's to your father! Don
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Date: 4/2/2024 4:33:00 AM
Oh Sara my heart is mush right now, and as a tear falls down, I recall my own dear dad, and how gentle he was, both sensitive and kind. a fav for me, straight to my Sacred book it goes, xo
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