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He lies on a small bed. There are no friends. Nor is there a spouse with him in his last hours. All those he loved have passed on. Terror grips him; it’s all he knows. He starts to choke; a nurse comes running. Oblivion is swallowing him whole. Written 12/9/2015

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015

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Date: 1/25/2019 8:52:00 AM
Very nicely written!
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Date: 1/14/2016 10:03:00 PM
I enjoyed this one. not sure if intentional or not but very nice how the word "he" is at the top of the tree/arrow shaped poem by itself when the subject is in the most lonely portion of his life
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Date: 12/24/2015 10:58:00 PM
Sorry that I previously missed replying to this contest being finished. Congrats on your well deserved win my friend.
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Date: 12/20/2015 12:30:00 AM
Andrea, Congrats on your win In Rob Carmack's Oblivion contest. Love ~LINDA~
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Date: 12/19/2015 3:06:00 PM
Andrea,, Congrats on your Oblivion WIN **SKAT**
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Date: 12/19/2015 1:48:00 PM
congratulations, I thought this one was powerful
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Date: 12/15/2015 10:49:00 AM
Enjoyed this, Andrea. You know I like dark. I started a reverse on this but nothing came out. Love the last line. I have an Etheree I don't think you've seen, "Anesthesia."
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Date: 12/14/2015 7:14:00 PM
Frightening thought of dying by oneself.
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Date: 12/10/2015 8:30:00 PM
Yeah, luv it! A Fav!
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Date: 12/10/2015 5:31:00 PM
Enjoyed, Andrea!
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Date: 12/10/2015 3:42:00 PM
Wow...awesome Andrea...this is one of my die alone in Oblivion
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Date: 12/10/2015 10:51:00 AM
The drama in this scares me because it is all too real and possible for all of us. A realistic emotion that your pen sharply sends to the reader without use of multi verses - it is hard to be that effective and you did it. CayCay
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CayCay Jennings
Date: 12/10/2015 10:53:00 AM
Without knowing it, I just contradicting Ian - everyone is so different. CayCay
Date: 12/10/2015 8:57:00 AM
You did this well although the photo confused me.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 12/10/2015 9:14:00 AM
OMG, I put the sports picture with THIS one!!!
Date: 12/9/2015 11:48:00 PM
Such a powerful poem Andrea, it sure made me think, as I am sure it does all, of our future and growing old.
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Date: 12/9/2015 11:09:00 PM
This is so sad! I can picture this scene and it brings tears to my eyes. Great etheree, Andrea! Love, KIm
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Date: 12/9/2015 10:05:00 PM
wow, that really packs a lot of feeling in such a short write, it is amazing how a short form can produce a big punch. Nice one!
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Date: 12/9/2015 9:50:00 PM
Such a poignant write Andrea...well penned..
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Date: 12/9/2015 9:45:00 PM
Yikes! Terror came through in this write Andrea...don't know what contest its for but sure it will do great
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Date: 12/9/2015 9:41:00 PM
interesting take, death and loneliness two very powerful things to deal with...good luck in the contest.
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Date: 12/9/2015 9:30:00 PM
Wow Andrea,some pretty deep stuff! so raw I love it! gl in the contest:)-lu *smiles*
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Date: 12/9/2015 9:18:00 PM
Excellent Etheree. Good luck in the contest.
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Date: 12/9/2015 8:26:00 PM
very dark and well conceived Andrea. Should do well in the contest..
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Date: 12/9/2015 8:20:00 PM
i like it andrea
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