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Your high opinion is all that matters you think the rest of us are merely fools High handedness leaves others in tatters can’t you play fair and follow the set rules? Harsh words and one’s self confidence shatters we aren’t stupid so don’t treat us like mules! I’ve seen your mistakes, what is it you fear? No one is perfect, not even you dear! Rhyme scheme a,b,a,b,a,b,c,c Checked with how many syllables Form O Contest Sponsored by Broken Wings 05~05~17

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Constance La France

Date: 5/22/2017 8:34:00 AM

Jan congratulations on your win in my contest with this wonderful write and i love that image too

Jan Allison
Date: 5/22/2017 2:10:00 PM

Thanks so much Constance I enjoyed the challenge:-) I have written my art poem based on that image:-) hugs jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 5/21/2017 3:14:00 PM

Congratulations on placing first, Jan!! Not a Limerick, but an Ottava Rima...more challenging, but you tackled it with impressive results! As to the content, I believe I know who you're referring to:) Hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 5/21/2017 3:50:00 PM

Your comment made me smile Paul and I do love love the limerick form but have fun trying new styles:-) I'm so glad Constance liked this one:-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May

Date: 5/21/2017 9:10:00 AM

Congrats on your win Jan

Jan Allison
Date: 5/21/2017 9:49:00 AM

Cheers Joseph:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 5/10/2017 5:43:00 PM

Oh, emotional and fierce goooood write, Jan good luck ~*

Jan Allison
Date: 5/12/2017 12:57:00 PM

Thanks eve it's my first attempt at this form I hope Constance likes it:-) hugs Jan xx

Reason A. Poteet

Date: 5/9/2017 6:49:00 PM

A hard lesson to learn, humility and consideration for other people in our own struggle to be top dog. Great read, Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/12/2017 12:59:00 PM

Thanks Reason and sadly some folks are totally oblivious to the feelings of other's:-( hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/8/2017 5:59:00 PM

very well done in this form, Jan. You are doing so many new things and now you have done an Ottava rima!! (the picture you put with this one. So funny. You should do your artwork piece on that picture)

Jan Allison
Date: 5/12/2017 1:01:00 PM

It's my first attempt at the form and I really enjoyed the challenge Andrea!:-) the pic went so well with it lol:-) hugs Jan xx

John Michaels

Date: 5/6/2017 3:31:00 AM

Very well-written, Jan. I especially like the barbed final line! Best of luck in the contest. Regards, John.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/7/2017 6:12:00 AM

Yes I like that line too lol:-) hugs jan xx

Miraj Raha

Date: 5/5/2017 7:10:00 PM

Yes well said Jan, no one is perfect and we all have our fears.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/5/2017 7:12:00 PM

True Miraj:-) hugs Jan xx

Lenna Walker

Date: 5/5/2017 1:29:00 PM

That last line .... says it all and for those upon their high horse, it's a long long way to fall !! This is great Jan !! :)

Jan Allison
Date: 5/5/2017 2:58:00 PM

It sure is a long way to fall Lenna lol:-) Hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 5/5/2017 12:56:00 PM

I make mistakes everyday but it is not a reason to put me down. It is easy to criticize from high atop one's horse.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/5/2017 1:02:00 PM

Makes me think of the song 'oh lord its hard to be humble' lol:-) hugs jan xx

Arthur Vaso

Date: 5/5/2017 12:38:00 PM

Very well written, and I am sure applies to many, and quite a few even on soup!! LOL

Jan Allison
Date: 5/5/2017 1:01:00 PM

This applies to one family member in particular who doesn't even access soup, but I agree it could apply to others:-( hugs Jan xx

Chris Green

Date: 5/5/2017 12:16:00 PM

Some definitely only see and hear themselves, unfortunately many of us have to see and hear them too. Nicely expressed Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/5/2017 12:38:00 PM

Oh so true and they simply will not listen to anyone else:-( thanks for dropping by Chris:-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane

Date: 5/5/2017 11:40:00 AM

I wonder what it's like to be so oblivious that even with eyes wide open, some fail to see truths.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/5/2017 11:49:00 AM

ha ha ha Lin Unfortunately the one it is intended for doesn't even access poetry soup so she won't see 'Footloose' either:-( hugs Jan xx