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~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ As the sands of time flow within the wind, upon currents of desert sea. Wandering souls of pharaohs transcend, as the sands of time flow within the wind. Mirages and reality twine and blend winds shrieking like banshees. As the sands of time flow within the wind, upon currents of desert sea. As sandcastles are built grain by grain, oasis of Egyptian dreams. To tumble and fall within the rain as sandcastles are built grain by grain. To be rebuilt time and time again, sweat and tears glue together the seams. As sandcastles are built grain by grain, oasis of Egyptian dreams.

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Bill Baker

Date: 3/11/2024 6:05:00 PM

A very unique and creative form within your free verse poetry, Sara. I enjoyed it and the repeating of the opening and closing lines of each verse. Lovely imagery and very mystic. Bill

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 3/11/2024 6:24:00 PM

thanks, hubby. I think you 'got' my poem...hugs, me

Paige Hind

Date: 3/11/2024 3:53:00 PM

Interesting... a journey through time

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 3/11/2024 6:24:00 PM

thanks, Paige..appreciate all your visits today...hugs, Sara

Daniel Caplin

Date: 3/9/2024 10:38:00 PM

Hi Sara , each day you compose the most exquisite poetry , you have the rare and amazing gift of transporting people to places they've never been , The lines "mirage and reality twine and blend , winds shrieking like banshees", simply stunning , Daniel

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 3/10/2024 5:23:00 AM

thank you, Daniel, for your sincere appreciation for my poems...I truly believe I'm just the conduit...glad to be a part of the process. I appreciate your complimentary and supportive words. Have a splendid day, Sara

Gershon Wolf

Date: 3/9/2024 7:08:00 PM

Love the rhythm and flow of this paean to Egyptian oases and dreams. Lilting and lyrical, gw

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 3/10/2024 5:22:00 AM

thanks, Gershon. Glad you were able to stop by. I appreciate 'lilting and lyrical.' Not seen the word 'lilting' in quite some time...thank you for that. enjoy your day, blessings, Sara

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 3/9/2024 6:45:00 PM

A lovely flow and singsong quality. I feel as if I too reside within the desert sands!

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 3/10/2024 5:21:00 AM

thanks for joining me in the desert today. I appreciate your visit and complimentary words, hugs, Sara

Tonye George

Date: 3/9/2024 3:15:00 PM

Lovely piece once again dear Sara.

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 3/9/2024 6:07:00 PM

thank you, Tonye! I'm delighted you dropped by. Have a pleasant evening, Sara

Silent One

Date: 3/9/2024 10:57:00 AM

Dear Sara, I felt that the metaphor of sandcastles being built grain by grain adds layers of meaning to the poem, symbolizing the human endeavour to create and shape our dreams amidst the shifting sands of time. The repetition of the phrase "grain by grain" emphasizes the painstaking effort and resilience required to build and rebuild our aspirations, even in the face of adversity... An excellent poem..

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 3/9/2024 6:06:00 PM

I am grateful, Silent One, for your visit and for your in depth read of my poem. Your insights were mindful and encouraging, especially 'rebuilding our aspirations, even in the face of adversity.' Thank you for those words. Have a pleasant evening, Sara

Jeanette Brewin

Date: 3/9/2024 8:52:00 AM

Beautiful. A lovely poem Sara. Well written.

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 3/9/2024 6:04:00 PM

thanks, Jeanette! I appreciate your visit and kind comments. enjoy your evening, hugs, Sara

Sotto Poet

Date: 3/9/2024 6:46:00 AM

Dear Sara, your imagery of the desert, specifically the sands of time, and the construction and destruction of sandcastles as a metaphor for the rise and fall of ancient civilizations is stunning. Your use of evocative diction creates a sense of mystery and timelessness. The repetition of the phrases "as the sands of time flow within the wind" and "as sandcastles are built grain by grain" and the cyclical nature of time and human efforts add to the mystical and dreamlike quality of the poem.

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 3/9/2024 6:04:00 PM

dearest Sotto--I appreciate your kind, complimentary words and in depth read of my poem. I'd hope to create a mystical read, so thank you for saying that. I am also deeply appreciative of your insight and help with this poem earlier today. You're a true poet friend for which I'm most grateful. Have a splendid evening, your poetess friend in Texas, Sara

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 3/9/2024 5:01:00 AM

Fabulous. I like how you used repetition to create the mood within this piece.

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 3/9/2024 6:02:00 PM

thank you for noticing, Richard. I appreciate your visit today. Wishing you a delightful evening, Sara