Jan Allison Poet Ottava rima

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Oblivious To Others

Your high opinion is all that matters
you think the rest of us are merely fools
High handedness leaves others in tatters
can’t you play fair and follow the set rules?
Harsh words and one’s self confidence shatters
we aren’t stupid so don’t treat us like mules!
I’ve seen your mistakes, what is it you fear?
No one is perfect, not even you dear!


Rhyme scheme a,b,a,b,a,b,c,c
Checked with how many syllables

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Constance La France May 22, 2017 at 8:34 AM Jan congratulations on your win in my contest with this wonderful write and i love that image too Jan Allison May 22, 2017 at 2:10 PM Thanks so much Constance I enjoyed the challenge:-) I have written my art poem based on that image:-) hugs jan xx

Paul Callus May 21, 2017 at 3:14 PM Congratulations on placing first, Jan!! Not a Limerick, but an Ottava Rima...more challenging, but you tackled it with impressive results! As to the content, I believe I know who you're referring to:) Hugs // paul Jan Allison May 21, 2017 at 3:50 PM Your comment made me smile Paul and I do love love the limerick form but have fun trying new styles:-) I'm so glad Constance liked this one:-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May May 21, 2017 at 9:10 AM Congrats on your win Jan Jan Allison May 21, 2017 at 9:49 AM Cheers Joseph:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper May 10, 2017 at 5:43 PM Oh, emotional and fierce goooood write, Jan good luck ~* Jan Allison May 12, 2017 at 12:57 PM Thanks eve it's my first attempt at this form I hope Constance likes it:-) hugs Jan xx

Reason A. Poteet May 9, 2017 at 6:49 PM A hard lesson to learn, humility and consideration for other people in our own struggle to be top dog. Great read, Jan. Jan Allison May 12, 2017 at 12:59 PM Thanks Reason and sadly some folks are totally oblivious to the feelings of other's:-( hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich May 8, 2017 at 5:59 PM very well done in this form, Jan. You are doing so many new things and now you have done an Ottava rima!! (the picture you put with this one. So funny. You should do your artwork piece on that picture) Jan Allison May 12, 2017 at 1:01 PM It's my first attempt at the form and I really enjoyed the challenge Andrea!:-) the pic went so well with it lol:-) hugs Jan xx

John Michaels May 6, 2017 at 3:31 AM Very well-written, Jan. I especially like the barbed final line! Best of luck in the contest. Regards, John. Jan Allison May 7, 2017 at 6:12 AM Yes I like that line too lol:-) hugs jan xx

Miraj Raha May 5, 2017 at 7:10 PM Yes well said Jan, no one is perfect and we all have our fears. Jan Allison May 5, 2017 at 7:12 PM True Miraj:-) hugs Jan xx

Lenna Walker May 5, 2017 at 1:29 PM That last line .... says it all and for those upon their high horse, it's a long long way to fall !! This is great Jan !! :) Jan Allison May 5, 2017 at 2:58 PM It sure is a long way to fall Lenna lol:-) Hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith May 5, 2017 at 12:56 PM I make mistakes everyday but it is not a reason to put me down. It is easy to criticize from high atop one's horse. Jan Allison May 5, 2017 at 1:02 PM Makes me think of the song 'oh lord its hard to be humble' lol:-) hugs jan xx

Arthur Vaso May 5, 2017 at 12:38 PM Very well written, and I am sure applies to many, and quite a few even on soup!! LOL Jan Allison May 5, 2017 at 1:01 PM This applies to one family member in particular who doesn't even access soup, but I agree it could apply to others:-( hugs Jan xx

Chris Green May 5, 2017 at 12:16 PM Some definitely only see and hear themselves, unfortunately many of us have to see and hear them too. Nicely expressed Jan. Jan Allison May 5, 2017 at 12:38 PM Oh so true and they simply will not listen to anyone else:-( thanks for dropping by Chris:-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane May 5, 2017 at 11:40 AM I wonder what it's like to be so oblivious that even with eyes wide open, some fail to see truths. Jan Allison May 5, 2017 at 11:49 AM ha ha ha Lin Unfortunately the one it is intended for doesn't even access poetry soup so she won't see 'Footloose' either:-( hugs Jan xx